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Aluminum Splinters

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Comment from lancellot
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Reminds me of the Bad New Bears, the classic baseball tale of a underdog who rises up and for just moment plays a perfect game. This is what inspires. Well done.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
    Thank you much lancellot for a great review. John
Comment from angelface2
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good little story for the beginning of the baseball season. My grandsons played on little league and loved it. I watched them as much as I could. I'm a Tiger fan, of course! Miss Sally

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
    Thank you for your time. I appreciate your stopping by to read. John
Comment from Jacob Collins
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I often think that it is a good things to lose sometimes at the things you are good at. If you don't lose then it will surely never give you any room for improvement and will always make you feel smug. I enjoyed reading this piece and I thought that your writing flowed well and I couldn't find any faults...Jacob

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
    Thank you very much Jacob for the encouraging review. I do appreciate it, John
Comment from closetpoetjester
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Hope and inspiration is what it's all about and you've somehow captured the whole story and their ongoing positivity in a mere six sentences. I would think the extra innings would have been a crowd pleaser and I'm sure most were rooting for the underdog. It's not ALWAYS about winning. Sportsmanship is indeed the most important lesson at work. Well written John.
Cheers P

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
    P, I couldn't agree with you more. It's always better to win, but it is also important how one gets there.
    Thank you, John
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi,

It is that time of year, with bases loaded, down to the last out, and the count --- 3 and 2. You can smell the hot dogs in the air. Perfection! (*<*)

Great story.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)



 Comment Written 07-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
    I love this time of year (minus all the snow), when the smell of the leather baseball mitt and balls popping inside them.
    Thank you ... John
Comment from Mastery
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And I am one happy camper that spring training is under way, John. I am a baseball nut! It's a long long way from October to March as far as I'm concerned. Youve done a good job with this. Is it a contest entry? I don't see a mention of that on the page? Great structure and delivery anyway. Bob

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 08-Mar-2015
    Bob, , thank you for the encouraging review and for being another avid baseball fan as I am. Who do you root for. Me die-hard Yankee fan. Have a great day, John
reply by Mastery on 08-Mar-2015
    I grew up on Long Island and was a aBrooklyn Dodger fan...now....die hard Cubs fan, but root for the Tigers too since I live in Michigan now. LOL...Bob
Comment from kriver
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Hi,
This is a very good story
with such limited parameters too.
It has all the dramatics of the game.
Overall, I think it is a very good write.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
    Thank you, kriver, for your time in reading and reviewing.
    Always appreciated... John
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi jmdg1954

Not being a baseball player, I don't necessaily 'get' the niceties of the game, but your short tale of determination among the junior players puts the excitement they get from it over very well.

Nicely done.

Patrick

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
    Thank you. Patrick. I'm glad you got the point of children believing in themselves and the team and never giving up.
    John
Comment from Cajungirl
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Great prose! My son two grandson are looking forward to another season of little league. They've been practicing their swings and catching. Thanks for sharing your wonderful story.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
    I used to love that time of year with the kids. Thank you for sharing life's experiences. John
Comment from Pyrrho
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What fun it was playing baseball when I was a child and what a bore it is since i outlived participating, but I suppose there are those who enjoy watching there children stand around on a grass field for hours waiting for the few seconds of activity.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2015

reply by the author on 07-Mar-2015
    I'm glad you were able to share some experiences with me after reading this.
    John