You are my everything.
A song lyric.21 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I couldn't imagine my life without my husband but you're right. Sometimes they don't give a reason and that's the hardest relationship to move past because there is no closure. It's one minute we're okay and the next it's over. It's hard
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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I couldn't imagine my life without my husband but you're right. Sometimes they don't give a reason and that's the hardest relationship to move past because there is no closure. It's one minute we're okay and the next it's over. It's hard
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from l.raven
HI Ine, such a touching song...I only want to be with you...your my everything...love your poem...and your picture and colors are beautiful...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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HI Ine, such a touching song...I only want to be with you...your my everything...love your poem...and your picture and colors are beautiful...very nicely written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Such cute song lyrics Robina
Love the words asking your love to come back
Come on, I only want to be with you, happy once more,
normally that you say that you love me
Come on, I only want to be with you, be happy again,
just that you say you love me,
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Such cute song lyrics Robina
Love the words asking your love to come back
Come on, I only want to be with you, happy once more,
normally that you say that you love me
Come on, I only want to be with you, be happy again,
just that you say you love me,
Gert
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is real good. You put so much heart into your song. It shows that you are very talented in song writing. That's not always an easy thing to do. Your song shows creativity and I really enjoyed reading it very much. God bless you!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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This is real good. You put so much heart into your song. It shows that you are very talented in song writing. That's not always an easy thing to do. Your song shows creativity and I really enjoyed reading it very much. God bless you!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
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You're very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day! Marilyn
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Your poem is a heartfelt lament for a relationship that appears fixable if the one you love will only do their part and let things mend. You have done a wonderful job of expressing feelings many of us have felt ourselves. Great job
Rhonda
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Your poem is a heartfelt lament for a relationship that appears fixable if the one you love will only do their part and let things mend. You have done a wonderful job of expressing feelings many of us have felt ourselves. Great job
Rhonda
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from His Grayness
This is a work of pure pain and sorrow that only shares misery and deep hurt. It is truly a personal epexegesis that offers no gift to anyone else and can only render sadness so I'm not sure what purpose was intended by the author. I seek to create gratitude in my works and only wish I could provide something here to ease the pain of this writer. All I can say is that all prior work's I've seen from her have been really good and she has true talent. I wish that somehow there was some kind of honest HUG or compassion I could share to ease her terrible pain! HIS GRAYNESS
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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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This is a work of pure pain and sorrow that only shares misery and deep hurt. It is truly a personal epexegesis that offers no gift to anyone else and can only render sadness so I'm not sure what purpose was intended by the author. I seek to create gratitude in my works and only wish I could provide something here to ease the pain of this writer. All I can say is that all prior work's I've seen from her have been really good and she has true talent. I wish that somehow there was some kind of honest HUG or compassion I could share to ease her terrible pain! HIS GRAYNESS
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Ine,
This is a nice song lyric, but I'm wondering who the person is that you wrote it for OR about. I thought at first that it might be your husband, but I'm sure he will stay with you forever. Anyway I enjoyed reading it.
Kat
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Hi Ine,
This is a nice song lyric, but I'm wondering who the person is that you wrote it for OR about. I thought at first that it might be your husband, but I'm sure he will stay with you forever. Anyway I enjoyed reading it.
Kat
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from krys123
Ine;
-I enjoyed this writing very much however the wording is an convincing enough.
Take your second line: "You have chosen for this life with me." Wouldn't it sound better being: "You have chosen this life for me." Or: "You have chosen me for this life." The first one doesn't really announce or create a specific understanding.
Throughout your writing it seems I could go to many of the lines like this. You see, I know what you're trying to say in trying to get across but how you doing it is faint, or strained. I definitely would suggest a rewrite as though you are actually talking to that person from your heart.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Ine;
-I enjoyed this writing very much however the wording is an convincing enough.
Take your second line: "You have chosen for this life with me." Wouldn't it sound better being: "You have chosen this life for me." Or: "You have chosen me for this life." The first one doesn't really announce or create a specific understanding.
Throughout your writing it seems I could go to many of the lines like this. You see, I know what you're trying to say in trying to get across but how you doing it is faint, or strained. I definitely would suggest a rewrite as though you are actually talking to that person from your heart.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you forever.
Alex
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
Comment from country ranch writer
was the sunshine in your life once but now as it turns out this person is wanting forgiveness and to be let back into your life
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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was the sunshine in your life once but now as it turns out this person is wanting forgiveness and to be let back into your life
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Thanks for the lovely six.
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Comment from judiverse
Great work with this as a song. I think the emotion really comes through. The narrator really explains how difficult it is to let him go. I really like your line "Tell me your wishes, I am your fairy." It shows that she would do anything to please and to have her lover return. Lovely presentation. judi
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Great work with this as a song. I think the emotion really comes through. The narrator really explains how difficult it is to let him go. I really like your line "Tell me your wishes, I am your fairy." It shows that she would do anything to please and to have her lover return. Lovely presentation. judi
Comment Written 16-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.
