To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Too Brilliant To Qualify"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from I am Cat
LOL... oh Mikey Mikey Mikey...
If I thought you were interesting before... oh my my
you mean we can actually post this stuff? hell, i have an entire brain full of this...
*sigh*...
may I just say...? no, I suppose I can't... but I sure want to. ;)
'within massive structure is the conundrum of delicacy
a flower petal is found at the bottom of a pyramid
it is removed and the pyramid still stands
where is the genius in that?
exactly, nature seeks whores in vacuums
yet, it is the vacuum that sucks'
(lol... If I haven't said it yet... yeah I can't say that can I?)
'high buns. a tray to hold my brewskies and Doritos. Sentences short and choppy. Meaning sloppy joes all around. Wrap this up soon. Hold that train of thought. Toot, toot! Charlie says, "Love that Good N Plenty." Charly.... you've got the look I'd like to know better, livin', playin', lovin'... Shoehorns and snapping turtles, Love American Style, Homie.'
(high buns... I think I used to have those. yes, I believe I did. ;)
sloppy joes... I love sloppy joes.. (well, I did, before I became allergic to everything in the fucking world) but that's another story)
oh... and if I haven't said it yet... no, I can't say that)
which is this:
(I have to admit, I actually highlighted this blank space and attempted to copy it here... which is pretty genius on my part and something I think you must have missed, because putting a 'hidden message' in the black space, is just plain smart, and I'm going to do it now because, quite frankly, i thought you were the one smart enough to do it... so I thought of it because i thought you thought of it first. (does that makes sense?)
yeah... and by the way... you can find that hidden message in mine... ;) yeah... it will be for you. lol
but only you will know that... (well, and whoever reads this. LOLOL but hey... who comes to the archives, right? )
;)
this is genius. (yes... that's how I feel too.) now go to sleep, I"m tired. no, really. I am. goodnight Mikey.
purrr
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LOL... oh Mikey Mikey Mikey...
If I thought you were interesting before... oh my my
you mean we can actually post this stuff? hell, i have an entire brain full of this...
*sigh*...
may I just say...? no, I suppose I can't... but I sure want to. ;)
'within massive structure is the conundrum of delicacy
a flower petal is found at the bottom of a pyramid
it is removed and the pyramid still stands
where is the genius in that?
exactly, nature seeks whores in vacuums
yet, it is the vacuum that sucks'
(lol... If I haven't said it yet... yeah I can't say that can I?)
'high buns. a tray to hold my brewskies and Doritos. Sentences short and choppy. Meaning sloppy joes all around. Wrap this up soon. Hold that train of thought. Toot, toot! Charlie says, "Love that Good N Plenty." Charly.... you've got the look I'd like to know better, livin', playin', lovin'... Shoehorns and snapping turtles, Love American Style, Homie.'
(high buns... I think I used to have those. yes, I believe I did. ;)
sloppy joes... I love sloppy joes.. (well, I did, before I became allergic to everything in the fucking world) but that's another story)
oh... and if I haven't said it yet... no, I can't say that)
which is this:
(I have to admit, I actually highlighted this blank space and attempted to copy it here... which is pretty genius on my part and something I think you must have missed, because putting a 'hidden message' in the black space, is just plain smart, and I'm going to do it now because, quite frankly, i thought you were the one smart enough to do it... so I thought of it because i thought you thought of it first. (does that makes sense?)
yeah... and by the way... you can find that hidden message in mine... ;) yeah... it will be for you. lol
but only you will know that... (well, and whoever reads this. LOLOL but hey... who comes to the archives, right? )
;)
this is genius. (yes... that's how I feel too.) now go to sleep, I"m tired. no, really. I am. goodnight Mikey.
purrr
Comment Written 02-Nov-2015
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OK! That would be about right for this contest! LOL, you excelled yourself! I have to admit, I do agree with a lot of what you say! LOL, brilliant xsx sandra
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OK! That would be about right for this contest! LOL, you excelled yourself! I have to admit, I do agree with a lot of what you say! LOL, brilliant xsx sandra
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a fun approach to the prompt. You end with "which is this:" but there is nothing after that - is there supposed to be? Good luck in the contest.
teresa
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This is a fun approach to the prompt. You end with "which is this:" but there is nothing after that - is there supposed to be? Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
I would give you a six but I am in short supply, maybe, a ten but the bottom line is we are sharing thoughts with words. I have learned how to paint, add music and beats and meet friends. Like you, I think outside the box, then have to confind my self into a little box and type letters, one at a time.
you are creative (true)
you like colors and not much blue
you are bold, funny and i'm told..
oh, that's the next story! (next...)
Have a blessed Christmas! Take time for your self. Chat again!
flylikeaneagle
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I would give you a six but I am in short supply, maybe, a ten but the bottom line is we are sharing thoughts with words. I have learned how to paint, add music and beats and meet friends. Like you, I think outside the box, then have to confind my self into a little box and type letters, one at a time.
you are creative (true)
you like colors and not much blue
you are bold, funny and i'm told..
oh, that's the next story! (next...)
Have a blessed Christmas! Take time for your self. Chat again!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha
This is indeed too brilliant to qualify..Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho
I enjoyed it immensely
God bless
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Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha
This is indeed too brilliant to qualify..Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho Ho
I enjoyed it immensely
God bless
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from RYME4U
This one is nonsense in all different styles, Well done.I like the sarcastic tone and the in -your-face presentation
Good Job
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This one is nonsense in all different styles, Well done.I like the sarcastic tone and the in -your-face presentation
Good Job
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from royowen
I know who this is and your a bit of a genius, your absolutely right about some of these poetry forms, and I suppose I'd have to say, you have certainly turn them into nonsense, a clever variable format you've chosen, imaginative, brilliant and clever well done, good luck,blessings, Roy.
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I know who this is and your a bit of a genius, your absolutely right about some of these poetry forms, and I suppose I'd have to say, you have certainly turn them into nonsense, a clever variable format you've chosen, imaginative, brilliant and clever well done, good luck,blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
I enjoyed this funy nonsense poem, I agree that most nonettes do not hold meaning and flow, and the strict rules in syllables at times does not allow meaning to come across.
Well written,
good luck in the contest
Mary
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I enjoyed this funy nonsense poem, I agree that most nonettes do not hold meaning and flow, and the strict rules in syllables at times does not allow meaning to come across.
Well written,
good luck in the contest
Mary
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from Jay Squires
Silliness it is; I'll give you that. But nonsense? Don't sail yourself short e. (See? That's nonsense.
What's not nonsense are lines like:
exactly, nature seeks whores in vacuums
yet, it is the vacuum that sucks.
That's profundity in some quarters of town.
I think there is a charm in your zaniness. I think the contest judges will see that too.
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Silliness it is; I'll give you that. But nonsense? Don't sail yourself short e. (See? That's nonsense.
What's not nonsense are lines like:
exactly, nature seeks whores in vacuums
yet, it is the vacuum that sucks.
That's profundity in some quarters of town.
I think there is a charm in your zaniness. I think the contest judges will see that too.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
