October's Breath
quatrains with closing couplet21 total reviews
Comment from TOMORAL
Beautifully written and expressed. You pick up the theme of October, one of my favorite nights, very well. Cutest spooks, indeed. Very well done.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Beautifully written and expressed. You pick up the theme of October, one of my favorite nights, very well. Cutest spooks, indeed. Very well done.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from MacMhuirich
Wonderful images for the autumnal season of Halloween. The Rhyme and flow of words take the reader through this with ease.
Glowing orange faces are all around town
Some sharp fangs point up while others go down
Readying themselves during the day's light
Graveyards churn with ghosts and goblins all night - brilliant imagery.
Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Wonderful images for the autumnal season of Halloween. The Rhyme and flow of words take the reader through this with ease.
Glowing orange faces are all around town
Some sharp fangs point up while others go down
Readying themselves during the day's light
Graveyards churn with ghosts and goblins all night - brilliant imagery.
Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from barkingdog
I like your approach to this contest, Debbie. It's not a super scary poem, but more about the festivities--with carved pumpkins lighting the town.
I saw the skeletons, ghosts and witches as the children dressed in costumes along with the 'cutest spooks.'
Good luck in the contest with your lovely rhyming couplets.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I like your approach to this contest, Debbie. It's not a super scary poem, but more about the festivities--with carved pumpkins lighting the town.
I saw the skeletons, ghosts and witches as the children dressed in costumes along with the 'cutest spooks.'
Good luck in the contest with your lovely rhyming couplets.
:) ellen
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from c_lucas
The night of the dead
is a night I dread
Sweet tooth remains in retirement
As I give my candy away.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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The night of the dead
is a night I dread
Sweet tooth remains in retirement
As I give my candy away.
This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
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You're welcome, Debbie. Charlie
Comment from Mastery
Hi, my friend. You definitely deserve to win the contest with this poetry::
"Glowing orange faces are all around town
Some sharp fangs point up while others go down
Readying themselves during the day's light
Graveyards churn with ghosts and goblins all night."
Take care and Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Hi, my friend. You definitely deserve to win the contest with this poetry::
"Glowing orange faces are all around town
Some sharp fangs point up while others go down
Readying themselves during the day's light
Graveyards churn with ghosts and goblins all night."
Take care and Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from GracieAnn
Debbie,
This write is full of wonderful images of the autumn season. The rich words chosen put me in the mood for harvest time. I especially liked your final line. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Debbie,
This write is full of wonderful images of the autumn season. The rich words chosen put me in the mood for harvest time. I especially liked your final line. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Deborah Marie
Well penned with wonderful color scheme and artwork. Nice sentence end rhyming of words. Wonderful progression, rhythm and flow. Good luck in the contest. God Bless, Deb
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Well penned with wonderful color scheme and artwork. Nice sentence end rhyming of words. Wonderful progression, rhythm and flow. Good luck in the contest. God Bless, Deb
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Debbie
A great entry for the contest. I've enjoyed the title and presentation then moved on to the poem itself. A great set of quatrains with strong flow and natural rhyme and rhythm.
I like how you've covered the Harvest moon and the farmer's produce, then worked the poem into the scariest aspects of the Eve. Excellent alliteration, "Mysterious/month", "Glowing/go/Graveyards/ghosts/goblins" work particularly well. Of course with the assed assonance and consonance, the poem reverberates and adds to the scary moments combined with the treats. A nice little touch with the concluding couplet. A reminder it will all happen again nest year, unless ... (Hahahahaha), or should I say ... Mwahahaha? A great entry sure to do well. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Hi Debbie
A great entry for the contest. I've enjoyed the title and presentation then moved on to the poem itself. A great set of quatrains with strong flow and natural rhyme and rhythm.
I like how you've covered the Harvest moon and the farmer's produce, then worked the poem into the scariest aspects of the Eve. Excellent alliteration, "Mysterious/month", "Glowing/go/Graveyards/ghosts/goblins" work particularly well. Of course with the assed assonance and consonance, the poem reverberates and adds to the scary moments combined with the treats. A nice little touch with the concluding couplet. A reminder it will all happen again nest year, unless ... (Hahahahaha), or should I say ... Mwahahaha? A great entry sure to do well. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Huge hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
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My pleasure sweetie.
I won't be back on-line for a couple of days. Catch up them. Sending smiles, love and Hershey kisses, hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from Joan E.
I have not read your work for a while--just over-scheduled. I am glad I caught this celebration of All Hallows' Eve. Your presentation was very appealing, from the artwork to the font choice. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains and vivid descriptions. Best wishes in the contest and here's to the "scariest night"! -Joan
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I have not read your work for a while--just over-scheduled. I am glad I caught this celebration of All Hallows' Eve. Your presentation was very appealing, from the artwork to the font choice. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these quatrains and vivid descriptions. Best wishes in the contest and here's to the "scariest night"! -Joan
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
This is an excellent entry for the Halloween Poetry Contest. I like the quatrain form, you did a very good job with the rhyme and meter. Best wishes with the contest.
gypsy
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Hello :)
This is an excellent entry for the Halloween Poetry Contest. I like the quatrain form, you did a very good job with the rhyme and meter. Best wishes with the contest.
gypsy
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you for the stars, my friend~Debbie
