When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "A Knight in Question"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Shari, I almost missed this chapter and started reading the next one first but went to your portfolio and found it and I'm glad I did. Poor old girl can't take a trick, poor thing, I feel so bad for her. As far as your Aunt and sister, why do people have to be so harsh? I'll never get it.....off to the next chapter now...
A little suggestion...
"Her lips, almost blood red, had puffed up three times their (normal) size."
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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G'day Shari, I almost missed this chapter and started reading the next one first but went to your portfolio and found it and I'm glad I did. Poor old girl can't take a trick, poor thing, I feel so bad for her. As far as your Aunt and sister, why do people have to be so harsh? I'll never get it.....off to the next chapter now...
A little suggestion...
"Her lips, almost blood red, had puffed up three times their (normal) size."
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Good suggestion. I inserted the word. I don't get the behavior of blood relatives either. If you're going to be mean, do it to strangers.
Comment from sibhus
Well, the typical nasty infighting of the average American family, eh? Never quite like the Brady Bunch is it? Good chapter, you've definitely caught all the highlights of the nasty little infighting over petty little things that so often fuel a family's hatreds. Good stuff there, Spitfire.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Well, the typical nasty infighting of the average American family, eh? Never quite like the Brady Bunch is it? Good chapter, you've definitely caught all the highlights of the nasty little infighting over petty little things that so often fuel a family's hatreds. Good stuff there, Spitfire.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thanks, husky. Unfortunately, real life doesn't have happy endings that often.
Comment from mermaids
The elderly have so many falls and it can lead to further hospital and nursing home stays. The unit I work on has rugs, it seems to cushion the falls, which there are many. I feel bad that your Mom's sister is so mean. When an elderly parent is frail, it is time to get along but many families argue. Excellent flow of story and description of scenes and feelings.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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The elderly have so many falls and it can lead to further hospital and nursing home stays. The unit I work on has rugs, it seems to cushion the falls, which there are many. I feel bad that your Mom's sister is so mean. When an elderly parent is frail, it is time to get along but many families argue. Excellent flow of story and description of scenes and feelings.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Elaine. Falls after seventy are a crises. The rugs are definitely a great idea.
Comment from joann r romei
Your aunt is really too much, but these things do happen and people forget the big picture of relationships, they are not just one isolated incident. but these types of situations happen in a lot of families.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Your aunt is really too much, but these things do happen and people forget the big picture of relationships, they are not just one isolated incident. but these types of situations happen in a lot of families.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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I know. If we're going to be mean to people, it shouldn't be family.
Comment from Leen1
Oh my, I am so caught in your family's whirlwind, which by the way seemingly does not stop spinning. Dee will never be approving of anything that is done on anyone's behalf. There is more than meets the eye here. I just can't help but think that there is deep-seated issues involving the past with Dee...childhood issues...perhaps. None-the-less, once again this is such a great read.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Oh my, I am so caught in your family's whirlwind, which by the way seemingly does not stop spinning. Dee will never be approving of anything that is done on anyone's behalf. There is more than meets the eye here. I just can't help but think that there is deep-seated issues involving the past with Dee...childhood issues...perhaps. None-the-less, once again this is such a great read.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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My aunt refused to talk about the past with my mother, so she definitely had issues she didn't want to face. Thanks for the complimentary review.
Comment from w.j.debi
The plot just keeps getting more complicated as people seem to point fingers and get your mother to do what they want. What a difficult position to be in. How heartbreaking to know the only thing your husband asked for will be denied when he has done so much. Oh, my, what is next?
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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The plot just keeps getting more complicated as people seem to point fingers and get your mother to do what they want. What a difficult position to be in. How heartbreaking to know the only thing your husband asked for will be denied when he has done so much. Oh, my, what is next?
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Thanks, debi, for your feedback. It's good to know I'm touching readers. As for what's next--it's not pretty.
Comment from lynglyng
Great story line. Full of drama and suspense. I enjoyed reading it and saw nothing that needed to be changed. Very interesting read and your style of writing it easy to read. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Great story line. Full of drama and suspense. I enjoyed reading it and saw nothing that needed to be changed. Very interesting read and your style of writing it easy to read. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Thank you for stopping by, lynglyng. I love hearing from new readers.
Comment from barkingdog
This whole situation just gets worse day by day. Now, a staph infection and Dee still doing everything that she can influence your mother against you and Frank. None of this family tension helps your mother heal.
Big dummy--you know you can't confide in your sister!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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This whole situation just gets worse day by day. Now, a staph infection and Dee still doing everything that she can influence your mother against you and Frank. None of this family tension helps your mother heal.
Big dummy--you know you can't confide in your sister!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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I find that hard way. My sister shocks me with her behavior!
Comment from cercie
Your writing is so smooth, and I cannot wait until the next paragraph. I could feel the tension. fear, anger and snootiness. I could only hope to someday write like you.
Thank you for letting me take a glimpse into your life.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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Your writing is so smooth, and I cannot wait until the next paragraph. I could feel the tension. fear, anger and snootiness. I could only hope to someday write like you.
Thank you for letting me take a glimpse into your life.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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Your comments on my skills mean a lot. It's good to know I get those feelings across. This is a hard write and so personal, I don't plan to publish it. Just trying to look at things from a wiser POV now that I'm in my seventies. Thank you so much for the six.
Comment from Curly Girly
This is such a sad state of affairs. One should never go back on promises. The knight should go to the person she promised it to. Malicious words cause so much unnecessary harm. I cannot understand people who spew them out. To live in a family of love and peace is better than one filled with strife and bickering. It did not have to be like this ... ! If only she hadn't said ...
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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This is such a sad state of affairs. One should never go back on promises. The knight should go to the person she promised it to. Malicious words cause so much unnecessary harm. I cannot understand people who spew them out. To live in a family of love and peace is better than one filled with strife and bickering. It did not have to be like this ... ! If only she hadn't said ...
Comment Written 13-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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It really comes crashing down in the two chapters.
