Dressed to Kill
How fast that time goes!14 total reviews
Comment from Lovinia
hi Sharyn
a delight to see a post from you, and a win at that. congratulations on this well voiced free verse. you've captured the joys and memories of every mother of sons. lol i have three ... the mirrors were well used, i had no idea boys preened as much as girls. i love the image - perfect.
such humour - 'constipated chicken look', hahahaha. ahh the memories that brought back. i can remember one eighteen year old asking me if his 'bum looks too big in these jeans' ... the other one was more concerned with his hairstyle, which a mother had to cringe ... what happened to the 'college-look cut' ... oh well, he is creative. ;] twenty three, twenty four and twenty six ... the mirror still has priority. no 'gorilla ancestry' .. so i haven't experienced the body shaves ... though beards are 'in' at the moment.
i could ranble on about my boys .. i guess they are as well-loved as your young man is. great work. hugs - Lovi xoxo
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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hi Sharyn
a delight to see a post from you, and a win at that. congratulations on this well voiced free verse. you've captured the joys and memories of every mother of sons. lol i have three ... the mirrors were well used, i had no idea boys preened as much as girls. i love the image - perfect.
such humour - 'constipated chicken look', hahahaha. ahh the memories that brought back. i can remember one eighteen year old asking me if his 'bum looks too big in these jeans' ... the other one was more concerned with his hairstyle, which a mother had to cringe ... what happened to the 'college-look cut' ... oh well, he is creative. ;] twenty three, twenty four and twenty six ... the mirror still has priority. no 'gorilla ancestry' .. so i haven't experienced the body shaves ... though beards are 'in' at the moment.
i could ranble on about my boys .. i guess they are as well-loved as your young man is. great work. hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Well bless your heart Lovi - thank you for your lovely six! I didn't know you had three boys. Mine is really something. I thought I was mirror obsessed at that age, but NOTHING compared to this young peacock, who insists that he needs a haircut every ten DAYS!
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hi Sharyn
just times three what you have ... and you'll know the rest. lol no girls, though plenty of nieces to do the girly things with. ;] you've captured the mirror gaze perfectly. hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment from mfowler
Excellent, Sharyn. Don't you know all young men do this to some degree. Your wonderful poem gives preening and posing a new level of misunderstood admiration. Loved the gorilla ancestry and the doubts about yourself for liking hair on men. Great construction and clever flow throughout this.
Congratulations on sharing the win. This cod be the first time that two ex-St Aidans students have shared a poetry prize on FS.
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Excellent, Sharyn. Don't you know all young men do this to some degree. Your wonderful poem gives preening and posing a new level of misunderstood admiration. Loved the gorilla ancestry and the doubts about yourself for liking hair on men. Great construction and clever flow throughout this.
Congratulations on sharing the win. This cod be the first time that two ex-St Aidans students have shared a poetry prize on FS.
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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"Aloha" Mark - and thank you for your delightful feedback. I just noticed we'd shared a first. How funny! I'm pushing myself to write at the moment - been so crazy busy these last 6 months that I'm out of practice, so I figure the prompts are a great place to start. I thoroughly enjoyed your piece!
Comment from Pantygynt
This is an unusual take from a mother on her son. It is a wonderful pot-pourri mixture of adoration an and concern for the direction taken by the young man who "...wears out every mirror in the house" with his callow vanity." But she is a sensible mother and there is no sign of panic. As the poem nears its end It is as if she knows this is just a phase and her pride in him shines out clear. Very well crafted.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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This is an unusual take from a mother on her son. It is a wonderful pot-pourri mixture of adoration an and concern for the direction taken by the young man who "...wears out every mirror in the house" with his callow vanity." But she is a sensible mother and there is no sign of panic. As the poem nears its end It is as if she knows this is just a phase and her pride in him shines out clear. Very well crafted.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thanks so my Pg!
