Little Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
You promised another root-based poem and you delivered. I enjoyed your choice of the Welsh form again and your extra notes on turtles as symbols and the subjects of mythology. I admired your internal and end rhymes and your "driftwood" analogy. More cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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You promised another root-based poem and you delivered. I enjoyed your choice of the Welsh form again and your extra notes on turtles as symbols and the subjects of mythology. I admired your internal and end rhymes and your "driftwood" analogy. More cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Joan, yup, as promised. I've got one more Welsh form to try.
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I mentioned to ciliverde that you have been inspired by the form just in case she was not aware. I hope there are more Animated Stills coming as well. Smiles- Joan
Comment from robyn corum
Tom,
First of all, the picture is FAB! *smile* Then, I loved this poem form - I have not seen it before - and you've put it to such great use here. It was a perfect choice for your subject. Great job on this one!!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Tom,
First of all, the picture is FAB! *smile* Then, I loved this poem form - I have not seen it before - and you've put it to such great use here. It was a perfect choice for your subject. Great job on this one!!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Robyn. It is a unique form. I glad you enjoyed it and my Turtke tree root picture.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Another great picture Tom. You have a good eye for catching these
animal stills with your camera. I think our only chance at something like that would be the Brislecone Pine stumps. They are said to be very old but not too many of them at that. LOL I have seen faces in tree bark before. This is another interesting Welch poem. Good work. Nancy
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Another great picture Tom. You have a good eye for catching these
animal stills with your camera. I think our only chance at something like that would be the Brislecone Pine stumps. They are said to be very old but not too many of them at that. LOL I have seen faces in tree bark before. This is another interesting Welch poem. Good work. Nancy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you so much Nancy. You never know what you may come across, but I delight when I find them. Sometimes I don't discover them until I look at my photographs.
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi TREISCHEL.
I love this photo, at first I could not decide if it was a real turtle or not until I read your notes.
This such a cool piece natures art.
A great poem and very well written. Lots of rhyming and flow without forcing the words.
Brenda
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Hi TREISCHEL.
I love this photo, at first I could not decide if it was a real turtle or not until I read your notes.
This such a cool piece natures art.
A great poem and very well written. Lots of rhyming and flow without forcing the words.
Brenda
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you very much Brenda. To think, I almost overlooked it, until my wife pointed it out.
Comment from Pantygynt
The complex rhymes suit this philosophically descriptive poetry very well. They have a music to them which typically Welsh and I am sure they would work absolutely brilliantly in the Welsh language.
No, Tom, don' go there -please.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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The complex rhymes suit this philosophically descriptive poetry very well. They have a music to them which typically Welsh and I am sure they would work absolutely brilliantly in the Welsh language.
No, Tom, don' go there -please.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you. Looking at just the names of the formats, which seem unpronounceable to my tongue, no chance of that. Lol.
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Just remember that "W's a vowel except when its not". When it is a vowel it sounds like the U in "put" as opposed to the U in "shut".
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Think I'll stick to simple English.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
An awrsome tribute to the old patient and wise turtle. Very interesting author notes about the turtle. A great photo of that turtle hidden in the roots.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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An awrsome tribute to the old patient and wise turtle. Very interesting author notes about the turtle. A great photo of that turtle hidden in the roots.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Sandra. Glad you enjoyed it all.
Comment from ciliverde
Let the Welsh verses roll! You have done very well here, both with your photo - it really does look like a turtle! - and the poem itself. Those internal rhymes are tricky, aren't they?
I love this stanza:
"Turtle, it's your placid pace
that so often wins the race.
You wisely never chase something too fast.
So you last, with grand grace." the last line here reads a tiny bit awkwardly, I thought something on the order of "So you last, with languid grace" might flow a little better - or something else with two syllables. Just a thought.
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"Can't comprehend just how you could be there.
I swear, you're just driftwood." is the perfect way to end this. The turtle IS there, I agree!
Thanks for presenting both forms in your notes,
Carol
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Let the Welsh verses roll! You have done very well here, both with your photo - it really does look like a turtle! - and the poem itself. Those internal rhymes are tricky, aren't they?
I love this stanza:
"Turtle, it's your placid pace
that so often wins the race.
You wisely never chase something too fast.
So you last, with grand grace." the last line here reads a tiny bit awkwardly, I thought something on the order of "So you last, with languid grace" might flow a little better - or something else with two syllables. Just a thought.
and of course
"Can't comprehend just how you could be there.
I swear, you're just driftwood." is the perfect way to end this. The turtle IS there, I agree!
Thanks for presenting both forms in your notes,
Carol
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Carol. I looked at several other Welsh forms, but wasn't impressed. However, the ones with ea and oc endings, I'm lost.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Such an interesting tree. It is like a petrified turtle. Beatiful little poem to go with the picture. Nice rhyme scheme.
teresa
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Such an interesting tree. It is like a petrified turtle. Beatiful little poem to go with the picture. Nice rhyme scheme.
teresa
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Teresa. Tree roots fascinate me. You never know what you might find in them. Most of the time, the just look like a jumble of snakes.
Comment from Leineco
My goodness - this is the second new form I have learned in the last 20 minutes!
And what an astounding pic this is! I love driftwood, and always look forward to hunting and collecting it when especially heavy storms have stirred up high reaching tides. But I have never seen anything so naturally evocative!
I love all the aspects of turtle tales and turtle lore you have woven into this poem - each stanza was like flipping a page in a mini-encyclopedia :-)
Tricky form - wonderfully handled :-)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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My goodness - this is the second new form I have learned in the last 20 minutes!
And what an astounding pic this is! I love driftwood, and always look forward to hunting and collecting it when especially heavy storms have stirred up high reaching tides. But I have never seen anything so naturally evocative!
I love all the aspects of turtle tales and turtle lore you have woven into this poem - each stanza was like flipping a page in a mini-encyclopedia :-)
Tricky form - wonderfully handled :-)
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Lienco. It was a bit tricky,. I like how you characterized it.
Comment from Marykelly
This is really a nice tribute to the turtle that as you mention in your author notes is a remarkable creature that holds importance in literature of many types. The fact that a tree root inspired the poem because it looked like a turtle gives a little more mystique to the turtle. This is a well done piece.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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This is really a nice tribute to the turtle that as you mention in your author notes is a remarkable creature that holds importance in literature of many types. The fact that a tree root inspired the poem because it looked like a turtle gives a little more mystique to the turtle. This is a well done piece.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016
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Thank you Marykelly. They are amazing creatures, and that root was remarkable.
