Baseball USA
Little league aspirations22 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
This has to be an exciting and nerve racking time for these young players. It is certainly teaching them how to deal with stress at a young age, but hopefully also how to have fun at the same time.
You write about baseball and Little League quite often. Are you a coach? You certainly seem to enjoy the sport.
This is a well written article. Have you considered submitting it to you local paper?
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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This has to be an exciting and nerve racking time for these young players. It is certainly teaching them how to deal with stress at a young age, but hopefully also how to have fun at the same time.
You write about baseball and Little League quite often. Are you a coach? You certainly seem to enjoy the sport.
This is a well written article. Have you considered submitting it to you local paper?
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you so very much, Debbie. I'm 60, so I don't coach now, until my grand kids get older...
I coached with my two boys for years, but I can quite honestly say, coaching my daughters softball team for three years was the most fun! They were so competitive, yet soft and vulnerable, an amazing time.
Look for more on this story.
Thanks again, John
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I'm not a baseball fan but I'm sure there are people who love baseball like I love football. You did a great job with this and as I was reading this I could actually picture everything happen. Great, great job
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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I'm not a baseball fan but I'm sure there are people who love baseball like I love football. You did a great job with this and as I was reading this I could actually picture everything happen. Great, great job
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Thank you EL for reading and sharing. Football, huh? I'm
a big Jets fan. You?
John
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Packers fan all the way. Going to Green Bay in about two weeks. Can't wait :)
Comment from Gloria ....
Love how you generate excitement in your opening paragraph, John. Your language is descriptive, clean and lean making it run at the pace of a game.
The boys' dialogue works really well showing the tension and nerves.
Excellent story, John. I'm so pleased to read another of your fine baseball stories and for that, you get my last six of the week. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Love how you generate excitement in your opening paragraph, John. Your language is descriptive, clean and lean making it run at the pace of a game.
The boys' dialogue works really well showing the tension and nerves.
Excellent story, John. I'm so pleased to read another of your fine baseball stories and for that, you get my last six of the week. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Gloria, thank you for the encouraging review. The six star rating is a home run for me, thank you.
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Thank you, Gloria, for an exceptional worded review topped off with the grand slam, 6 stars. Like a strike down the middle I appreciate your reading my work. Nothing foul about that. I hope to continue writing this story.
Thank you again, my friend. John
Comment from angelface2
My grandsons played little league and I loved watching them. I don't think we were ever in Little League World Series. This is written with much anticipation before the game begins. I was waiting for more! I loved Jeffrey's enthusiasm and Billy's story. :>) Miss Sally
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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My grandsons played little league and I loved watching them. I don't think we were ever in Little League World Series. This is written with much anticipation before the game begins. I was waiting for more! I loved Jeffrey's enthusiasm and Billy's story. :>) Miss Sally
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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I'm thinking of turning this into a book, so there will be more.
Thank you for reading. John
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I'm glad! Miss Sally
Comment from Val Crisson
Great story, John. The hopes and dreams of these kids, that played sports at a young age really makes me wonder about identity. My daughter was a swimmer. She did double practices most of her young life, and was an All American State Swimmer. And remember the endless swim meets and championships. In her down days, as she is bi-polar, she still identifies herself as that athlete, So I really appreciate your story. Once again, you really need to shorten your sentences. Too many are run on, and it really takes away from the "punch" of you story.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Great story, John. The hopes and dreams of these kids, that played sports at a young age really makes me wonder about identity. My daughter was a swimmer. She did double practices most of her young life, and was an All American State Swimmer. And remember the endless swim meets and championships. In her down days, as she is bi-polar, she still identifies herself as that athlete, So I really appreciate your story. Once again, you really need to shorten your sentences. Too many are run on, and it really takes away from the "punch" of you story.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Val, for reading and sharing. I appreciate it very much. I'll take a look at the lengthy sentence issue...
John
Comment from MelB
This takes me back to all the years my son played Little League. They never made it to Williamsport, but won a lot of tournaments during All Stars.
A well written piece! I could almost smell the popcorn!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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This takes me back to all the years my son played Little League. They never made it to Williamsport, but won a lot of tournaments during All Stars.
A well written piece! I could almost smell the popcorn!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Mellisa, thank you so much for reading my story. I always appreciate your stopping by.
John
Comment from barkingdog
John, I was all ready for the game ...
You did a wonderful job showing us how important Little League is to so many boys. I didn't know that it went all the way to International competition.
Your characters are very true to life: An encouraging coach and boys that are nervous, but will try their very best.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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John, I was all ready for the game ...
You did a wonderful job showing us how important Little League is to so many boys. I didn't know that it went all the way to International competition.
Your characters are very true to life: An encouraging coach and boys that are nervous, but will try their very best.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Ellen for that fantastic review. I think there will be more. John
Comment from Michaelk
This seems like you're building up for a book. You're building your characters nice and slow, the way they should be. I love the speech that Billy was giving. Loved your background on the little league world series. It didn't seem overdone, just enough to give the setup. And that's what this felt like, a setup/background story chapter to a book.
'placed in (their) respective first'
A very interesting baseball story that I would love to read more of.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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This seems like you're building up for a book. You're building your characters nice and slow, the way they should be. I love the speech that Billy was giving. Loved your background on the little league world series. It didn't seem overdone, just enough to give the setup. And that's what this felt like, a setup/background story chapter to a book.
'placed in (their) respective first'
A very interesting baseball story that I would love to read more of.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Michael. I do want to continue with this, I just hope time allows.
I took care of the "their". Much appreciated. John
Comment from justafan
I love baseball, at every level. But, the young ones play with their hearts. My boys played but not passed park ball. This is a lovely reminder for me of those days as team Mom... Hiding my eyes as my child came to bat. Lol
Loved it!
Always,
Missy
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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I love baseball, at every level. But, the young ones play with their hearts. My boys played but not passed park ball. This is a lovely reminder for me of those days as team Mom... Hiding my eyes as my child came to bat. Lol
Loved it!
Always,
Missy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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My wife did the same at times when our son came up in a big spot.
Thanks for reading. John
Comment from Sis Cat
This story engaged me. You paint well the preparations for the big game. You crafted an ornate series of details that puts the reader right at the ballgame. Your story is also unusual by focusing on what happens before the game instead of during the game. This creates excitement and anticipation. Your cliffhanger ending surprised me. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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This story engaged me. You paint well the preparations for the big game. You crafted an ornate series of details that puts the reader right at the ballgame. Your story is also unusual by focusing on what happens before the game instead of during the game. This creates excitement and anticipation. Your cliffhanger ending surprised me. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Sis Cat for that great review. John
