The Devil Went Back to Georgia
The saga of Johnny continues...78 total reviews
Comment from faragon
Great Poem! I too have enjoyed the song and wondered if Johnny went on to fame and fortune or stayed a simple country boy. You provided an unique answer.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Great Poem! I too have enjoyed the song and wondered if Johnny went on to fame and fortune or stayed a simple country boy. You provided an unique answer.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks.
Comment from RGstar
Another good piece of story telling, Dean. Read through this one with a good rolling rhythm, rather like a song; typical Charlie Daniels one could say.
A couple of things.
You need to put a couple of quotation marks in your author's note to show it is a quote; info coming from a source.
Also;
Be a little careful with your commas; there are a few not in the right places. I haven't highlighted all but here is a good tip.;
You must be able to take out the words between two commas and the remainder must be able to make a cohesive sentence. That is when you know if you have used them correctly when using two commas in the same sentence. Hope that will help you in the long run.
I thought it imperative for you as you write story-like texts which are long and need punctuation.
here is one below to look at;
''He'd practice nights, talented delights, soon spread around the block,''
Suggestion
He'd practice nights; talented delights soon spread around the block,
Try to use colons or semi colons a little more, they work wonders for a rolling text.
Another
''many came, so thus, the name, Fiddle playin' preacher who could rock!''
Suggestion;
''many came, so thus the name; Fiddle playin' preacher who could rock!''
This is a good write and quite a long text. Much to look at. I hope this will help.
Best wishes,
RGstar
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Another good piece of story telling, Dean. Read through this one with a good rolling rhythm, rather like a song; typical Charlie Daniels one could say.
A couple of things.
You need to put a couple of quotation marks in your author's note to show it is a quote; info coming from a source.
Also;
Be a little careful with your commas; there are a few not in the right places. I haven't highlighted all but here is a good tip.;
You must be able to take out the words between two commas and the remainder must be able to make a cohesive sentence. That is when you know if you have used them correctly when using two commas in the same sentence. Hope that will help you in the long run.
I thought it imperative for you as you write story-like texts which are long and need punctuation.
here is one below to look at;
''He'd practice nights, talented delights, soon spread around the block,''
Suggestion
He'd practice nights; talented delights soon spread around the block,
Try to use colons or semi colons a little more, they work wonders for a rolling text.
Another
''many came, so thus, the name, Fiddle playin' preacher who could rock!''
Suggestion;
''many came, so thus the name; Fiddle playin' preacher who could rock!''
This is a good write and quite a long text. Much to look at. I hope this will help.
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thanks, RGStar, I appreciate that. I agree, my commas can get the best of me sometimes. I'll try to implement some of your suggestions.
As for quotation marks in poetry, tho me they distract from the poem, especially this one.
Take your average song lyrics, for example, very rarely are quotation marks used. I wanted this to read like a song, hence the italicized wording rather than quotations marks were used.
Thanks for the in-depth,thoughtful review and suggestions. All are greatly appreciated, my friend!
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I understand. Best wishes, Dean
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Same to you, RG!
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I did make a few of the other changes you'd mentioned. I hope it reads better now, and thanks again.
Comment from A Matter Of Words
This is a ten star work, Dean. I could hear Charlie Daniels voice and the fiddles waging war as I read it. I thoroughly enjoyed the concept of The Devil, revisiting his defeat and throwing down the gauntlet and placing temptation at Johnny's feet, once again. Spectacular backdrop. You are a master...Stephanie
tune[']s resonance?
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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This is a ten star work, Dean. I could hear Charlie Daniels voice and the fiddles waging war as I read it. I thoroughly enjoyed the concept of The Devil, revisiting his defeat and throwing down the gauntlet and placing temptation at Johnny's feet, once again. Spectacular backdrop. You are a master...Stephanie
tune[']s resonance?
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Steph...
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The pleasure was all mine.
Comment from DSchlosser
The devil is a being that people have struggled over for so many generations with different names stories of humans winning or losing in a type of battle. I think the musical battles between Satan and man are probably the best written because the devil doesn't quite have that love for music or the soul to play as well.
