To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "Perseus and Medusa"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from visionary1234
I often write free verse in this fashion, staggered across the page, and find it very effective, so no worries there. A bit too much rhyme for 'free verse' though perhaps? though I know it's not in a regular rhyme 'scheme' ... hmmm ... might be worth researching?
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I often write free verse in this fashion, staggered across the page, and find it very effective, so no worries there. A bit too much rhyme for 'free verse' though perhaps? though I know it's not in a regular rhyme 'scheme' ... hmmm ... might be worth researching?
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Ha! You're the only one who noticed. I like a little rhyme in free verse, but you caught me! There is a disguised rhyme scheme and mostly iambic pentameter as well. I wanted it to flow like a sonnet, but I did over do it as you point out. Congratulations on your win. What a beautiful piece you wrote. mikey
Comment from dmt1967
The green eyed monster is a powerful emotion. I enjoyed this tale of woe and intrigue. I liked the way it was written and the format. Good luck in the contest, and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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The green eyed monster is a powerful emotion. I enjoyed this tale of woe and intrigue. I liked the way it was written and the format. Good luck in the contest, and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I'm pleased you liked the format. It isn't everyone's favorite, but I've always favored it. mikey
Comment from TPAC
Profound conveyance with interesting theme for a poem, the good old myths and or realities of old Informative didn't know the young lady desired Poseidon. I thought Poseidon wanted the young delight I don't know Being more precise in this work would enhance proper set of items listed Thanking you for sharing nice
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Profound conveyance with interesting theme for a poem, the good old myths and or realities of old Informative didn't know the young lady desired Poseidon. I thought Poseidon wanted the young delight I don't know Being more precise in this work would enhance proper set of items listed Thanking you for sharing nice
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you so much for your analysis and insights. Pleased you enjoyed and related to the theme. mikey
Comment from danpald
Well the poet tales the story
The rendering of the times of glory
When the gods did walk with mankind
Making many lose the force of time
Still so many today do not know
The tales of virtues that unfold
The learning of the growth of mankind
To be freed from gods but live their lives
The time for the gods to go was coming
The time for mankind to make it's following
Soon to be transformed with learning
The power of thinking and virtue growing
Have we passed these times of old
Now returning to the loss of virtue
Does mankind learn through the ages
The death of the gods was more then just fables
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Well the poet tales the story
The rendering of the times of glory
When the gods did walk with mankind
Making many lose the force of time
Still so many today do not know
The tales of virtues that unfold
The learning of the growth of mankind
To be freed from gods but live their lives
The time for the gods to go was coming
The time for mankind to make it's following
Soon to be transformed with learning
The power of thinking and virtue growing
Have we passed these times of old
Now returning to the loss of virtue
Does mankind learn through the ages
The death of the gods was more then just fables
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you. I think you're review may be better than my piece! mikey
Comment from emkoutny
That passion got Medusa into a barrel of trouble, didn't it? I always thought she got an unusually unfair rap. I love the flow of your poem and how you set up your lines. I love the subject matter of mythology and its meaning. I liked how you showed the irony of her situation.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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That passion got Medusa into a barrel of trouble, didn't it? I always thought she got an unusually unfair rap. I love the flow of your poem and how you set up your lines. I love the subject matter of mythology and its meaning. I liked how you showed the irony of her situation.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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I agree. When I read the details of her story it seemed an awfully harsh price to pay. Thanks for the great insights. mikey
Comment from mfowler
You've done very well to capture this epic story in one well paced free verse. You've captured the main elements and developed good dramatic and emotional response through tight story telling and clever use of words and well placed lines. Best of luck in the vote.
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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You've done very well to capture this epic story in one well paced free verse. You've captured the main elements and developed good dramatic and emotional response through tight story telling and clever use of words and well placed lines. Best of luck in the vote.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Thank you very much. I hope I'll have some time to get some fanstorying done now. What an abyss I've created. mikey
Comment from K. Lorraine
Words are words no matter what format...
And these words told a story that captured my attention. The story is well-know, but I like what you've done with it. The picture is outstanding...
I don't think anything can compete with this poem, but I shall try once again and enter a beginner's poem... just to see where it might take me.
Best wishes in the contest and I cautiously say that this is the poem to beat.
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Words are words no matter what format...
And these words told a story that captured my attention. The story is well-know, but I like what you've done with it. The picture is outstanding...
I don't think anything can compete with this poem, but I shall try once again and enter a beginner's poem... just to see where it might take me.
Best wishes in the contest and I cautiously say that this is the poem to beat.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Unique style that does indeed draw the reader's interest and holds it throughout this well written poem. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
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Unique style that does indeed draw the reader's interest and holds it throughout this well written poem. Easy to follow story line. Write on.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
