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Comment from amahra
First, I loved the art work and thought the blinking eye and scurrying bug and fantastic choice for this writing. The writing is rather deep with a lot of truth. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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First, I loved the art work and thought the blinking eye and scurrying bug and fantastic choice for this writing. The writing is rather deep with a lot of truth. Great job.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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ha...thank you....me too. seen at once...you aint got to blink at me too many times before lightbulbs start exploding...-smile- love Michael
Comment from Amy Greta
Wow, outstandingly Wow!
First, I love that song, and can easily see how it would be an inspiration for your poem.
Next, during the first read, I had to "soak it all in" as it has a complexity to it (true to your style:) )
Then as I read it again, I noticed transitions from one (stanza?) to the next, beginning with:
The eyeball,
spy / apple pie
eat
pray (after a)
Train WRECK
Market CRASH
TV EXPLODED
Ad champaign (like commercials)
Bank (money)
roads (toll)
Stairway (free)
Up to your treehouse
When I noticed the connections, it made sense, THEN, the final piece...the darn BUG, with which you have to deal in life...treehouse or not:)
Brilliant.
Amy
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Wow, outstandingly Wow!
First, I love that song, and can easily see how it would be an inspiration for your poem.
Next, during the first read, I had to "soak it all in" as it has a complexity to it (true to your style:) )
Then as I read it again, I noticed transitions from one (stanza?) to the next, beginning with:
The eyeball,
spy / apple pie
eat
pray (after a)
Train WRECK
Market CRASH
TV EXPLODED
Ad champaign (like commercials)
Bank (money)
roads (toll)
Stairway (free)
Up to your treehouse
When I noticed the connections, it made sense, THEN, the final piece...the darn BUG, with which you have to deal in life...treehouse or not:)
Brilliant.
Amy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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yea...?....yea-...... YEA BABY!...ah haha...Hey Amy....sure missed your boots around here. -smile-...thank you Dear....yes I recommend reading several times to all the nuances and juice sink in ...its much more flavorful that way. haha...thank so much I love it when you call me by middle name...love Michael
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are extremely thought provoking, creative
and strong. The music chosen compliments the theme and words of this poem.
And I love the artwork! It certainly made the reader curious!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are extremely thought provoking, creative
and strong. The music chosen compliments the theme and words of this poem.
And I love the artwork! It certainly made the reader curious!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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ha ...-smile- well...I've been told I'm a genius so I guess its to be expected ....ahahaha....thank you Sweetheart....to swoon you is my pleasure. love Michael
Comment from okanaganbell
It is very deep...i totally get what your saying...people are not what god intended i am sure...I dont 'feel' it so much though, as i would like to. The words are direct to the message but i like a little rhyme and consistency and this is not that..but it is translating your message logically. nice read thank you for the dose of reality.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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It is very deep...i totally get what your saying...people are not what god intended i am sure...I dont 'feel' it so much though, as i would like to. The words are direct to the message but i like a little rhyme and consistency and this is not that..but it is translating your message logically. nice read thank you for the dose of reality.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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every ocean is...-smile- Hello...-headtilt-...are you...?
hmm well real life aint for everyone Maam, I understand completely. -smile- O but I would disagree...you see it was the song the ah feel it produced that sent my feet to heartbeat, my ocean on my shoulders into motion and alas thine fingers to tapping devine...-headbow-....you're welcome. love Michael
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
These are very interesting to read. The artwork gave me the creeps though. I especially like:
heaven's stairway is bought and sold commodity
Good work, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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These are very interesting to read. The artwork gave me the creeps though. I especially like:
heaven's stairway is bought and sold commodity
Good work, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Hi Debbie...-smile-...yea its kinda creepy out there...thats correct. ah haha thank you Sweet Lady....love Michael
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love this music! I hate that fly, I hate that winking eye! LOL, Michael, that's awful! I keep reading your poem and nodding my head to the music, lol, I look an idiot and that damned fly! I go to the gym now so I am fit enough to jog around to the music, :) You have written a mix of things here, and I probably have it all wrong but what I did pick up on was the making money from religion, I hate that too, I would love it if Jesus popped down and threw the money all over the place. Can't work out Disneyland and train crashes and exploding televisions, but they sound good, well perhaps not the train crash. Do you like apple pie, Michael? Being the modest lady I am, I can't really tell you how good mine are, but if you should come to England at any time, you are welcome to come and find out for yourself! :) Love you always, Michael. :) Sandy xxx
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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I love this music! I hate that fly, I hate that winking eye! LOL, Michael, that's awful! I keep reading your poem and nodding my head to the music, lol, I look an idiot and that damned fly! I go to the gym now so I am fit enough to jog around to the music, :) You have written a mix of things here, and I probably have it all wrong but what I did pick up on was the making money from religion, I hate that too, I would love it if Jesus popped down and threw the money all over the place. Can't work out Disneyland and train crashes and exploding televisions, but they sound good, well perhaps not the train crash. Do you like apple pie, Michael? Being the modest lady I am, I can't really tell you how good mine are, but if you should come to England at any time, you are welcome to come and find out for yourself! :) Love you always, Michael. :) Sandy xxx
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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Alright...Hey Sandy...-smile-
ah the fly was last minute thing...their still trying to decided if genius or not...will see. ah yes of course I'm American...I have to....love apple pie...-smile-...with a scope of vanilla ice cream...if you warm the pie first I'll marry you....love Michael
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I'll put it in the oven now!! xxx
Comment from Ben Colder
You have bugs in your internet system. I broke my fly swatter. They have really marketed the Lord with this for sure. normalcy is an add campaign
Jesus Christ a bank account
tithe a toll roads guarantee
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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You have bugs in your internet system. I broke my fly swatter. They have really marketed the Lord with this for sure. normalcy is an add campaign
Jesus Christ a bank account
tithe a toll roads guarantee
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
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Hey Ben...-smile-...yea, its the dumpster they've neglected to dump her again...and shes breeding by now. anyway, thanks man...love Michael
Comment from P1
love the poem the music is brill
there is nothing i would change about
anything here except that little damn bug
which gave me the cereeps. apart from that
just perfect.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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love the poem the music is brill
there is nothing i would change about
anything here except that little damn bug
which gave me the cereeps. apart from that
just perfect.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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haha...ah was a last minute decision.....I do that sometimes...i dont have to go to hospital....-smile-...love Michael
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: I'm not sure the subject of this poem although religion seems to be the main thread. What grabbed me and wouldn't let go is that damned blinking eye,
followed by the wandering fly at the end. Creative at the very least; brilliant at the very most. A good one . . . I think . . .Soft Thunder
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Michael: I'm not sure the subject of this poem although religion seems to be the main thread. What grabbed me and wouldn't let go is that damned blinking eye,
followed by the wandering fly at the end. Creative at the very least; brilliant at the very most. A good one . . . I think . . .Soft Thunder
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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hahaha...ah woke up different...it happens...that I ran across this song and heard something about a pocket full of flies....just shook my head -headshake-...and said...yea. I hear ya man...you know Linda some movie stars never get to make movie...its a damn shame...-wink-...love you Thunder. Michael
Comment from teols2016
I'm guessing you made a bet with yourself on how many of today's problems you can fit into one poem. Well, you've got plenty and everything has its place...no overflow. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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I'm guessing you made a bet with yourself on how many of today's problems you can fit into one poem. Well, you've got plenty and everything has its place...no overflow. Nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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well...yea, that and my life......but believe me we dont want to discuss that.....yes Maam, there is a season....love Michael...
