Walk With Me.
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Never trust a liar."From victim to survivor of abuse.
16 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
Hi Shirley, if the parents had less of a punishment the other one would not have been able to make the problem a big one...but siblings do betray one another at some time in their lives...very well written ...a great write...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Hi Shirley, if the parents had less of a punishment the other one would not have been able to make the problem a big one...but siblings do betray one another at some time in their lives...very well written ...a great write...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thank you Linda.
Your thoughtful and benerous review is appreciated
:-) Shirley
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you are so welcome...xxoo
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a terrible look into sibling rivalry that the author has created with this piece of writing. There have been several instances of this sibling rivalry breaking out into open war and thus is a sad thing indeed.
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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This is a terrible look into sibling rivalry that the author has created with this piece of writing. There have been several instances of this sibling rivalry breaking out into open war and thus is a sad thing indeed.
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 26-May-2014
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Thank you Tomes.
Not all families are loving, protective units and not all family members
Forgive and forget.
In this case it was short-lived for they all only had each other.
:-) Shirley
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That is very true
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
what a tragic story - how terrible that far too many children are beaten by parents instead of nurtured by them, and how terrible the effect this has on the children
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets
what a tragic story - how terrible that far too many children are beaten by parents instead of nurtured by them, and how terrible the effect this has on the children
Brooke
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thank you Brooke.
I appreciate your thoughtful and caring review.
Comment from krys123
Shirley, I can't say enough about how beautifully this poem is really written. You've captured the essence and the tremendous degree of content and context two were your lines and words is so self-contained and self-explanatory. Your imagery displayed and conveyed even the aspects of the child spaces after being reprimanded for what they have committed. Your rhyming and rhythm was done excellently and neither of your rhymes forced, labored or strained why you rhythm float so smoothly throughout your poem which made it easy for me to read your poem so clearly. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for others and may you have the happiest of a Memorial Day.
Alex
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Shirley, I can't say enough about how beautifully this poem is really written. You've captured the essence and the tremendous degree of content and context two were your lines and words is so self-contained and self-explanatory. Your imagery displayed and conveyed even the aspects of the child spaces after being reprimanded for what they have committed. Your rhyming and rhythm was done excellently and neither of your rhymes forced, labored or strained why you rhythm float so smoothly throughout your poem which made it easy for me to read your poem so clearly. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this for others and may you have the happiest of a Memorial Day.
Alex
Comment Written 25-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thank you Alex.
Your continued support and generous review is much appreciated.
:-) Shirley
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You are so sincerely welcome
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a sad little tale, but I have to wonder just how often it is replayed. So true that trust is something that is quickly lost and takes forever to rebuild.
Excellent rhyming couplets in your quatrains.
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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This is a sad little tale, but I have to wonder just how often it is replayed. So true that trust is something that is quickly lost and takes forever to rebuild.
Excellent rhyming couplets in your quatrains.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 25-May-2014
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Thank you so much for a thoughtful and generous review.
I appreciate it.
Comment from Sankey
I know this for a fact not actually done to me as I was the 'baby ' of the family. But my sister has doe it to our Mother who praise God is now gone to glory.
ONe spag in your author notes hehe. trouble for their siblingsand to save their own skin.
Image courtesy of google images
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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I know this for a fact not actually done to me as I was the 'baby ' of the family. But my sister has doe it to our Mother who praise God is now gone to glory.
ONe spag in your author notes hehe. trouble for their siblingsand to save their own skin.
Image courtesy of google images
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thanks for a generoujs review.
I appreciate your time and comments and thanks for the spag alert.
Comment from Nosha17
This was a nice poem, with good rhyming and choice of words. I liked the message because too often nowadays, people deceive each other, like you said, even within families and then it is hard to fix that rift. Smooth and enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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This was a nice poem, with good rhyming and choice of words. I liked the message because too often nowadays, people deceive each other, like you said, even within families and then it is hard to fix that rift. Smooth and enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you so much for reviewing with the understanding that not all families overflow with love. In the ones that don't it becomes self preservation at all costs.
Small hurts can simmer to grow into permanent family rifts.
I do appreciate your time and review.
Comment from maggieadams
This is way more than sibling lying...this is abuse by the mom in the highest degree. This is well rhymed and stirred my blood...I hope this did not happen, and that it is fictional.
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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This is way more than sibling lying...this is abuse by the mom in the highest degree. This is well rhymed and stirred my blood...I hope this did not happen, and that it is fictional.
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you for a generous review.
Comment from Pullmanspb
One thing I liked about this poem was it didn't move in the direction I anticipated: I thought the reader was going to learn that 2 of the children had eaten something like ant or rat poison.
If I had a (small) reservation it would be the sense of permanency of the broken trust. That, if true, would feel too extreme; i.e. trust can be temporarily damaged.
Otherwise, nice poem and somewhat different subject matter.
Steven
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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One thing I liked about this poem was it didn't move in the direction I anticipated: I thought the reader was going to learn that 2 of the children had eaten something like ant or rat poison.
If I had a (small) reservation it would be the sense of permanency of the broken trust. That, if true, would feel too extreme; i.e. trust can be temporarily damaged.
Otherwise, nice poem and somewhat different subject matter.
Steven
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you for a thoughtful and generous review.
Comment from donette1914
this is so sad and they learn from their parents first and how cruel for the one that got beaten and the other ones didn't so wrong how you look at it. outstanding
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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this is so sad and they learn from their parents first and how cruel for the one that got beaten and the other ones didn't so wrong how you look at it. outstanding
Comment Written 24-May-2014
reply by the author on 24-May-2014
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Thank you so much foe an exceptional review.
Your time and understanding is appreciated.
