Widow Prigstone's Orphanage
Supernatural Flash Fiction18 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
Wow, very creepy, is that the new thing now? putting photos into the story, kind of like a childrens book lol, congrats on the win.xo
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Wow, very creepy, is that the new thing now? putting photos into the story, kind of like a childrens book lol, congrats on the win.xo
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Dang, I missed the voting for this contest, Mikey. Congratulations on your win. I would've added another vote in your column. I knew there was something about kids you couldn't trust. Well done, imaginative, loved the interspersed photos.
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Dang, I missed the voting for this contest, Mikey. Congratulations on your win. I would've added another vote in your column. I knew there was something about kids you couldn't trust. Well done, imaginative, loved the interspersed photos.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from victor 66
Congratulations, Michael. All of your hard work and creativity hasnwon out again, as it should be. So from one who is aspiring to one who is accomplished, I wish you well.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Congratulations, Michael. All of your hard work and creativity hasnwon out again, as it should be. So from one who is aspiring to one who is accomplished, I wish you well.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Hi. Thank you. You're too kind. I loved your graveyard story. We had an old graveyard like that by one of the missions in California nearby that we'd go to as teenagers. It is just like you described! I think maybe the pictures added to mine. I just figured out how to do that, so I'm going overboard with it! I would've voted for yours if I wasn't in it. I thought the voices one wasn't even supernatural really, more about a mental ailment. Oh well, do like I do, enter everything and sometimes you win!! mikey
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Hey, Mikey... Thanks for the nice reply. I admire your work. My goal is to one day "tie" you in a contest. Wish me luck.
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Good luck! That is way better than thrashing me within an inch of my life! Hahaha.
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Mikey, from what I hear from your fans, you are the last person anyone would threaten. I just worry about hurting someone's feelings. Besides, you're one of good guys.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Bad mistake, digging them zombies out of that grave. One that was bite is dead meat! A couple gruesome images. it's dawn of the dead relived. Entertaining to the dead end -- get it. it's supernatural and flash fiction. Liked it, count your doubloon. do loco
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Bad mistake, digging them zombies out of that grave. One that was bite is dead meat! A couple gruesome images. it's dawn of the dead relived. Entertaining to the dead end -- get it. it's supernatural and flash fiction. Liked it, count your doubloon. do loco
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
Not a genre I generally read or enjoy, but you did a magnificent job with the writing. Your dialog was exceptional and quite believable. Good job. Luck in the contest.
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Not a genre I generally read or enjoy, but you did a magnificent job with the writing. Your dialog was exceptional and quite believable. Good job. Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
Comment from Drew Delaney
Why am I reading these supernatural stories? They are so freaky. I have no idea who to for for. I might get bit. Egads. Best wishes in the contest. These are all scary as can be.
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Why am I reading these supernatural stories? They are so freaky. I have no idea who to for for. I might get bit. Egads. Best wishes in the contest. These are all scary as can be.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
Comment from Judy Couch
This is really good. You have a great build-up. I thought the guy had murdered all of them. Then the ending was terrific with them biting their rescuers.
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This is really good. You have a great build-up. I thought the guy had murdered all of them. Then the ending was terrific with them biting their rescuers.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
Comment from adewpearl
extremely gruesome detail of setting in your opening lines
Shut up, freak - add comma for direct address
good dialogue
you build suspense and a sense of impending danger well as the men who discover this scene start uncovering the child as we realize the guy they suspect is telling the truth and it really is NOT a good idea to set those kids loose from their grave
I love that last line with the bite :-) Brooke
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extremely gruesome detail of setting in your opening lines
Shut up, freak - add comma for direct address
good dialogue
you build suspense and a sense of impending danger well as the men who discover this scene start uncovering the child as we realize the guy they suspect is telling the truth and it really is NOT a good idea to set those kids loose from their grave
I love that last line with the bite :-) Brooke
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
Comment from rrabinow
I enjoyed reading your story. Great job with this prompt. I like how it flows to gain suspense as it goes. Great use of description. I like how you formatted your story as well. Best of luck.
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I enjoyed reading your story. Great job with this prompt. I like how it flows to gain suspense as it goes. Great use of description. I like how you formatted your story as well. Best of luck.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2014
Comment from stanishmichelle
Creepy is what this short thriller is, and I enjoyed reading it. The images complemented the post, and the dialogue flowed well. You captured the reactions of the characters quite nicely and the closure was a good finale. All the best in the contest.
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Creepy is what this short thriller is, and I enjoyed reading it. The images complemented the post, and the dialogue flowed well. You captured the reactions of the characters quite nicely and the closure was a good finale. All the best in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2014
