Comment from amahra

Excellent

Sorry that I missed this. Beautiful sixty-word dash entry for the contest. I thought that it was very well written; it had everything readers needed to know in just a paragraph.

 Comment Written 18-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015

Thank you so much! I had fun writing it.

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hello Rhonda,

A very clever, modern take on the Christmas story.

I was quite taken aback when I realized who you were writing about. :)

Good piece!

Best wishes for the contest. So nice to meet you. :)

Until next time,

Sonali :)




Joseph, son of David," an (a)ngel said, "(D)o ... suggest: the angel said

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you so much, Sonali. Your comments are very much appreciated!
Rhonda

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Well, I would suspect that Joe got the answers he was seeking, especially given the nature of the messenger who delivered it.

I enjoyed this modernized version of the retelling of the conception of the Christ child, davisr.

Well done! ~Dean :)

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you so much, Dean. It was my first stab at Flash Fiction. I usually go for the long and drawn out, but it was fun,
Rhonda

reply by Dean Kuch on 17-Mar-2015

You did a fantastic job, Rhonda. Especially for your first-ever attempt. ~Dean

reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015

Thanks so much, Dean. It's fun discovering new venues for writings. I believe it's all refining my novel writing. Thanks.

reply by Dean Kuch on 18-Mar-2015

You're very welcome.

Comment from Janet7053

Excellent

Good Morning, This is an extraordinary feat to tell a story in 60 words without sounding short and choppy. I am blessed this morning to hear of the story of my Lord. Who says we cannot bring Glory to Him in our work. This touched my heart today.

The fact that you chose Joseph and led us in the first part to see Joe as a modern man was really creative.

This accompanying drawing bring us to a choice as well. Good social commentary.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you so much. You have touched my heart, too

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

I did not see the Jesus, Mary, Joseph story coming.
The opening was like any situation of unexpected pregnancy. But at the last minute, you reveal the holy characters. A new genre. Christian flash. Well done. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you so much! I think that's a good idea...Christian flash...

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

It's true--if Joe loves enough, the rest doesn't matter. Good story, giving food for thought.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you so much for the reiew. I enjoyed writing it.

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Loving hands and a heart of gold. Keep your focus on Jesus. Great way to witnes
to the nation. I like the way you wrote the story to touch hearts. Joseph stepped up to be a great earthly father. God bless the work of your hands in Jesus name.
flylikeaneagle good contest entry - soli deo Gloria!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

Thank you so much. You have encouraged me, and, you are right, I did write the story to touch hearts! You have touched mine!

reply by flylikeaneagle on 17-Mar-2015

I appreciate you. I have the heart for Jesus to be the light and shake salt on the words to touch hearts. So many are caught in depression and anxiety. I try to bring joy and hope, Jesus style. I can tell you do too. God bless! flylikeaneagle

reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015

We need more lights in a dark world, thanks,
Rhonda

Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This is an excellent portrayal of the story. I liked the way you saved the punch line until the very end and made me think it was just any couple. Then you pulled it all together and I realized who you were talking about. Good job.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you so much! Nice review. It means a lot to hear what other people think. I enjoyed writing it.

Comment from fimarie78

Excellent

Very powerful writing. Using the names Joe and Marium was genius and then your angel reference makes it clear to the reader. Well done and good luck ij the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you so much for the review and well wishes!

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

OH! I loved this brief story - you actually presented backstory, conflict and resolution, not to mention a very appealing character, all in sixty words - hole smokes, that's fabulous writing! Best of luck with this gem in the contest!

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015

Thank you so much! What a wonderfully written review! 60 words if fun, but challenging. Appreciate your take on it!