THE TRINING Book Three
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Comment from marijmd
My condolences about the crash! I lost a book a little over a year ago and I'm still heart sick over it.
Its nice to read about Doctirx again and get back with the story -
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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My condolences about the crash! I lost a book a little over a year ago and I'm still heart sick over it.
Its nice to read about Doctirx again and get back with the story -
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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The actual story will begin about Saturday. Thanks for reading this.
Comment from ravenblack
Interesting use of magic, seemingly rampaging "Irish Wolfhounds" not actually attacking, but killing with kindness, preying on vulnerability. Who can resist an overgrown puppy's tongue? Who are some of your favorite sci-fi authors?
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Interesting use of magic, seemingly rampaging "Irish Wolfhounds" not actually attacking, but killing with kindness, preying on vulnerability. Who can resist an overgrown puppy's tongue? Who are some of your favorite sci-fi authors?
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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It may surprise you (then again, it may not surprise you at all), I'm not a sci-fi or fantasy reader. This is my first venture into fantasy ... and I'm so anxious for the book to end. When I started the first book of The Trining, I was informed that if you only write the one you won't have a following; it takes two or three. So I decided on a trilogy. This is my last book of the trilogy. I'm doing the summary of it since I was off pouting when my last 1/3 of it was lost in a computer crash. And now, a couple of months later, I'm re-creating the lost chapters, but I have to assume others have memories as short as mine. TMI, I know. Thanks Ed, for the response.
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Try Dan Simmons' Hyperion. It won the Hugo award, sci-fi loosely based on The Canterbury Tales.
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That sounds interesting. I wonder if it's on Kindle? I'll check it out. Thanks for referring it.
Comment from Zue65
The being who defeated Doctrex is obviously a mean character and a real devotee of the devil and Doctrex is in for a tough battle. He should have heeded Giln's warning and premonition. His stubbornness is his Achillles' heel, I believe. An exciting chapter, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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The being who defeated Doctrex is obviously a mean character and a real devotee of the devil and Doctrex is in for a tough battle. He should have heeded Giln's warning and premonition. His stubbornness is his Achillles' heel, I believe. An exciting chapter, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2015
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Of course this is less of a chapter and more of a summary of an entire book in three parts. But, thank you for reading it and hopefully to become involved in the final chapters of the novel to begin posting at the end of the week.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I have a lot of admiration for your thoroughness, Jay, in allowing us all a brief history of the story to catch us up before you continue. I'm so sorry you had so much extra work, but I'm sure your readers will appreciate it, Giddy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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I have a lot of admiration for your thoroughness, Jay, in allowing us all a brief history of the story to catch us up before you continue. I'm so sorry you had so much extra work, but I'm sure your readers will appreciate it, Giddy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Giddy. I hope it doesn't backfire. Summaries tend to be a bit on the dry side. I shall be posting the first re-created chapter soon.
Comment from Fridayauthor
The story line s great but this reads like a summary or description of the book more than the book itself. As I understand you, that's your intention and as such, it is well done.
It's difficult to critique it in any detail. One point stood out; the need to fill in all the time. For instance, in the heat of action, D sends back for his trusted men but it's difficult to visualize what goes on, or what he's doing about it, until they get there.
Sorry about the lost material. Been there, done that.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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The story line s great but this reads like a summary or description of the book more than the book itself. As I understand you, that's your intention and as such, it is well done.
It's difficult to critique it in any detail. One point stood out; the need to fill in all the time. For instance, in the heat of action, D sends back for his trusted men but it's difficult to visualize what goes on, or what he's doing about it, until they get there.
Sorry about the lost material. Been there, done that.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Ray. Yeah, a bit sparse. Not a lot to oooh and ahhh about. It's just to offer any new readers willing to take a chance on the new chapters without feeling totally in the dark. Thanks for reading this and the suggestion. See you at the new post, sometime late Saturday, early Sunday.
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 26 of the book Let's Talk Dirty! It's noe Laura's turn to answer the phone. "Time to log on. Part Three" I liked this chapter. It was highly entertaining and I found the structure very solid indeed, if that's what it was. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Chapter 26 of the book Let's Talk Dirty! It's noe Laura's turn to answer the phone. "Time to log on. Part Three" I liked this chapter. It was highly entertaining and I found the structure very solid indeed, if that's what it was. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Thanks, Chas. I don't get the conection, though, with "Let's Talk Dirty!" Are you reviewing the right thing?
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Sorry my friend, just the printing devil again. It happens sometimes when I'm very busy.
Comment from GracieAnn
Jay, it seems that you are gathering momentum in the reconstitution of your novel. I'm finding it easier to read and keep the characters straight. Strong effort to move forward. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Jay, it seems that you are gathering momentum in the reconstitution of your novel. I'm finding it easier to read and keep the characters straight. Strong effort to move forward. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 03-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2015
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Thank you, GracieAnn. The first and the third are the "drier" of the three summaries, but it doesn't matter. They are designed as a reference only for the newer readers and a refresher for those who'd been aboard all along. I hope you choose to read the new chapters.
Comment from Sankey
Good coming through here again. Had forgotten some of this especially the big dogs. A lot was coming back to me as I read it again. Curious to see where we go. You have done a good job at bringing back the stuff you lost.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Good coming through here again. Had forgotten some of this especially the big dogs. A lot was coming back to me as I read it again. Curious to see where we go. You have done a good job at bringing back the stuff you lost.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Glad the summary helped remember some things. Just posted the final part of the summary. By Saturday I hope to have the first of the new chapters up.
Comment from krprice
This was another good summarization, though I did find there were commas missing in places. However, since this is not for submission to a publisher, you might ignore them.
I hope you are up and running now and back to writing.
Karlene
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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This was another good summarization, though I did find there were commas missing in places. However, since this is not for submission to a publisher, you might ignore them.
I hope you are up and running now and back to writing.
Karlene
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Well, I still have part three of this "appreviation" I should post this evening and then begin with the first of the newly re-created chapters toward the end of the week.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi, Jay it's me again. Just a couple of comments:
Aw, that's so cute, that gigantic hound tickling the soldier.
Great visuals here, Jay with the hounds and the giant man in full-body armour. I can totally see this playing out.
There is a lot to absorb but I'm getting a much clearer picture of the story and the character of your protagonist. The fragmented imagination is an interesting premise, so I look forward to learning where this will all go.
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Hi, Jay it's me again. Just a couple of comments:
Aw, that's so cute, that gigantic hound tickling the soldier.
Great visuals here, Jay with the hounds and the giant man in full-body armour. I can totally see this playing out.
There is a lot to absorb but I'm getting a much clearer picture of the story and the character of your protagonist. The fragmented imagination is an interesting premise, so I look forward to learning where this will all go.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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I'm so happy this is helping you understand the trajectory of the plot. I didn't realize how difficult this would be. I would despise being the author of a cliff notes study guide. But, if it gathers a few extra readers for the "lost chapters" it will be worth the effort. Glad to see you among those.