Comment from pattipac

Excellent

Your poem of faith in a loving God, who teaches his followers lessons of righteous living and charity is well written. Excellent word choice and repetitive use of lines in the form of a pantoum works well in this poem,

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the gracious comments. I appreciate the encouragement.

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hi Debi,

This was such a wonderful read. You lines flow so smoothly that the repeating lines fit effortlessly in the poem...beautiful work!

I appreciated your solid message of faith and act of excepting those trials of life that are there to help us grow as people.

Strong expression of your trust in the Almighty and the help He brings to those who wait.

Hope all is well with you,
Bill

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the gracious comments, Bill. I appreciate the kind comments about the writing and your insights about the message.

I am well. Thanks for asking. Very busy at work so I apologize for the delay in response. I hope all is well with you as well. I appreciate your continued support. Debi

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Debi,

In this crazy world, it's always good for us to be reminded that loving each other is the essence of why we are here on this planet. You did such a good job with this poetry form.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Hi Lou,
Thank you so much for the excellent review. I appreciate your insights about the subject and the kind comments about the writing.
Debi

Comment from jgirlie152

Excellent

I love your poem. It is so well written and your words are perfect for the subject you have chosen. You have done well in the pantoum sonnet, and it couldn't have been written better.
Blessings, Joan

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Hi Joan,
Thank you so much for the great review. I appreciate the encouragement.
Debi

Comment from artemis53

Excellent

Lovely spiritual poems, "Of righteousness and charity it seems to need a bit of a schematic to old onto one's free flow in baaved feeing up other unopened as of yet, feelings

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Thank you for the review. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by to read and comment.

Comment from Ronni

Excellent

Spiritual point and truth irrefutably and simply conveyed in this poem,
for indeed we have clear and east to manage and follow ways to
help and embrace others in righteousness and charity. Both picture
and example noted compliment theme perfectly. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes always, Ronni

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Hi Ronni,
Thank you for the terrific review. I appreciate the comments about the writing.
Debi

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is a perfect example of a combined poetry entry dear w.j.debi! the spiritual sentiment is there crystal clear and exquisite! nice one my friend!
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015

What a nice review, Rebekka. I appreciate the comments about the writing and the sentiment being clear. Thank you for the encouragement. Debi

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Exceptional

Hi W.J. Debi. I found your gem here to be harder to craft than I realized. Thank you for your author notes as to review what a Pantoum sonnet is. The flow of your poem is gentle and extends an inviting vigor to those who read. The ending is a nice landing. The tender mercies felt like a leaf gently landing on the ground. Good luck and cheers.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015

Thank you for the wonderful six star rating! I apologize for the delayed response. I've had to work some long hours this past week and getting to the site was not in the cards.

It is delightful to find your generous comments about the writing tonight. I love that statement, "The tender mercies felt like a leaf gently landing on the ground." Thank you so much for the encouragement. I will be smiling all night!

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Debi - a lovely Pantoum. Calling it a Pantoum Sonnet is new to me, I have never heard of it. Certainly a sonnet in layout and abab rhyme, and the rest is a good, correctly written pantoum. It is also a really lovely faith poem. So you have certainly given us value for money. I really enjoyed the read debi - warm regards Dorothy xx

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015

Hi Dorothy,
Thank you for the kind review. I learned about the Pantoum Sonnet from Brooke (adewpearl). She has some lovely examples among all the other forms she has written.

I appreciate the detailed analysis and encouraging comments about the writing. I am so pleased you enjoyed it.
Debi

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

This is a super format, wj debi. It flows so smoothly and allows the deeper message to be absorbed and appreciated. I think the tertameter gives it more punch. The message is pure, no over preachy prognostications, just that invitation from Christ to love others through charity and to experience the grace of his love in return. The repetitions add a beguiling feel to an excellent poem.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2015

Thank you for the gracious comments about the format and flow of the poem, as well as the insights about how it helps the delivery of the message. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi