Comment from rod007

Excellent

Your poem holds the hot and cold of hope and desperation. The dry reservoir, the starving children, the earthquakes and the myriad ills that infests this world will not daunt mankind especially if God is within our hearts. Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015

Thank you rod, i certainly hope so.

Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

Tom,
I think my head is spinning from the instructions alone! Yikes!
I rather enjoyed the poetry until I got to the author's notes... dayum! that just did me in.
I wrote a Villanelle today (with the help of my poetry teacher, Gynt) who helped me with color coding my lines so I didn't get all discombobulated, and I'm still feeling quite like a Villain from that! Yikes... I've still not figured out quite WHY poets even write in forms... it's far too time consuming and way too constraining and it makes my head spin. And in the end... I"m not even sure I say what I wanted to say...
(although I believe I did in that one) ;)

and so... yes, I enjoyed your poem, and no, not so much, the notes. they made my migraine worse. LOL
Well done, I think?
;)
Cat

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015

Thanks, i think. And i course you wouldn't like formats. You already said you don't like staying within the lines. Besides, Cats are always contrary. Your nature is wild.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello Treischel

I like your sonnet~Humanity~ It is true that our resources are running out and we have to make some changes to survive. Good job!

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015

Thank you Gypsy Blue. Rose

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

I've seen a couple of these lately, I think you did one earlier and then Tony Fawcus. While I find the form interesting i'm not sure I am entirely happy with the way the sonnet seems to be developing into something it was never intended to be. This one is a case in point. What you have to say is a valid point and needs an airing but I suppose I am an incurable romantic and this sort of editorial comment in a sonnet doesn't ring true for me. I admire what you have achieved within the stricture of the form but it's not for me, not while it calls itself a sonnet!

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015

Thank you Pantygynt. It definitely is a departure, by adding free verse and an extra 7 lines. What ever you want to call it, i find the end product most intriguing. You are correct, this is my second one, and Tony has written one also.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

What is the right route for humanity to go? This well written poem asks this question indeed. May solicit several responses to that question. Draws readers in and holds their interest throughout. Well done.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015

Thank you Brett. It's good to know your reaction.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Another excellent poem, my friend. We seem to be heading towards our own destruction don't we? We cannot look ahead and see what is staring us in the face. It might be too late when we do. :( Sandra xsx

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015

Thank you Sandra. I sure hope not.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Thanks for teaching us so many Sonnet forms. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this Shadow Sonnet. Humanity can only be saved when we make some changes. Some things are essential for life. Good post at this time.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015

Thank you Ine. You review and support is greatly appreciated.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very complicated sonnet, I have to study this form before even think of trying it. Humanity is a growing concern. Water is one of the definite things that can't be replaced. A very good photo again.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015

Thank you Sandra. It is a complex format, but easier than the instructions sound.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, trieschel, you did an excellent job writing this fusion sonnet about the way humanity is always seeking ways to survive no matter what comes.

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2015

Thank you sweetwoodjax.