When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "The Sign"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from w.j.debi
A wonderfully written chapter, full of details as you try to juggle all the things that need to be done and the people who need to know.
You wrote quite a touching sense with your mom at the hospital.
That final "rose" was a kicker. You brought me to tears.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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A wonderfully written chapter, full of details as you try to juggle all the things that need to be done and the people who need to know.
You wrote quite a touching sense with your mom at the hospital.
That final "rose" was a kicker. You brought me to tears.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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I'm always honored with the reaction of tears. Those special moments you mention will always stay with me. Thank you so much for the exceptional rating.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Shari. Wow mate, I'm so sorry. What a heart wrenching chapter but at least there was no more pain and suffering for her. God will make sure of that. I love that rose twist, what a great thing to happen, how special. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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G'day Shari. Wow mate, I'm so sorry. What a heart wrenching chapter but at least there was no more pain and suffering for her. God will make sure of that. I love that rose twist, what a great thing to happen, how special. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 29-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Fez. More roses later too. Mom is definitely my spirit guide.
Comment from mermaids
Your mother is beautiful in the picture. It seems that she died peacefully. It is always hard when a parent passes on. I can relate to your story having gone through my mother and father's death. I like the promise of a sign of a rose. Excellent writing that flows smoothly and holds the reader's interest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Your mother is beautiful in the picture. It seems that she died peacefully. It is always hard when a parent passes on. I can relate to your story having gone through my mother and father's death. I like the promise of a sign of a rose. Excellent writing that flows smoothly and holds the reader's interest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the compliment on my Mom and on my writing. I guess everyone goes through this eventually. Something my kids can experience for the first time. LOL
Comment from Muffins
Your mother sent you the message in a way that was more powerful than a flower. We sometimes get the things we want not in the manner we think. I forgot who said that quote because it fits beautiful here.
I can see your face in the photo provided. Your mother looks elegant and strong.
"Faye told me that two men entered with a wheelchair minutes before I arrived. They took one look at Mom and backed away. One told the nurse in harsh terms, "We don't take corpses. We're not a funeral home!" I realized then that Father Demery had not just given her communion. He had performed the Last Rites." When I read this, I knew your mother thought it best you where not involve in her last decision. She went peaceful knowing her kids loved her, and despite the fights, they loved one another.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Your mother sent you the message in a way that was more powerful than a flower. We sometimes get the things we want not in the manner we think. I forgot who said that quote because it fits beautiful here.
I can see your face in the photo provided. Your mother looks elegant and strong.
"Faye told me that two men entered with a wheelchair minutes before I arrived. They took one look at Mom and backed away. One told the nurse in harsh terms, "We don't take corpses. We're not a funeral home!" I realized then that Father Demery had not just given her communion. He had performed the Last Rites." When I read this, I knew your mother thought it best you where not involve in her last decision. She went peaceful knowing her kids loved her, and despite the fights, they loved one another.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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That's a wonderful way to look at it. You're right about the rose. I could only think in terms of a real flower. Mom was elegant and strong willed too.
Comment from sibhus
Well, this is an interesting chapter. True it was sad to read of your mother's passing , but the student at the opportune moment is very curious. Was it a truly a sign from the beyond, or not. Something to really puzzle about.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Well, this is an interesting chapter. True it was sad to read of your mother's passing , but the student at the opportune moment is very curious. Was it a truly a sign from the beyond, or not. Something to really puzzle about.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Husky, people who pass over do find a way to communicate. It's now just coincidence when the phone rings and no one answers or you detect a familiar scent in your house and can't find the source. Departed spirits love to play with electricity. The lights may after someone you loved died. I know of at least three people included by R.C. husband who have seen the ghost of neighbors. My beloved cat contacted me when I had to put her. She had cancer in her jaw.
You do have to be open to receive these messages, but they happen. There's also astral thought. Have you ever picked up the ringing phone and found the caller to be someone you thinking about?
Comment from Debbie Noland
Interesting symbolism/foreshadowing that the street lamps are going out as your mom passes. I was pretty sure this was going to happen from all the excellent foreshadowing in previous chapters.
The "sign" as embodied by young Sammy Rose is stunning. You have to doubt that all that timing could have been purely coincidental.
The things I especially noticed in this installment were the momentum created by strong verbs, the imagery in the descriptive passages, and, of course, the Sammy Rose irony. It is significant that you use "soft velvet" to describe his voice, as that suggests coffin accoutrements.
Your mom looks lovely in the photo.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Interesting symbolism/foreshadowing that the street lamps are going out as your mom passes. I was pretty sure this was going to happen from all the excellent foreshadowing in previous chapters.
