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Comment from Bill O'Bier
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A very interesting piece-I can surely say you've created some strong images. Your words are well chosen. The artwork compliments the theme.

Thanks for sharing--

Bill

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
    Hey Bill...-smile-...thanks man...appreciate you enjoying....love Michael
Comment from dmt1967
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First of all, this is a sound poem. The eye peeping out at me nearly gave me a heart attack, however, and as for the fly... Well, I nearly had one broken computer lol. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
    haha...-smile-...ah just one of those days....when I dont give a shit starts to care....it happens. love Michael
Comment from Sherylsart
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Oh, what a glorious world we live in. Your poem has a lot to say, I like how you use words to have multiple meanings. Don't blame you for going the treehouse route.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
    hi...-smile-
    I thank you...I was born in Detroit, And learned very early on if I don't protect myself....I'm gonna die. -wink-...so...I became my own treehouse....-smile-...I bake cookies on the side...ah haha...love michael
Comment from Dav54
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Wow, one of the most creative posts I've seen! (I am new to FS, but still...)
Anything that makes a reader go back for a second and third read for more meaning is a job well done. (Provided of course there IS meaning to pull out, which there clearly is in your poem.)

"lies are Disneyland's paradise / makes a wish make believe" are definitely some of my favorite lines. Really cool how you can read it it multiple ways. I thought, too, of the "make a wish" the campaign for kids with cancer here, but don't know if that was in your original thought or not but I went there. Still for me, the line touched on the nerve of how frustrating it is for people who simply pray for solutions to issues instead of actually doing something, and that went along with the later lines about the false piety of many religious figures wrapped up in bank accounts.

Lots to think about here, thanks for the poem! And hey, how much room is there up in the treehouse...just asking' for future reference.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
    ha...right...?
    well hey Dave...nice to meet ya...i'm michael...-smile-
    man you should have seen this place once upon a time...it was exciting...I mean competing for head nods from artist's on fire tends to make you think a lil' harder.....ah man come on up...-smile-...but its always best to be your own tree house. People are basically evil dude...dont ever underestimate that. love Michael
Comment from chcbeck
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The eye at the top is brilliant, love the edgy creepy vibe. After a couple of readings my my thoughts changed about what your poem meant., which is a clever thing to make a reader see many things in one poem.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
    ha...hey there...-smile-
    well thank you very much. pleased you enjoyed the ride....that'll be twenty seven and change please...-smile-
    love michael
Comment from michaelcahill
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Hey, Michael. Kind of changing it up a bit this year. This looks like something I may have written before I over dosed on flowers here. Ha! Maybe there's a lesson here for me.
Love this. The last stanza is a perfect summation. mikey

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
    Oh well....I'm moody man Mike.....I get upset when I'm accused felonious assault...and I cant remember the pleasure. Well I...I write to relieve the pressure...I'm ...i'm I'm -shaking- almost sure if i didn't something bad would happen...-smile-...Jesus people are strange man...-headshake-...strange. love ya man...Michael
reply by michaelcahill on 16-Feb-2016
    Accusations seem the trend around here lately. Not a nice atmosphere for a conclave of artsy types. Sorry to hear that. Anyone I can crush for ya? :))
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
    no...no...I think she's got that completely under control. but thanks Bro.-
reply by michaelcahill on 16-Feb-2016
    Ahh. Cool. Back to pacifism. :))
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
    pacifist my ass...she better stop.
    crossing the line into made up felonies is a bit more than just lying through your teeth to disparage someone. its very dangerous for her made up persona...trust me. -wink-
reply by michaelcahill on 16-Feb-2016
    Well, I'm in the dark, nothing new. But, lies and made up personas are no-nos in my world, so I'm behind you. mikey
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Mike,

Well, I know you have something to say if you put 1.12 on your poem.
Just to let you know Willy approves of your music...which I understand
partly inspired your poetic piece.

I know you know how to present a piece...so I'm here about your voice...
trying to understand it. Not so difficult I suppose. You were really creative
with your playing around with words with your signature style. Wouldn't
want you to change.

Disney Land, make believe, make a wish, pray, train wreck, steroids, tv exploded,(my Dutch husband - when I read that to him talked about "imploded" in regard to the old televisions...really? and English is his 2nd language?) anyway..."add campaign" (oh I know you meant that double 'd') ,

Heaven's stairway..."bought" > boo!>"Sold">"Free"?
"middle finger" >boo! TREE HOUSE YOU!

You are just to High Que....for me...want to play pool? I mean I.Q. lol
Linda

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 18-Feb-2016
    Willie is your Bo...?
    that Bruce Willis weight lifter in the picture I presume...-smile-
    Hey Linda...you should warn a fella about pain...-wink-
    ah haha...well its good to know he can take a joke and appreciates good music when he hears it...-headnod-...good lookin' out will...-headnod- Well Linda I only play pool for money or woman...and ah you already almost got killed...so what do you think. -smile-....love Michael
reply by AnnaLinda on 18-Feb-2016
    You mean Beau, or did you do that on purpose too? Yes, he's bald and beautiful, patient and kind...and I can go no further here;)

    He a metal fan...but I forgive him...
Comment from Realist101
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Hi Michael! I really like this abstract poem that speaks to our crumbling society. At least that's what I read in this. Everything has a tag on it. Even Jesus...just awful. And getting worse too I fear. I hope you're happy and well my friend! x

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2016
    Hello sue...-smile-
    whats new with you...?
    amen aint that a fact...everything is for sale. Oh yea...ecstatically so...life's a party for me....love Michael
Comment from ciliverde
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I won't pretend to understand what all of this means... but I believe some of it is drifting here for me to catch it...

"crazy diversifies- as one whose been through diversity training a bunch - yep!
I spy sliced up apple pie
hmm smell that welcome..." that's one hell of a welcome!

Lies are Disneyland's paradise
makes a wish make believe - Disneyland is just that...Disneyland, the land where it's all make believe, a sugar -coated version of the Grimm old fairytales, and of life as we know it.

"let us pray...
something's safe to trust" - yes, I think I'm with you here.

But maybe I'm going through this too methodically. The feel is one of exploration, defiance (normalcy = overrated, people make money from extolling religion)
Refuse to be pigeonholed, why fit some kind of mold? Give that the middle finger. Don't do it to yourself, or others.

Carol


 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
    lol...yep...that about sums it up Carol...c'mon up...ahaha....love Michael
reply by ciliverde on 15-Feb-2016
    Do you have pie? :)
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
    ah...no...you're the girl.
    I've got some cigarettes and cognac....
    what da ya say....ahahhaha
reply by ciliverde on 15-Feb-2016
    But you forget...I defy expectations! ;)
Comment from misscookie
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Mm this is a very interesting read.
This what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Cookie

 Comment Written 15-Feb-2016


reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
    things that make you go hmmmmmm...........I wonder what happened to him. ah haha ah where to begin Miss Cookie...where to begin. -headshake-...its ah a long road to Abalone who is kin to Abilene and one cowboy cant ranch a whole rodeo if ya know what I mean.....its just not possible ...I tried. Anyway I appreciate "mm" in by....-smile-....love Michael
reply by misscookie on 16-Feb-2016
    You're very welcome, have a blessed day.
    Cookie