Comment from Green Lake Girl

Excellent

Tom, you always do such a marvelous job with your nature poems. You've captured this little guy in both picture and poem. I love those special nature moments, like when a bird doesn't fly away to allow a human to have a good look. Super job.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

Thank you Marietta. You encouragement lifts me up.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

You're quite observant. Such a cute little bird too. Good flow of rhythm and rhymes. Good visual imagery. Creative. Nicely done. Great.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014

Thanks Alicia.

Comment from Angel Debbie

Excellent

This is a very sweet write about this little bird.Who Seems to like sitting on the rail and isn't bothered by passer by's.
Thank You for sharing once more this wonderful write and picture to enhance it!

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you Angel Debbie.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Nice of him to pose for you! I enjoyed the cascading effect of the repeat along with your pure rhymes and rhythms. Good luck to you both for a pleasant, holiday weekend- Joan

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank Joan

Comment from Robin Gilmor

Excellent

I loved this one and of course I am a bird lover of old.
Hope you and family are well and taking many pictures to go with
you library of verse. Smiles to you. Robin :)

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Hi Robin. Thank you!

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
"Tree Swallow On A Rail" is an excellent quatern poem with the repeating line in each stanza. It has good meter and rhyme and figurative language and imagery (translucent blue in bright detail)
Preston

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2014

Thank you Preston

Comment from rod007

Excellent

I can see there is an overpowering theme to your poetry this morning. The combination of birds with rails and light poles. It works well as the hero of your piece idly sings to the hikers that pass the trail. Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you rod. Yes, a theme for sure.

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

I think this is built correct. Perfect subject and rewarding to the reader. I find no fault. The photo really enhances the thought.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you Ben

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Technically perfect quatern capturing the beauty of the bird against the contrasting backdrop of the city. I wonder what makes the little fellow so secure? A good vantage point, I suppose, and confidence in the speed of flight. The repeating line slides seamlessly through your poem and emphasises the static nature of the bird amid surrounding movement.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2014

Thank you so much tfawcus for a very astute review.