The "sign" as embodied by young Sammy Rose is stunning. You have to doubt that all that timing could have been purely coincidental.
The things I especially noticed in this installment were the momentum created by strong verbs, the imagery in the descriptive passages, and, of course, the Sammy Rose irony. It is significant that you use "soft velvet" to describe his voice, as that suggests coffin accoutrements.
Your mom looks lovely in the photo.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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I love what you got out of this -the street lights and soft velvet. No coincidence, I believe. Along with everything else he was black (as in funeral mourning). It turned out he was a new student too. Thanks ever so much for the exceptional rating.
Comment from Donya Quijote
I can you are your mother's daughter. You share her features.
You have me blubbing.....
I like the diary-like structure as you detail the funeral preparations, punctuated with details of your emotional state. It goes well with actual behaviors.
I forget from time to time that you believe in all that horoscopy stuff. I find it interesting once in a while, but find there are too many charlatans for my liking. I've only had my hand read three times. Maybe I should write about those experiences. Very interest revelation there at the end. Lots of coincidences there. Was it the sign you were looking for? Once again, here were that tone I mention from time to time is so important. Your writing seem to say yes, but.....
Once again too much emotional content for me to take notice of spag. Nothing reached out and grabbed me...
The aftermath of the death of a loved one can be equally trying too. Wondering what's in store for you with the will and all the emotional fallout.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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I can you are your mother's daughter. You share her features.
You have me blubbing.....
I like the diary-like structure as you detail the funeral preparations, punctuated with details of your emotional state. It goes well with actual behaviors.
I forget from time to time that you believe in all that horoscopy stuff. I find it interesting once in a while, but find there are too many charlatans for my liking. I've only had my hand read three times. Maybe I should write about those experiences. Very interest revelation there at the end. Lots of coincidences there. Was it the sign you were looking for? Once again, here were that tone I mention from time to time is so important. Your writing seem to say yes, but.....
Once again too much emotional content for me to take notice of spag. Nothing reached out and grabbed me...
The aftermath of the death of a loved one can be equally trying too. Wondering what's in store for you with the will and all the emotional fallout.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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I'm always glad when a story evokes strong emotions. A Rose" in any form would have been a sign unless of course, someone did it on purpose like my co-worker. More details on the many times I saw roses in an unexpected place in the next post. I knew Mom was watching over me. (sign as used here does not mean a horoscope sign). Rough time coming up at the service and wake.
Comment from Curly Girly
Sammy Rose! Was he the one sent as a messenger to you? You were expecting a flower, but you got a human helper instead.
Having ones mother die is a sad and traumatic time. It is tough to still be thinking about work when you are grieving.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Sammy Rose! Was he the one sent as a messenger to you? You were expecting a flower, but you got a human helper instead.
Having ones mother die is a sad and traumatic time. It is tough to still be thinking about work when you are grieving.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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I kept wondering how Mom could get a rose through to me. Sammy was unexpected for sure. More unexpected signs came through off and on through the year. There's was so much nastiness going on at the service and the wake, I didn't have time to grieve. Anyway, my mother didn't want me too. (easier said than done.)
Comment from judiverse
This is so touching. I don't know how you remember so many of the details. I don't think that the arrangements to place her in a nursing home had anything to do with her death, nor did her moving to the condo. Her age and the extent of her ailments were responsible. What a wonderful story about the student who helped you carry the flowers to the car. As you were looking for a sign that your mother had passed over, finding out that his last name was Rose must have sent chills through you. judi
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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This is so touching. I don't know how you remember so many of the details. I don't think that the arrangements to place her in a nursing home had anything to do with her death, nor did her moving to the condo. Her age and the extent of her ailments were responsible. What a wonderful story about the student who helped you carry the flowers to the car. As you were looking for a sign that your mother had passed over, finding out that his last name was Rose must have sent chills through you. judi
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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I hope you're right about the cause of death. She told me more than once she was ready to go. When I think how close I came to not bothering to ask Sammy's name -- that what chills me!
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You should write a short story about the sign, and the boy's last name being Rose. It would be chilling. judi
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I did several years ago. It was published in September/October 2005 issue of Venture Inward, a magazine that's part of the Edgar Cayce Foundation. The editor said he thought it was the best article in the issue. :-)
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Good for you! judi
Comment from joann r romei
this was sad, but i think you were right, she lived her life and felt it was time to leave this world, she didnt want to go to the home and i think she knew it would have made more conflicts,
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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this was sad, but i think you were right, she lived her life and felt it was time to leave this world, she didnt want to go to the home and i think she knew it would have made more conflicts,
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you so much for your take on this, joann, and for the sixer, of courses.
