Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Destiny"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from BlueTiger
Good job; you have a unique writing style that makes your work interesting to read. The word order is different, but your ideas still come through clearly. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Good job; you have a unique writing style that makes your work interesting to read. The word order is different, but your ideas still come through clearly. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Fighting hard in this battle of proper conveyance, more pleased times a person understand somewhat what was stated. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
This is about human ambition and pushing forward onto the corporeal ladder. Rather complex and intricate wording and your notes were helpful.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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This is about human ambition and pushing forward onto the corporeal ladder. Rather complex and intricate wording and your notes were helpful.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Yeah, the average Joe. Glad aspects of this write were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from Chantae Harding
I do like this piece but I feel that is could benefit from punctuation changes. This is one thing I have struggled with myself. Knowing it in myself I can see it better in others. I would also rework the wording. While many can discern more from the piece for a novice reader this could be a more difficult read.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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I do like this piece but I feel that is could benefit from punctuation changes. This is one thing I have struggled with myself. Knowing it in myself I can see it better in others. I would also rework the wording. While many can discern more from the piece for a novice reader this could be a more difficult read.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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I will consider your remarks, finding difficulties in most my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from kidz
It is hard to depict a history into a concise poetry. I am sorry, but I could not enjoy it. I suggest you use "ballads" style instead for this topic. Good luck with your writings
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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It is hard to depict a history into a concise poetry. I am sorry, but I could not enjoy it. I suggest you use "ballads" style instead for this topic. Good luck with your writings
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Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Topic of interests do vary among reviewers, finding your response helpful giving me another consideration about my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from jmshumate
This is a very interesting poem, it seemed to me that it talked about ancient builders or something like that, maybe the Egyptians, All great work accomplished by rulers of nations to me seems to be at the expense of man, whether free or slave, either way if we put faith first, it helps us to remember that this world is only temporary, but while we are in it man will eat "by the sweat of his brow" enjoyed this read, thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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This is a very interesting poem, it seemed to me that it talked about ancient builders or something like that, maybe the Egyptians, All great work accomplished by rulers of nations to me seems to be at the expense of man, whether free or slave, either way if we put faith first, it helps us to remember that this world is only temporary, but while we are in it man will eat "by the sweat of his brow" enjoyed this read, thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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You captured the intent of this write perfectly, your sharp senses unfolded the topic as its meaning. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks God first and everything afterwards; I liked and enjoyed the read, the tale about destiny, unavoidable uncontrollable by man; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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This speaks God first and everything afterwards; I liked and enjoyed the read, the tale about destiny, unavoidable uncontrollable by man; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Sad history although, even though I ponder if we were immortals, would we become bored? Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
Comment from beizanten
A unique picture. Good and well written first paragraph. Good second paragraph, of course only the rich eat well. Well written 3rd paragraph.A very good 4rd and 5th paragraph. The rest is pretty good
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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A unique picture. Good and well written first paragraph. Good second paragraph, of course only the rich eat well. Well written 3rd paragraph.A very good 4rd and 5th paragraph. The rest is pretty good
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Glads certain portions in this write were found appealing to interests. No mentioned pits, just oh hum. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Lisa Heath
The reviewer of this poem recognizes the pitfalls of what we do with our hands and also, in trying to get along with most people isn't going to kill our children or grandchildren anymore. Lisa Heath We wouldn't want our children or ourselves bullied, be streetsmart and also kind to those who won't hurt us, in Christ,s name Amen
eath smart, know why and perhaps what type of meds their parents take whete PS We want our children to be street
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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The reviewer of this poem recognizes the pitfalls of what we do with our hands and also, in trying to get along with most people isn't going to kill our children or grandchildren anymore. Lisa Heath We wouldn't want our children or ourselves bullied, be streetsmart and also kind to those who won't hurt us, in Christ,s name Amen
eath smart, know why and perhaps what type of meds their parents take whete PS We want our children to be street
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Deep thoughts and glad aspects of this write were found appealing to you. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.
Comment from meeshu
this speaks to me of the futility of Man's labor without the anchor of God. brings me to the legend of King Sisyphus. your style is so unlike anything else around, TPAC. I dig it....................meeshu
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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this speaks to me of the futility of Man's labor without the anchor of God. brings me to the legend of King Sisyphus. your style is so unlike anything else around, TPAC. I dig it....................meeshu
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Wow, happy someone does. Glad even with pits my intent captured at least your attention. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from SLMorrical
This is wonderfully written. It was an easy read to follow. I could see the workers working hard and diligent. In olden times they would finish up at work and be home in time for prayers and worship. The pictures just adds to this poem using an image that shows the confusion and the pain workers could go through if not praising god first. Very Well done. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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This is wonderfully written. It was an easy read to follow. I could see the workers working hard and diligent. In olden times they would finish up at work and be home in time for prayers and worship. The pictures just adds to this poem using an image that shows the confusion and the pain workers could go through if not praising god first. Very Well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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Glad aspects of this write were found appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and warm sentiments.