Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 178 "Climb and Scurry"Small and Specialty Poems
9 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
What a phenomenal photograph and pairing with your observation recounted in this poem! Your use of the Diatelle form is the perfect visual vehicle as well since it mimics the up and down activity. I admired your rhyme scheme plus echoing sounds and "gown" and "crown" metaphors. Well done! I can only offer a virtual six, my friend. -Joan
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
What a phenomenal photograph and pairing with your observation recounted in this poem! Your use of the Diatelle form is the perfect visual vehicle as well since it mimics the up and down activity. I admired your rhyme scheme plus echoing sounds and "gown" and "crown" metaphors. Well done! I can only offer a virtual six, my friend. -Joan
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you Jian. Every review from you is a 6 in my book.
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You are very kind. Hugs- Joan
Comment from adewpearl
good consonance in climb scurry
good alliteration in furry friend and rhyme in scurry furry
more good alliteration follows
solid rhymes
delightful descriptive detail and upbeat mood
Brooke :-) and I love your photo
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
good consonance in climb scurry
good alliteration in furry friend and rhyme in scurry furry
more good alliteration follows
solid rhymes
delightful descriptive detail and upbeat mood
Brooke :-) and I love your photo
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Thank you Brooke. One of my favorites
Comment from robina1978
A next nice photo with the squirrel more in close-up. A diatelle is a lovely form to use for this. I enjoyed all of it. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
A next nice photo with the squirrel more in close-up. A diatelle is a lovely form to use for this. I enjoyed all of it. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Thanks again Ine.
Comment from rod007
Another poem that holds the reader to the image of the squirrels struggle to survive during winter. These lines created that atmosphere:
"When Winter spreads its bitter cold white gown
No need to have a frozen frown"
Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
Another poem that holds the reader to the image of the squirrels struggle to survive during winter. These lines created that atmosphere:
"When Winter spreads its bitter cold white gown
No need to have a frozen frown"
Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014
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Thank you rod. Much obliged.
Comment from bob cullen
I like this it is so clever. It requires great discipline to write to a formula as you have done here.
Your poem creates its image superbly. Even without the picture the reader can visualise the story you tell. Great work
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
I like this it is so clever. It requires great discipline to write to a formula as you have done here.
Your poem creates its image superbly. Even without the picture the reader can visualise the story you tell. Great work
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thank you bob. Its nice that you recognize the discipline involved.
Comment from gypsymoth
You deserve this six star rating just for the form alone.
I can't stand doing poems like this, it's like mentally taxing
work. Beware this year, all those fluffy rodents may be telling you it will be a nasty winter.
Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
You deserve this six star rating just for the form alone.
I can't stand doing poems like this, it's like mentally taxing
work. Beware this year, all those fluffy rodents may be telling you it will be a nasty winter.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thank you fir a wonderful review and warning. You may be right.
Comment from Wendyanne
I love watching squirrels and my dog loves chasing them. I really enjoyed reading your diatelle style poem. Beautiful imagery. Superb.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
I love watching squirrels and my dog loves chasing them. I really enjoyed reading your diatelle style poem. Beautiful imagery. Superb.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thank you Wendyanne.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Very much enjoy this format - it lends itself beautifully to your offering. Seems to mirror exactly what squirrels do - up and down and back again. Lovely stepping moments of both animal and poem form. Very nicely done. AT=/
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
Very much enjoy this format - it lends itself beautifully to your offering. Seems to mirror exactly what squirrels do - up and down and back again. Lovely stepping moments of both animal and poem form. Very nicely done. AT=/
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much AT. Glad you could enjoy the verse and format so well.
Comment from Capricorn30
The poetry very well complements the movements of this busy squirrel;
Good visual and audio images, as this busy creature goes about his activities in autumn's radiance;
They are always in a hurry--whatever is of great importance is known only to them, we humans just haven't figured it out yet!
A pleasure to read your dedication to these furry runners. They're always running!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
The poetry very well complements the movements of this busy squirrel;
Good visual and audio images, as this busy creature goes about his activities in autumn's radiance;
They are always in a hurry--whatever is of great importance is known only to them, we humans just haven't figured it out yet!
A pleasure to read your dedication to these furry runners. They're always running!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2014
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Thank you Margaret. Yes, they hop and scurry. I love to watch them.