I like the continuation of the story especially with Heaven's chorus joining in on the fight. And with Johnny acknowledging God as the being who will give him the strength to beat the devil. Great poem!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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The devil is a being that people have struggled over for so many generations with different names stories of humans winning or losing in a type of battle. I think the musical battles between Satan and man are probably the best written because the devil doesn't quite have that love for music or the soul to play as well.
I like the continuation of the story especially with Heaven's chorus joining in on the fight. And with Johnny acknowledging God as the being who will give him the strength to beat the devil. Great poem!
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thank you, 'D'...
Comment from Writingfundimension
I love the way you brought in the heavenly chorus to allow Johnny to continue his winning streak for the Lord! This is a great, imaginative follow-up to that song Charlie made famous. I can't imagine he'd be anything but honored. Great job, Dean. :) Bev
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I love the way you brought in the heavenly chorus to allow Johnny to continue his winning streak for the Lord! This is a great, imaginative follow-up to that song Charlie made famous. I can't imagine he'd be anything but honored. Great job, Dean. :) Bev
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks.
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You're very welcome. :)
Comment from elchupakabra
I loved this song growing up and still have a soft spot for it. With that said, I thought your take on a sequel here was excellent. You did a really great job constructing this piece, I had the actual tune playing in my head in the background. Excellent job, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I loved this song growing up and still have a soft spot for it. With that said, I thought your take on a sequel here was excellent. You did a really great job constructing this piece, I had the actual tune playing in my head in the background. Excellent job, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, 'Chup.
Comment from DALLAS01
If I had a six this would be yours. A great take off on the Devil Went Down to Georgia. Hope you get a response from his manger. This was like sitting in the orchestra pit of a theater in the round. A dimension all of its own.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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If I had a six this would be yours. A great take off on the Devil Went Down to Georgia. Hope you get a response from his manger. This was like sitting in the orchestra pit of a theater in the round. A dimension all of its own.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks, DALLAS.
Comment from Charlene0513
To Dean Kush,
A awesome exposition of the story(song) of "The Devil Who went to Georgia."
Great images presented and continuous enjambments and proximate rhyming and rhyming.
Charlene
*I'm still working on that on-line picture business. LOL
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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To Dean Kush,
A awesome exposition of the story(song) of "The Devil Who went to Georgia."
Great images presented and continuous enjambments and proximate rhyming and rhyming.
Charlene
*I'm still working on that on-line picture business. LOL
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Hah, thanks for the positive feedback, b1merm96. Much obliged!
Comment from Donya Quijote
I absolutely love that song. Always gets me to sing along. Your poem was a fun read. It actually felt like story rather than a poem but it all worked out well. I wonder what the manager thought about your take. I found it a fun ride and a respectful tribute. Thanks for sharing....
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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I absolutely love that song. Always gets me to sing along. Your poem was a fun read. It actually felt like story rather than a poem but it all worked out well. I wonder what the manager thought about your take. I found it a fun ride and a respectful tribute. Thanks for sharing....
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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I don't know yet, Donya, I just sent it off. Hopefully he felt it worth of Charlie's excellent tune.
Thanks for the positive review. I appreciate that!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Johnny spends his days sittin' on Peach street
playing for nickels and dimes
just enjoying the sunshine
as people keeping passing by
his songs are his way of witnessing
to those worried about their souls
praying all who listen will accept
the free gift of the Lord's salvation
I never wrote a poem in my life, and don't really consider this much more than a few words as I too am wondering where Johnny might be now. Thanks for another enjoyable poem. :-)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Johnny spends his days sittin' on Peach street
playing for nickels and dimes
just enjoying the sunshine
as people keeping passing by
his songs are his way of witnessing
to those worried about their souls
praying all who listen will accept
the free gift of the Lord's salvation
I never wrote a poem in my life, and don't really consider this much more than a few words as I too am wondering where Johnny might be now. Thanks for another enjoyable poem. :-)
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thanks, Ric. Always a pleasure to hear your point of veiw, my friend.
