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When Blood Collides

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A family's love is tested.

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Comment from w.j.debi
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Such honesty...feeling flattered and burdened that your mom wants to stay only with you. She cannot live alone, and because you love her you take car of her.

Great hook for the next scene in that closing line.

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2015


reply by the author on 23-Feb-2015
    It is a burden to have one depend on you emotionally. Thanks for recognizing that.
Comment from Rosalyne
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Hi, Shari.
I'm sorry for such a late response. I had read your first installment and am slowly catching up. You described so well the changes our bodies go through as we age. Your mom felt a special bond toward you and Frank. Offering your elderly parent a place in your home isn't easy. This really shows how kind and giving a person you are. I hope your better and over your cold.
Bye, my friend.
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
    I give hubby credit for the offer although I probably would have done so eventually. It made it easier than he wanted her, if you know what I meas.
Comment from michaelcahill
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Wow. You can jam so much information into such a short space. You have a clear snapshot of almost your whole family in place with just a few pointed remarks here and there. For some reason I'm the one who ends up taking care of everyone too. It strikes me funny as I don't even know what I want to be when I grow up. It must be some strange genetic condition. mikey

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
    Appreciate the remark on the tightness of this. That's what a good night's sleep will do. In this world some people are givers. Must be the residue of a past life or a kamic payback. LOL
Comment from Selina Stambi
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I hope the writing is therapeutic, Shari.

My parents are getting up there in age. They live at the other end of the world. I, too, have a Mother Superior who resides on the same continent as I.

The parallels in our lives - yours and mine - is quite amazing. :)

Hope you feel better soon.

Love,

Sonali xx

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
    I can't think of anyone else I'd rather align with. I'm impressed with your relationship to Harold.
reply by Selina Stambi on 13-Jan-2015
    That means a lot. Thank you, Shari.
Comment from Leen1
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No apologies needed for the length of this piece, as the story being told is well worth the wait. I Thank you for sharing your life as it does make such an interesting read. Very truthfully written.

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
    Thanks, Leen. I just posted part three.
Comment from Donya Quijote
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This is the first I think I have heard of Anne. I don't think you have ever mentioned her, though I have to admit that I may have missed some segments of you your life.

Your description of the your mother's aged body is quite vivid. This phrase was especially telling: her large pendulous breasts erased any sign of a waist. I have seen this of all places at the beach in Florida.

5'2", no wonder you're a spitfire. You had to be to keep those jocks on task in your classes.

Look for the next part...

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
    My male students did tower over me, but I never backed away or flinched. Anne is ten years older than I and left home at twenty to get married. She ended up in California, so we didn't see her often.
Comment from Deniz22
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"I figured out doctors think that if women can survive childbirth, they can handle anything."

This is a personal belief of mine, but I hold it on the one hand with deepest respect, and on the other, with profound gratitude men are not called to bear "bairns". :)

"Guilt" seems to be the spiritual hangover of caregivers. It shows up after the completion of the "tour of duty" and retro minimizes your day to day sacrifices while maximizing the natural desire to be done with the thing.
We do the best we can...let them criticize who never did it or lent a hand. You go, girl. MMCK



 Comment Written 12-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
    Thanks for a second exceptional writing! Love you pun about bairns. and war metaphor on guilt. My daughter believes that guilt is highly overrated. LOL
Comment from padumachitta
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Hey. I hope your cold is getting better.
It is so hard looking after the folks...and doing it alone...
and then writing about it...
padumachitta

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
    Thanks, pad. Feeling much better today.
Comment from Shirley B
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Dear Shari, I am enjoying this story about your mother. When I was about 10, my mothers's dad rotated between my mom and her brother and sisters until he passed away. It worked for them but they all lived in the same small town. I am looking forward to reading more. Have a great week, Shirley

 Comment Written 12-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
    That would be an ideal situation. I think men are not so fussy as to who they live with. My mom still would have not looked forward to being with my other sisters. Thanks so much for the ideal rating.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
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We could always look back and say I could have done this or that but the truth is we do the best we can at the time the situation is presented. You never know how things are going to turn out. My sister is a know it all too. I don't know what's going to happen when my parents gets old. Hopefully we have some time before that happens.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jan-2015
    Good insight for one so young and pretty.