Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Happy thoughts"Words to pass on to my children
9 total reviews
Comment from OnyxSapphire78
What a fantastic poem! Nice picture of your family as well. How true it is that we seem to gloss over our pasts upon recalling them. Your past is what makes you today. Great job! Good luck on the contest! Happy writing!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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What a fantastic poem! Nice picture of your family as well. How true it is that we seem to gloss over our pasts upon recalling them. Your past is what makes you today. Great job! Good luck on the contest! Happy writing!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thanks for a most encouraging review and good luck wishes.
Comment from Texasbelle1021
Powerful words and so true. Why is it we wish for the days gone bye. The youth of yesterday without the pains. Spoke truth, flowed well. Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Powerful words and so true. Why is it we wish for the days gone bye. The youth of yesterday without the pains. Spoke truth, flowed well. Good luck.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2015
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Thank you for your most encouraging review and great comments.
Comment from Domino 2
Your family photo reminds me a bit of myself (I was big brother, too), and lots of two of my sisters at that age, 'M' (accessed from your portfolio).
We didn't have a TV either, and our family car was a real 'old banger'. We also used 'to play outside' in relative safety.
Lots of excellent examples of the past, and your 'rose-tinted glasses' and final conclusion is spot on.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Your family photo reminds me a bit of myself (I was big brother, too), and lots of two of my sisters at that age, 'M' (accessed from your portfolio).
We didn't have a TV either, and our family car was a real 'old banger'. We also used 'to play outside' in relative safety.
Lots of excellent examples of the past, and your 'rose-tinted glasses' and final conclusion is spot on.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thanks Ray for your encouraging review I guess many will identify with the snap, that is what they were called back then.
Comment from pharp
I think this is a beautifully penned poem. Oh, how I remember those good days; we could play outside all day without a worry, we kept our doors unlocked, no computer, no TV, just good living. Your poem brought back so many good memories. Excellent rhyming and meter, very smooth flow and a mostenjoyable read.. After reading all the entries, this should be the winner and it has my vote. Blessings....................Portia
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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I think this is a beautifully penned poem. Oh, how I remember those good days; we could play outside all day without a worry, we kept our doors unlocked, no computer, no TV, just good living. Your poem brought back so many good memories. Excellent rhyming and meter, very smooth flow and a mostenjoyable read.. After reading all the entries, this should be the winner and it has my vote. Blessings....................Portia
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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I really appreciate your most encouraging review I am glad you enjoyed it..
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello poet
this is marvelous poetry
the execution of words and rhyme are lovely
you truly describe the good old days
all is well in all areas of this entry
you have met the challenge
thank you for sharing your talent
ann marie
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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hello poet
this is marvelous poetry
the execution of words and rhyme are lovely
you truly describe the good old days
all is well in all areas of this entry
you have met the challenge
thank you for sharing your talent
ann marie
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thanks for the excellent and encouraging review.
Comment from AnnieDawn
I like nostalgia and your poem hits the spot. You have done a good job of describing the past and it really is a shame how much has changed through time. I have a suggestion though. I noticed that you have used punctuation through your poem except for the last few lines. It reads quite well without punctuation. I was cautioned when I first came to the site to either use it through the whole writing or not at all. I wish you luck on your great entry and great job.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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I like nostalgia and your poem hits the spot. You have done a good job of describing the past and it really is a shame how much has changed through time. I have a suggestion though. I noticed that you have used punctuation through your poem except for the last few lines. It reads quite well without punctuation. I was cautioned when I first came to the site to either use it through the whole writing or not at all. I wish you luck on your great entry and great job.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thank you so much Annie for pointing out about the punctuation, and also a lovely review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
There will never ever be anything that even comes remotely close to the "good old days" of the innocence of youth, and times gone by. This well written poem descriptively depicts this theme and should be a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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There will never ever be anything that even comes remotely close to the "good old days" of the innocence of youth, and times gone by. This well written poem descriptively depicts this theme and should be a good contest entry.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thanks Brett for your great review I am happy you enjoyed it.
Comment from Tessa Kay
Many people live so much in the past, they can't enjoy the present.
Like you say, the good old days are past. Not coming back. On with reality.
Well done
All the best in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Many people live so much in the past, they can't enjoy the present.
Like you say, the good old days are past. Not coming back. On with reality.
Well done
All the best in the contest. :)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thanks Tessa for your review and encouraging comments
Comment from anabellapongasi
Awww...what a cute photograph of the author and her siblings. I wonder how many years ago was this taken?
Ah yes, I know those good old days! No tv, no electricity, no cars, and we played lots of outdoor games :) I really enjoyed reading this piece which brought some lovely and fond memories of my childhood years as well.
Best wishes in the contest:)
Blessings,
Anabella
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Awww...what a cute photograph of the author and her siblings. I wonder how many years ago was this taken?
Ah yes, I know those good old days! No tv, no electricity, no cars, and we played lots of outdoor games :) I really enjoyed reading this piece which brought some lovely and fond memories of my childhood years as well.
Best wishes in the contest:)
Blessings,
Anabella
Comment Written 19-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2015
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Thanks for your encouraging review and great comments.
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you're welcome:)
Anabella