Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 174 "Take and Feel"Small and Specialty Poems
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Comment from Nosha17
The repetition of the words are very effective. The senses at this time of year are accentuated with the delights of the season. Good use of rhyming and imagery. Enjoyable read Faye
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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The repetition of the words are very effective. The senses at this time of year are accentuated with the delights of the season. Good use of rhyming and imagery. Enjoyable read Faye
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you Fate.
Comment from jim lawler
You've got the rhythm and it flows nicely.It's understandable and creates an emotional response. I didn't spot any typos My personal opinion is that there's a little too much repetition; no offense intended. Good luck with it and all your future writings. Jim
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You've got the rhythm and it flows nicely.It's understandable and creates an emotional response. I didn't spot any typos My personal opinion is that there's a little too much repetition; no offense intended. Good luck with it and all your future writings. Jim
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thanks
Comment from MagKing
A fine thing to write about...And I must say I like it
But I do not agree with you on the category of the poem.
It think it's rather humorous....Maybe I am wrong
MagKing
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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A fine thing to write about...And I must say I like it
But I do not agree with you on the category of the poem.
It think it's rather humorous....Maybe I am wrong
MagKing
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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Thank you MagKing. I coukd have gone either way with it.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the repetition and rhythm that reinforced the scene you captured. It is lovely to be reminded of the autumn colors of my recent trip by both your words and photograph. I admired your title for this Anaphoric, rhymed quatrains. Here's to peace- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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I admired the repetition and rhythm that reinforced the scene you captured. It is lovely to be reminded of the autumn colors of my recent trip by both your words and photograph. I admired your title for this Anaphoric, rhymed quatrains. Here's to peace- Joan
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thanks Joan. Yes, to peace!
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
The poetry style of anaphoric quatrains does intensify the emotion which the words portray.
Attention is highlighted on the word-"feel" and that is exactly what is portrayed-feelings about the sights seen
on a walk in fall.:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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The poetry style of anaphoric quatrains does intensify the emotion which the words portray.
Attention is highlighted on the word-"feel" and that is exactly what is portrayed-feelings about the sights seen
on a walk in fall.:-) Shirley
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thank you Shirley. Yes, good point.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
A delightful verse that flows easily. Good use of descriptive vocabulary
and another of your wonderful and enjoyable pictures.
Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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A delightful verse that flows easily. Good use of descriptive vocabulary
and another of your wonderful and enjoyable pictures.
Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thank you Robin. God to hear from you.
Comment from rod007
Yet another great poem about family walk and autumn. The simplicity of the words and stanza creates a great impact. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Yet another great poem about family walk and autumn. The simplicity of the words and stanza creates a great impact. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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Thank you rod.
Comment from risktaker
I like the imagery. I can feel the fresh air across my face. I can see the colors and beauty of the scene. I feel the appreciation of the gift of seasons from God who made them. The photo is appealing and significant to the message. thanks
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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I like the imagery. I can feel the fresh air across my face. I can see the colors and beauty of the scene. I feel the appreciation of the gift of seasons from God who made them. The photo is appealing and significant to the message. thanks
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you risktaker.
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Comment from Ookami Taki
I found this poem very refreshing - like a cool autumn breeze. The meter and rhyme are spot-on, and the facets of each stanza shine in their own ways yet present a complete picture. Very well composed. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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I found this poem very refreshing - like a cool autumn breeze. The meter and rhyme are spot-on, and the facets of each stanza shine in their own ways yet present a complete picture. Very well composed. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you Ookami. That is very nice to hear.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You are right about the repeated phrases. I like them. They served this poem well. I like the alternating take/feel/take feel. I like the rhyme scheme. It is super that you are able to include your own picture with your work. I see nothing to change. I like "take a son or daughter" and "feel the peace you're under." Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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You are right about the repeated phrases. I like them. They served this poem well. I like the alternating take/feel/take feel. I like the rhyme scheme. It is super that you are able to include your own picture with your work. I see nothing to change. I like "take a son or daughter" and "feel the peace you're under." Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you jannypan for a wonderful review.