Comment from Megalips
This is really a magnificent piece...I was taken back, because I did not really expect this subject (not that I knew what to expect, based on the title), but it's different from the list of things anticipated, and that is a good thing...the kind of thing that opens your eyes. Your descriptions of this young man thru his mother's eyes just glue me to the screen, imagining him there in front of the mirror checking himself...he has no idea you are caught up on this 'shaving' and wondering just how far he takes it...absolutely hilarious and yet so genuine.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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This is really a magnificent piece...I was taken back, because I did not really expect this subject (not that I knew what to expect, based on the title), but it's different from the list of things anticipated, and that is a good thing...the kind of thing that opens your eyes. Your descriptions of this young man thru his mother's eyes just glue me to the screen, imagining him there in front of the mirror checking himself...he has no idea you are caught up on this 'shaving' and wondering just how far he takes it...absolutely hilarious and yet so genuine.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Bless you, Meg ... what a lovely sixer gift! So glad you enjoyed this piece about my 18 year old soon-to-be-man!
Comment from amada
I really liked this one, it reminds me of my grandson, the way he was. Your mother's love and pride distilling in every line. Good for you. Celebrate those six-foot-two and counting.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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I really liked this one, it reminds me of my grandson, the way he was. Your mother's love and pride distilling in every line. Good for you. Celebrate those six-foot-two and counting.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Bless you Amada!
Comment from TPAC
Sweet. Poet has skills and display this wonderful ballet in a story evolving and capturing its reader into poet web nicely done Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Sweet. Poet has skills and display this wonderful ballet in a story evolving and capturing its reader into poet web nicely done Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thanks so much TPAC!
Comment from danpald
How it is to be a father
Watching the little boy
Grow now to be a teenager
Knowing everything that is nothing known
Well the time to ponder
What will be the next step smarter
To find a bride or a job
That education is not a sure rob
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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How it is to be a father
Watching the little boy
Grow now to be a teenager
Knowing everything that is nothing known
Well the time to ponder
What will be the next step smarter
To find a bride or a job
That education is not a sure rob
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thanks so much Dan!
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was a little melancholy, but also a bit humorous. It's also all very true. It was if you were in my home, watching my 21 year-old son primp as he looks at himself in the mirror. He's quite the ladies man, and he most definitely knows it. He uses his chiseled six-pack physique and looks to his fullest advantage. The boy can't walk past a mirror in the house without stopping to admire himself, check his hair, or see if he needs a shave.
Still, he was once my little boy too, and I can't help but smile.
Wonderfully written free verse.
You got my vote! :) ~Dean
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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This was a little melancholy, but also a bit humorous. It's also all very true. It was if you were in my home, watching my 21 year-old son primp as he looks at himself in the mirror. He's quite the ladies man, and he most definitely knows it. He uses his chiseled six-pack physique and looks to his fullest advantage. The boy can't walk past a mirror in the house without stopping to admire himself, check his hair, or see if he needs a shave.
Still, he was once my little boy too, and I can't help but smile.
Wonderfully written free verse.
You got my vote! :) ~Dean
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Melancholy? Hmmmm ... hadn't thought of it that way, Dean ... my primper is only 18, so a little more to go yet before he becomes quite human!
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I think it creates a sense of melancholy when we look at our now grown-up kids and remember them when they were small, and helpless, and needed us once. It does for me, anyway.
You're very welcome. I hope my vote helps you out. ~Dean
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aaah, NOW I get it! I was definitely mystified! And yes, you're right - that's part of the aging process I do NOT like! :)
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Me either...
Comment from meggie13
The picture used enhances your poem . It is well written with a surprise ending. Your son is a very handsome young man and is getting ready to for a job interview. He is constantly checking himself in the mirror to assure he looks good. They grow too fast before our own eyes.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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The picture used enhances your poem . It is well written with a surprise ending. Your son is a very handsome young man and is getting ready to for a job interview. He is constantly checking himself in the mirror to assure he looks good. They grow too fast before our own eyes.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thanks so much Meggie :)
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You are very welcome.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a really well done done free verse (enhanced by that striking picture of tiny baby feet held between grown-up hands). His spirit still is innocent even though he's now six-foot-two. He competes even with himself. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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This is a really well done done free verse (enhanced by that striking picture of tiny baby feet held between grown-up hands). His spirit still is innocent even though he's now six-foot-two. He competes even with himself. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 15-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Thank you Jeanie! Not many got the 'competition' part of this prompt - but then again, the prompt is not well written, either!
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Yes, that's true.