Walk With Me.
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "In the Beginning"From victim to survivor of abuse.
6 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
A well written description of the events that impacted your early life. As you say a simmering cauldron of emotions and abuse. It is told smoothly , with good , albeit sad, recollections. A compelling tale.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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A well written description of the events that impacted your early life. As you say a simmering cauldron of emotions and abuse. It is told smoothly , with good , albeit sad, recollections. A compelling tale.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you for a generous and thoughtful review.
I am behind in reviews due to phone/ internet issues.
I will catch up ASAP.
"-) Shirley
Comment from Sankey
Thanks for sharing your life with us dear Sis. I hope it is a help to you to experience the love and care of your Bros and Sisters here in FS.
Your story reminds me so much of the fifties based movies like Harp in the South and so on. I know I had a pretty good life compared to yours and I feel so sorry for you. I would be interested to know just how much help the Catholic church was to you in all those years? God Bless.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thanks for sharing your life with us dear Sis. I hope it is a help to you to experience the love and care of your Bros and Sisters here in FS.
Your story reminds me so much of the fifties based movies like Harp in the South and so on. I know I had a pretty good life compared to yours and I feel so sorry for you. I would be interested to know just how much help the Catholic church was to you in all those years? God Bless.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you for a caring and thoughtful review.
I appreciate your comments and interest.
The Catholic church and Sisters of Saint Joseph were a Godsend to us.
The same support would most likely not be available today as everything in
life takes on a monetary value.
I am behind in reviews due to phone/internet issues.
I Will catch up ASAP
:-)
Comment from granny goes viral
I know there are some errors in spacing and paragraphing, but I really don't care. You need to edit this a bit. But oh my, my heart breaks for you.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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I know there are some errors in spacing and paragraphing, but I really don't care. You need to edit this a bit. But oh my, my heart breaks for you.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your understanding and thoughtful comments.
I still seem to attract gremlins in the posting from word to Fanstory with the Advanced editor.
I have checked and corrected.
I am behind in reviews due to phone/internet issues.
I will catch up ASAP
:-) Shirley
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Shirley,
This is such a heart-wrenching story. You have come so far, my friend. To be able to write about it has to be a wonderful way to release pent-up emotion. My heart goes out to you and your siblings.
I'm sure your girls will find this insight into their mother most valuable to them personally.
This is a sixer all the way, but since I had some time to kill this morning, I did an in-depth review and found some SPAG, so this gets a solid *5-plus* for sure! (*>*)
These are all things I've learned from some great people, so I thought I'd pass them on.
Also some spacing/indents that could just be FS software glitches.
** Please, use or lose as you see fit--no disrespect intended.**
[] delete () add
~~ I'm by no means a pro on commas, but I would delete them in these two sentences I randomly chose since it is all one thought--no pause is needed. ~~
-I recall one occasion when one of my older brothers[,] and I[,] screamed until we couldn't speak.
-My eldest sister[,] held me as my eldest brother ran two kilometres to the neighbours to phone for an ambulance
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~~ Spacing issue. ~~
-truck for some time though their returns were minimal.
-baked and we seldom received treats.
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~~ Need to [] delete space at beginning margin. ~~
[] On a crisp spring morning in the post war boom years of the
[] I have a vivid recollection of darkness and claustrophobia.
[] The farm was about six to eight kilometres from town,
[] At just five years of age, the master manipulator
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~~ Where you have single dashes in this sentence, you need to use an em dash. The simple way to make one is two dashes in a row (--) *OR* (word, dash, dash, word, with no spaces) and it will make one long em dash, which can be used in place of a comma.
-No-one really saw me[-](--)It was as though I was invisible. I was powerless to tell anyone. As I reminisce I ask[-](--)"Mum, where were you?"
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~~ No dash needed
- [no-one] (no one)
Like I said, I was just bipping around, so thought I share what I've learned. Hope it is helpful.
