Little Poems
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Comment from tfawcus
You have captured something of the intricate motion of the maypole dance in this. I love the confused gathering of the 'winding whorl of worlds' as the dancers close in together. There are several other examples, too. Although not alliterative verse in the pure sense, where alliteration of the same letter spans both halves of the line, you have nonetheless caught the essence of the dance. Congratulations on being short-listed for POM.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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You have captured something of the intricate motion of the maypole dance in this. I love the confused gathering of the 'winding whorl of worlds' as the dancers close in together. There are several other examples, too. Although not alliterative verse in the pure sense, where alliteration of the same letter spans both halves of the line, you have nonetheless caught the essence of the dance. Congratulations on being short-listed for POM.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thank you Tony. I was surprised they chose this poem to be in the contest. Appreciate your review and comments.
Comment from amanda98653
This is magnificent, Treischel.
Although this is an unrhymed poem with no meter, the verses are still lyrical.
I love the amazing allliterations and the compelling imagery the verses create.
May is my favorite month of the year. I planted some veggies in the backyard last month. Hopefully the garden will thrive.
Hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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This is magnificent, Treischel.
Although this is an unrhymed poem with no meter, the verses are still lyrical.
I love the amazing allliterations and the compelling imagery the verses create.
May is my favorite month of the year. I planted some veggies in the backyard last month. Hopefully the garden will thrive.
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much Amanda. It is good to hear from you again. Hope your garden is growing well.
Comment from pipersfancy
I thought this was spot-on spectacular! Wonderful, deft winding of words 'round the Maypole, as it were... Lovely, lilting phrases that set the feet tapping in rhythm to the twirling and winding of young lovers in their dance.
Really, really enjoyed this piece - and I've learned through you (through Pantygynt) about an ancient form of verse... made new again. I shall have to try an alliterative verse of my own!
Best wishes with this lovely offering in the POM contest!
PF
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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I thought this was spot-on spectacular! Wonderful, deft winding of words 'round the Maypole, as it were... Lovely, lilting phrases that set the feet tapping in rhythm to the twirling and winding of young lovers in their dance.
Really, really enjoyed this piece - and I've learned through you (through Pantygynt) about an ancient form of verse... made new again. I shall have to try an alliterative verse of my own!
Best wishes with this lovely offering in the POM contest!
PF
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thank you pipersfancy. This is a wonderful review.
Comment from RGstar
Oh, my friend. What joy to see you here contending for poem of the month. It gladens me wholeheartedly. A lovely write, full of imagery with good allieteration. Remember, the process is sometimes as good as the win.
Congrats, my friend. Well deserved.
RGstar
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Oh, my friend. What joy to see you here contending for poem of the month. It gladens me wholeheartedly. A lovely write, full of imagery with good allieteration. Remember, the process is sometimes as good as the win.
Congrats, my friend. Well deserved.
RGstar
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thank you RG. That is most encouraging.
Comment from Nosha17
I have seen many Morris dancers and maypole dancers in my time. I love them, very traditional form of May Day celebrations held on village greens in England. The Belthane is a Gaelic festival and Morris dancing originated in the fifteenth century in England. I like the way you have brought these traditions to life in your poem. Well chosen words and imagery, most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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I have seen many Morris dancers and maypole dancers in my time. I love them, very traditional form of May Day celebrations held on village greens in England. The Belthane is a Gaelic festival and Morris dancing originated in the fifteenth century in England. I like the way you have brought these traditions to life in your poem. Well chosen words and imagery, most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thank you Faye. It was a fun research and write.
Comment from BJ_Barnes
Great poem! The history lesson in the notes definitely helped me understand It better. It flows together very well and the imagery is excellent. Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Great poem! The history lesson in the notes definitely helped me understand It better. It flows together very well and the imagery is excellent. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thank you very much B J.
Comment from sunnilicious
I never heard of this poetic style before, however, this poem is completely enjoyable. It is full of vivid visual imagery. Great in-depth research and author notes. Wonderful storytelling skills. Fantastic work.
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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I never heard of this poetic style before, however, this poem is completely enjoyable. It is full of vivid visual imagery. Great in-depth research and author notes. Wonderful storytelling skills. Fantastic work.
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Thank you Alicia. Its nice when hard work us recognized.
Comment from ravenblack
Your alliterative into alliterative verse - in the passages dealing with the dance- really gave the flavor of motion. Phallic or not, Spring deserves such celebration. I really appreciate you author notes.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Your alliterative into alliterative verse - in the passages dealing with the dance- really gave the flavor of motion. Phallic or not, Spring deserves such celebration. I really appreciate you author notes.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you ravenblack. I agree with you. Celebrate Spring!
Comment from benoenose
Cultural sentimental poem with the love of cultures, the poet challenges the historical process of threat of culture. But, still moves on with the tradition. Sweet way of expressing the challenges impresses the reader.
Read by cultural care takers and indigenous dancers.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Cultural sentimental poem with the love of cultures, the poet challenges the historical process of threat of culture. But, still moves on with the tradition. Sweet way of expressing the challenges impresses the reader.
Read by cultural care takers and indigenous dancers.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you benoenose. I appreciate this fine review and am pleasantly pleased by these six stars.
Comment from bizzygirl
Wonderful presentation of the poem, although I enjoy the presentation it does not count in the evealutaion. This is lyrical and I can hear flutes and lyres in the background as the dancer cavort. It carried my emotion of a cloud of a lovely May Day when we are out clebrating Spring. You have many fine phrases and turns of words that make the poem cary you along. One of my favorite lines is: 'Where the Fairy fantasies grew from the forests, And the little people legends littered the lands. ' I love alliteration often do it without thinking. Charming work and perfect for Spring. Thank you for sharing. WELL DONE
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Wonderful presentation of the poem, although I enjoy the presentation it does not count in the evealutaion. This is lyrical and I can hear flutes and lyres in the background as the dancer cavort. It carried my emotion of a cloud of a lovely May Day when we are out clebrating Spring. You have many fine phrases and turns of words that make the poem cary you along. One of my favorite lines is: 'Where the Fairy fantasies grew from the forests, And the little people legends littered the lands. ' I love alliteration often do it without thinking. Charming work and perfect for Spring. Thank you for sharing. WELL DONE
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you buzzygirl. I appreciate you excellent review and comments.
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