Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "There's A Bar"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from MelB
Tells the story of a guy trying to drink away the pain of a relationship that has died. She's with someone knew or at least dancing with someone and it's hard for him to watch. A relatable poem to all who have been there.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Tells the story of a guy trying to drink away the pain of a relationship that has died. She's with someone knew or at least dancing with someone and it's hard for him to watch. A relatable poem to all who have been there.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
A story of love went awry. Yes, when things went wrong, many people ran to the bar to let off their agony. But only to return home to meet the agony still waiting for them. A practical work.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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A story of love went awry. Yes, when things went wrong, many people ran to the bar to let off their agony. But only to return home to meet the agony still waiting for them. A practical work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from mbagby23
I bartend and some of the stories I here are quite interesting. Break ups are hard sometimes and one might want to drink to is the pain and forget about what was once gold is now making them blue. I like who you start and end it with the same words.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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I bartend and some of the stories I here are quite interesting. Break ups are hard sometimes and one might want to drink to is the pain and forget about what was once gold is now making them blue. I like who you start and end it with the same words.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Then you can relate well to this. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Serendipity!
This is a well written poem. Oh if only there was more ways of breaking down those bars so that relationships could be restored. Even though your lines were smoothly flowing there was a hint of sadness in them.
Above the noise
Of the crowd (throng?)
Torn in two again (would torn again work?)
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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This is a well written poem. Oh if only there was more ways of breaking down those bars so that relationships could be restored. Even though your lines were smoothly flowing there was a hint of sadness in them.
Above the noise
Of the crowd (throng?)
Torn in two again (would torn again work?)
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from judiverse
Lots of atmosphere and emotion in this. The bar is the perfect setting for the narrator to try to relive the past and think of a lost love. The imagery is very vivid as he sees her dancing with someone else and thinks about what might have been. Great reference to the bar, as this seems to be where it all started and ended. judi
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Lots of atmosphere and emotion in this. The bar is the perfect setting for the narrator to try to relive the past and think of a lost love. The imagery is very vivid as he sees her dancing with someone else and thinks about what might have been. Great reference to the bar, as this seems to be where it all started and ended. judi
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from rspoet
This is a very nicely written free verse poem
It reads extremely well
A free verse with a rhyme in each stanza
It tells the common story of lost love
and ensuing pain very well
The only small hitch for me was the line
"Once again/She's not here"
and then "There she is/Out on the floor"
I decided it could mean, she's not here at the table?
Excellent story in a poem
well done
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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This is a very nicely written free verse poem
It reads extremely well
A free verse with a rhyme in each stanza
It tells the common story of lost love
and ensuing pain very well
The only small hitch for me was the line
"Once again/She's not here"
and then "There she is/Out on the floor"
I decided it could mean, she's not here at the table?
Excellent story in a poem
well done
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Excellent free verse.
Nicely told as I think we have all been there.
Maybe not to a bar...but been there.
The emotions and feeling stated are really felt and nicely done
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Excellent free verse.
Nicely told as I think we have all been there.
Maybe not to a bar...but been there.
The emotions and feeling stated are really felt and nicely done
Comment Written 18-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2015
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Really do appreciate your comments and the 6-Stars very much.
