Little Poems
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Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent syllable count for the rictameter
and you return to the original two syllable line well
thunder and lightning threatens - threaten
good assonance in made in vain
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal and a foreboding mood
Brooke
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Your poem is in excellent syllable count for the rictameter
and you return to the original two syllable line well
thunder and lightning threatens - threaten
good assonance in made in vain
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal and a foreboding mood
Brooke
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you Brooke
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Very interesting verse and so true. I truly enjoyed the message and the flow. Your art work is superb which makes for an excellent read. Hope you are well.
Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Very interesting verse and so true. I truly enjoyed the message and the flow. Your art work is superb which makes for an excellent read. Hope you are well.
Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2014
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Thank you Robin. Everything is well. I appreciate your nice review.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Dark clouds indeed! I'm sure much like Minnesota, Michigan's weather can abruptly change. I like this style of poetry. Visually appealing. Well written, Tom.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Dark clouds indeed! I'm sure much like Minnesota, Michigan's weather can abruptly change. I like this style of poetry. Visually appealing. Well written, Tom.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Thanks Marietta
Comment from rod007
We are at the mercy of the weather and we all know the weathermen don't always get it right. My motto is always be prepared. That's why I keep a raincoat, towels, blankets and a first aid kit at the back of my jeep just in case!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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We are at the mercy of the weather and we all know the weathermen don't always get it right. My motto is always be prepared. That's why I keep a raincoat, towels, blankets and a first aid kit at the back of my jeep just in case!
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Thanks rod. Very good idea.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
When we were moving back to the UK, we thought we were saying good bye to the sun and hello rain. It didn't work like that, at least not in our part of southern England. Where places were flooded in the winter, we remained dry. The sun came in the spring, and stayed with us gettin warmer and warmer. Now we look at the dark clouds, like yours in your photo, all excited and waited...and waited. The clouds turned blue again but we could hear the thunder miles away and our garden envied them the water we are still waiting for. Your poem was exactly how we were feeling but ours didn't deliver. Did yours? Lovely poem, Tom. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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When we were moving back to the UK, we thought we were saying good bye to the sun and hello rain. It didn't work like that, at least not in our part of southern England. Where places were flooded in the winter, we remained dry. The sun came in the spring, and stayed with us gettin warmer and warmer. Now we look at the dark clouds, like yours in your photo, all excited and waited...and waited. The clouds turned blue again but we could hear the thunder miles away and our garden envied them the water we are still waiting for. Your poem was exactly how we were feeling but ours didn't deliver. Did yours? Lovely poem, Tom. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you Sandra. Yes, it poured for 10 minutes and then cleared.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Yes being a weather man is the only job in the world where you can get paid for being wrong. And yet somewhere in the world the weatherman is right. Great is a write. And the sky picture I've seen many like it.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Yes being a weather man is the only job in the world where you can get paid for being wrong. And yet somewhere in the world the weatherman is right. Great is a write. And the sky picture I've seen many like it.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thanks again Angel
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A very thoughtful RIctameter poem.
Over here in OZ we're rather envious of rain clouds elsewhere.
It has been so dry for so long that drought, howling winds and heavy frosts are severely affecting pastures.
Although your poem visits the disruptive and nuisance side of rain so well
we afd longing for the positives.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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A very thoughtful RIctameter poem.
Over here in OZ we're rather envious of rain clouds elsewhere.
It has been so dry for so long that drought, howling winds and heavy frosts are severely affecting pastures.
Although your poem visits the disruptive and nuisance side of rain so well
we afd longing for the positives.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you Shirley. I hope you get some soon.
Comment from innerworlds
The first three lines of this poem sounded fairly serious. So just when I was expecting to learn about a flood or other weather disaster, the fourth line appears with a wink and a nudge. Everything will be fine...until we discover that Mother Nature has fooled the poor folks who'd made outdoor plans and now everything is ruined. Quite a range of emotions tucked into 9 cleverly written lines.
You have a talent for making a complicated rhyming structure sound like natural speech.. with ideas clearly expressed. And we can certainly all relate to the disappointment at the end of the poem... especially since global warming started stirring things up. Umbrellas, anyone? Nice work!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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The first three lines of this poem sounded fairly serious. So just when I was expecting to learn about a flood or other weather disaster, the fourth line appears with a wink and a nudge. Everything will be fine...until we discover that Mother Nature has fooled the poor folks who'd made outdoor plans and now everything is ruined. Quite a range of emotions tucked into 9 cleverly written lines.
You have a talent for making a complicated rhyming structure sound like natural speech.. with ideas clearly expressed. And we can certainly all relate to the disappointment at the end of the poem... especially since global warming started stirring things up. Umbrellas, anyone? Nice work!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank Randi. I'm pleased you didn't think my poem was "All wet".
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Your writing is definitely NOT all wet, but the folks without an umbrella definitely were!
I always enjoy your poetic thoughts! Thanks for sharing!
Comment from Capricorn30
Dark skies are always omens of unpleasant events to come;
Storms have an inconvenient way of altering our plans--good visual imagery to complement skies of inclement weather.
The rictameter looks much better centered--the next one I pen I'll have to create this ornamental shape--it's rather attractive.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Dark skies are always omens of unpleasant events to come;
Storms have an inconvenient way of altering our plans--good visual imagery to complement skies of inclement weather.
The rictameter looks much better centered--the next one I pen I'll have to create this ornamental shape--it's rather attractive.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank yuo Margaret. Yes, I think it gives it class.
Comment from Joan E.
We are in the middle of a severe drought in California and unfortunately the weather predictions continue to be realized. I am glad you added rhyme to your Rictameter--they intensify the message. Thanks for accompanying the distinct shape with a parallel photograph. More cheers and try to stay dry- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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We are in the middle of a severe drought in California and unfortunately the weather predictions continue to be realized. I am glad you added rhyme to your Rictameter--they intensify the message. Thanks for accompanying the distinct shape with a parallel photograph. More cheers and try to stay dry- Joan
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you Joan. High and dry so far.
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Continue to stay safe and be well- Joan
