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5 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Been trying to figure this one out....Red-winged black birds (fleet) how about 'flit?' instead of fleet. I love the story. a real pleasure to read. Well done and I love the photo with it as well. Reminded me of a holiday we went up the North Coast of our state. It was the Easter Weekend. So getting cooler in Australia. You mentioned the cool sand...well I remember at Scots Head my brother and I got up early that day, and even though the sand was cool, the surf was warmer! Thanks.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Been trying to figure this one out....Red-winged black birds (fleet) how about 'flit?' instead of fleet. I love the story. a real pleasure to read. Well done and I love the photo with it as well. Reminded me of a holiday we went up the North Coast of our state. It was the Easter Weekend. So getting cooler in Australia. You mentioned the cool sand...well I remember at Scots Head my brother and I got up early that day, and even though the sand was cool, the surf was warmer! Thanks.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Hi Sankey, I did look that word up and it seems it could be either way...but thank you for your feedback, always a pleasure!! Thank you for the wonderful review and glad to bring back wonderful memories, have a great weekend!! :)
Comment from TiaraEli
The story was great! It reminded me of the trip to Florida took this passed summer. Great usage of imagery, absolutely beautiful!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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The story was great! It reminded me of the trip to Florida took this passed summer. Great usage of imagery, absolutely beautiful!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and I'm glad it brings good memories...have a good evening..
Comment from Jay Squires
This looks and reads more like prose than poetry. It's structured in full paragraphs, except for the last line of each stanza, which was centered.
It read like a nature piece, with description and imagery, but no real conflict. I couldn't quite get into it,
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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This looks and reads more like prose than poetry. It's structured in full paragraphs, except for the last line of each stanza, which was centered.
It read like a nature piece, with description and imagery, but no real conflict. I couldn't quite get into it,
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you Jay, I understand people don't always get what I write, but I love the feedback.
Comment from kiwisteveh
yes, this is a very pretty prose-poem describing a moment of true beauty - the beach at early evening.
You do a good job of linking the various aspects observed with your own feelings of peace, happiness and belonging.
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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yes, this is a very pretty prose-poem describing a moment of true beauty - the beach at early evening.
You do a good job of linking the various aspects observed with your own feelings of peace, happiness and belonging.
Steve
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you Steve! I appreciate you're time and generous rating.
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a nice piece of prose poetry although I think for me it would read better in a more poetic form. Still it has great imagery.
teresa
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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This is a nice piece of prose poetry although I think for me it would read better in a more poetic form. Still it has great imagery.
teresa
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you Teresa, I was actually writing this as I was walking on the beach trying to clear my mind at the same time. Thank you for reading and for the wonderful review.