Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 330 "White Bird"Small and Specialty Poems
15 total reviews
Comment from Tessa Kay
I always like nature poems. They help to remind us to appreciate the wonders around us.
Great picture as well, and thanks for pointing out the turtles. Would've missed them otherwise. Nice job. :)
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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I always like nature poems. They help to remind us to appreciate the wonders around us.
Great picture as well, and thanks for pointing out the turtles. Would've missed them otherwise. Nice job. :)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you Tessa,
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Interesting notes. Well written poem that clearly depicts the sanctity of birds. Uses phrases such as "ancient countenance is bold," and "impressive as it soars" to better illustrate their many highly valued qualities.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Interesting notes. Well written poem that clearly depicts the sanctity of birds. Uses phrases such as "ancient countenance is bold," and "impressive as it soars" to better illustrate their many highly valued qualities.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2015
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Thank you very much Brett.
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed reading this well done, informative poem about the Great White Egret. Egrets are magnificent birds and always exciting to see them at water's edge. Nicely done. Marilyn/BeasPeas
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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I enjoyed reading this well done, informative poem about the Great White Egret. Egrets are magnificent birds and always exciting to see them at water's edge. Nicely done. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 16-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2015
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Thank you Marilyn.
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A fascinating poem. You are welcome.
Comment from frogbook
Excellent poem Very enjoyable rhyme and flow. I really loved the repeating line. The picture was wonderful. Really good descriptions that made one contemplate. Best of luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Excellent poem Very enjoyable rhyme and flow. I really loved the repeating line. The picture was wonderful. Really good descriptions that made one contemplate. Best of luck in this contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you frogbook.
Comment from ciliverde
Wonderful poem about a beautiful bird. I like the reference to dragon blood, and the resemblance to a pterodactyl. I saw one on the coast of Ventura County a few days ago, stalking around in the dry brush back from the sand. It caught and ate a lizard as I watched. Anyway, your poem flows effortlessly and with confident rhyme and meter.
Carol
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Wonderful poem about a beautiful bird. I like the reference to dragon blood, and the resemblance to a pterodactyl. I saw one on the coast of Ventura County a few days ago, stalking around in the dry brush back from the sand. It caught and ate a lizard as I watched. Anyway, your poem flows effortlessly and with confident rhyme and meter.
Carol
Comment Written 12-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Thank you Carol. They are amazing. They stalk the shallows and use their beak as a spear.
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I used to live in a place with a giant cypress tree where lots of egrets roosted. It was amazing to see the white birds amongst the dark green foliage.
Comment from RYME4U
This is excellent. I love your historic references. It flows so smoothly and well with the rhymes that you chose/ Thi Kyrielle contest entry is great.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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This is excellent. I love your historic references. It flows so smoothly and well with the rhymes that you chose/ Thi Kyrielle contest entry is great.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2015
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Get hank you Ryme4u
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
I have to agree with your first reviewer that "White Bird" is an exceptional poem. The forms complicated structure and rhyme scheme are executed perfectly as far as I a can tell. Its rhyme and figurative language are excellent (a specter in the hinterlands). The allusions to mythology are an added bonus. Good luck in the contest.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2015
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Hi, Treischel,
I have to agree with your first reviewer that "White Bird" is an exceptional poem. The forms complicated structure and rhyme scheme are executed perfectly as far as I a can tell. Its rhyme and figurative language are excellent (a specter in the hinterlands). The allusions to mythology are an added bonus. Good luck in the contest.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 11-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2015
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Thank you Preston. I appreciate the excellent review and star award.
Comment from rod007
You did extremely well in portraying the mysticism of this strange bird. It has a haunting harrowing appearance that daunts me. I even think it's capable of magical and fantastic deeds. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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You did extremely well in portraying the mysticism of this strange bird. It has a haunting harrowing appearance that daunts me. I even think it's capable of magical and fantastic deeds. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2015
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Thanks Rod. They may be.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--two of my favorite creatures--the egret/heron (that along with pelicans remind me of Pterodactyls) and the turtle! I was thrilled by your referring to the myths in your Kyrielle Sonnet. I very much enjoyed your rhymes and repeats as well.
Big cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Wow--two of my favorite creatures--the egret/heron (that along with pelicans remind me of Pterodactyls) and the turtle! I was thrilled by your referring to the myths in your Kyrielle Sonnet. I very much enjoyed your rhymes and repeats as well.
Big cheers- Joan
Comment Written 06-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thank you Joan. I freepquently see Egrets and turtles together. They share the same environment. Shallows.
Comment from artemis53
Being a Floridian, Egrets are a daily fare. Yes. They do look like pterodactyls when they fly. They wander where I live from yard to yard eating the insects. They're exquisite when they're all roosting in one tree.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Being a Floridian, Egrets are a daily fare. Yes. They do look like pterodactyls when they fly. They wander where I live from yard to yard eating the insects. They're exquisite when they're all roosting in one tree.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2015
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Thank you Artemis. They are majestic and quite birds.