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I'm always delighted when I see you pop up. I enjoy your work so much. Keep it coming, my friend! (*:*)
*Happy 2015!*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi, Shirley,
This is such a heart-wrenching story. You have come so far, my friend. To be able to write about it has to be a wonderful way to release pent-up emotion. My heart goes out to you and your siblings.
I'm sure your girls will find this insight into their mother most valuable to them personally.
This is a sixer all the way, but since I had some time to kill this morning, I did an in-depth review and found some SPAG, so this gets a solid *5-plus* for sure! (*>*)
These are all things I've learned from some great people, so I thought I'd pass them on.
Also some spacing/indents that could just be FS software glitches.
** Please, use or lose as you see fit--no disrespect intended.**
[] delete () add
~~ I'm by no means a pro on commas, but I would delete them in these two sentences I randomly chose since it is all one thought--no pause is needed. ~~
-I recall one occasion when one of my older brothers[,] and I[,] screamed until we couldn't speak.
-My eldest sister[,] held me as my eldest brother ran two kilometres to the neighbours to phone for an ambulance
~~~~
~~ Spacing issue. ~~
-truck for some time though their returns were minimal.
-baked and we seldom received treats.
~~~~
~~ Need to [] delete space at beginning margin. ~~
[] On a crisp spring morning in the post war boom years of the
[] I have a vivid recollection of darkness and claustrophobia.
[] The farm was about six to eight kilometres from town,
[] At just five years of age, the master manipulator
~~~~
~~ Where you have single dashes in this sentence, you need to use an em dash. The simple way to make one is two dashes in a row (--) *OR* (word, dash, dash, word, with no spaces) and it will make one long em dash, which can be used in place of a comma.
-No-one really saw me[-](--)It was as though I was invisible. I was powerless to tell anyone. As I reminisce I ask[-](--)"Mum, where were you?"
~~~~
~~ No dash needed
- [no-one] (no one)
Like I said, I was just bipping around, so thought I share what I've learned. Hope it is helpful.
~~~~~
I'm always delighted when I see you pop up. I enjoy your work so much. Keep it coming, my friend! (*:*)
*Happy 2015!*
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 30-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you Jax.
I appreciate your time and detailed review.
This is a reality check for sure. Lol.
I have checked and changed.
I still seem to gather spaces etc in the posting from word to Fanstory using the Advanced editor.
I will try posting as plain text.
I am behind in reviews due to phone/ internet issues.
I will catch up ASAP.
:-) Shirley
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You're not alone in your internet problems. There is a lot of that going around. I hope it isn't contagious!! LOL
Cheers... Jax
Comment from patcelaw
This is another of the stories of abuse that rip at my heart, What a blessing to know you survived to be able to tell you story.. There must be a very harsh judgement coming for abusers of children. Jesus aid, it would be better to have a mill stone tied around you neck, thrown into the ocean, than the judgement that comes for harming a child.
Blessing in the new year, Patricia
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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This is another of the stories of abuse that rip at my heart, What a blessing to know you survived to be able to tell you story.. There must be a very harsh judgement coming for abusers of children. Jesus aid, it would be better to have a mill stone tied around you neck, thrown into the ocean, than the judgement that comes for harming a child.
Blessing in the new year, Patricia
Comment Written 30-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for a thoughtful and caring review.
A very appropriate scripture choice.
Thank you for your blessings and New Year wishes.
I am behind in reviews due to phone/ internet issues.
I will catch up ASAP.
:-) Shirley
Comment from dennis1
What a powerful story. Sometimes we think we have it bad, but your life was pure hell. The writing is compelling. I wonder why your mother blamed your dad when the door to the truck was opened by granddad? So great that you have written down part of your life story for posterity. Wonder writing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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What a powerful story. Sometimes we think we have it bad, but your life was pure hell. The writing is compelling. I wonder why your mother blamed your dad when the door to the truck was opened by granddad? So great that you have written down part of your life story for posterity. Wonder writing.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much Dennis.
What a remarkable review.
Thank you for your comments and exceptional review.
Sorry for the late reply
I am behind in reviews due to phone/ internet issues.
I will catch up ASAP.
:-) Shirley
