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Small and Specialty Poems

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Comment from rod007
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This is the back door to a private haven and paradise, well captured in this poem. How about a back door that leads into a forest and another world? That would be fantastic. Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2015
    Ethan's you Rod.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Another impressive format which you seem to have readily mastered.
It is amazing how the common sights around us can be blended into a poem.
Life seems to be filled with duality as you cleverly show.
Well done.
:-) Shirley

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you Shirkey. Very true.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello Sonnet Man :)
I love the great variety of poems you write. This Puente Poem is beautiful and it reminds me of my home, when my children were little. Good job!
~gypsy

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you so much Gypsy Blue Rose. Glad it brought you some fond memories.
Comment from Joan E.
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Your brother's backdoor is very inviting. I was intrigued by the "bridge" format, rather like the pivot in a tanka and the connecting tildes. Your rhymes and the echo of the "ay" sound in the second stanza are effective as well. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you Joan.
Comment from ellie6
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A unique little poem, who ever thought a back door would be the subject for a poem This shows a flash of inspiration. The sentiment expressed is very true, the back door is the private area where only trusted friends may go.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you Ellie for your review and comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
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What is particularly clever about this particular rendition of the form is the way your rhyme scheme echoes the construction: (Upper case for feminine rhyme)

aBcBa ~c~ deced

Each stanza is encased within a rhyme a & d here and the c is the central line not only of the whole poem but of each separate stanza so the two halves are bridged and connected by the c rhyme. If I had a six it would be yours. I love it.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you Pantygynt. Yeh, I think this form has possibilities for more prospects. Your learned eye picked up much more than others do. I respect that greatly.
Comment from ravenblack
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You are right- there is a difference between the front and back door of a house and it is more than just appearance. The front is a gate through which one must pass. The back- not guarded- a portal to relaxation.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you ravenblack. Yup, that 's it!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I love your description of the back door, I now look at mine in a new light! You wrote a lovely poem, Tom, and I love this Puente style, it certainly comes over as a bridge too. Beautiful garden your brother has, I hope he liked your poem that pays a lovely tribute to it. :) Sandra xsx

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015
    Thank you Sandra. I let him know.
Comment from robina1978
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Yet an other form I've never seen before but I liked it very much. The photo of your brothers backdoor complements your poem perfectly. In the back garden where the family and pets play. You could have a barbecue there. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
    Thank you Ine. Have a good rest of the week.
Comment from robyn corum
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It consists of two larger stanzas (separated) by a single line

This - as usual - was a lovely poem about nature. Showing off again, are we?? hahahahahaha

And now we're showing off our pretty landscaping and flowers - then bragging about the BBQs that the rest of us can't ATTEND! huuumph!

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2015

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
    Thank you Robyn. I'll take my bows now and light up the grill. LOL.
reply by robyn corum on 17-Sep-2015
    you know God is watching, right?

    AND Santa.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2015
    Oops, forgot!