Little Poems
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, treischel, an excellent poem about the aggravation brought on by the clock's ticking and tocking. the directions for a gertrue poem makes my head turn to much so my brain is oozing out of my ears right now, lol. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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this is an excellent write, treischel, an excellent poem about the aggravation brought on by the clock's ticking and tocking. the directions for a gertrue poem makes my head turn to much so my brain is oozing out of my ears right now, lol. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you sweetwoodjax . Better put some ear plugs in, fast.
Comment from Kingsland
I will throw a ticking clock outside when I'm attempting to get some sleep. They drive me up a wall. So I can relate to this piece of poetic art. It was well written with a good thought process in it... John
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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I will throw a ticking clock outside when I'm attempting to get some sleep. They drive me up a wall. So I can relate to this piece of poetic art. It was well written with a good thought process in it... John
Comment Written 18-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014
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Thank you John. I agree with you.
Comment from risktaker
I like the photo and the message. the imagery is clear and I can relate to the noise of a clock annoying one to destroy it in a fit of aggravation. I relate to noise preventing one from getting a restful night of sleep. I like the humor and the reality of the situation.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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I like the photo and the message. the imagery is clear and I can relate to the noise of a clock annoying one to destroy it in a fit of aggravation. I relate to noise preventing one from getting a restful night of sleep. I like the humor and the reality of the situation.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you risktaker. You grasp the situation well.
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Totally one of life's most irritating experiences to lie there wanting to sleep and watching the night tick by. I had not heard of this style, but I am not a rule follower so I do not bother learning them either LOL. I thoroughly enjoyed this and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Totally one of life's most irritating experiences to lie there wanting to sleep and watching the night tick by. I had not heard of this style, but I am not a rule follower so I do not bother learning them either LOL. I thoroughly enjoyed this and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2014
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Thank you Mystic Angel.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Trieschel,
"Annoying Clock" is an excellent poem with good rhyme, good rhyme scheme consistently followed. It has good figurative language and imagery. I cannot rate it exceptional because you did no tell me why a ticking clock sounded "eerie'; the same for a face "through" the pillow. Unless you were taking a sleeping or strong narcotic I cannot see why you would think it would stop a clock. If it did then your problem would be solved without the last verse
being needed.
Preston
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Hi, Trieschel,
"Annoying Clock" is an excellent poem with good rhyme, good rhyme scheme consistently followed. It has good figurative language and imagery. I cannot rate it exceptional because you did no tell me why a ticking clock sounded "eerie'; the same for a face "through" the pillow. Unless you were taking a sleeping or strong narcotic I cannot see why you would think it would stop a clock. If it did then your problem would be solved without the last verse
being needed.
Preston
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thanks Preston. I was metaphorically suggesting a poetic portrait of burying a head under thepillow.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Loud clocks can be annoying akin to Chinese water torture. As to the mechanics of a Gertrude, I'm sure the poet has excelled although the disjointed lines are somewhat unsettling to a tradionalist like myself. Loved the pic. Well done.
Regards:
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Loud clocks can be annoying akin to Chinese water torture. As to the mechanics of a Gertrude, I'm sure the poet has excelled although the disjointed lines are somewhat unsettling to a tradionalist like myself. Loved the pic. Well done.
Regards:
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you Stephen. I normally like lines that truncate like that, but in this form, I found it intriguing.
Comment from tfawcus
A fascinating form! Why a Gertrude? Anything to do with Gertrude Stein? The tempo is compelling and the double rhyme at the end gives something of a staccato effect. Your subject fits the form perfectly.
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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A fascinating form! Why a Gertrude? Anything to do with Gertrude Stein? The tempo is compelling and the double rhyme at the end gives something of a staccato effect. Your subject fits the form perfectly.
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 21-May-2014
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Thank you tfawcus. I have no idea why except that somebody named Gertrude must have created the form. I enjoyed that aspect too.
Comment from Joan E.
You're on a roll with this form, and you selected an illustration that reinforces the theme well. I enjoyed your internal and end rhymes. Yes, I sometimes feel the clock has the arms of an executioner whom I want to assassinate! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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You're on a roll with this form, and you selected an illustration that reinforces the theme well. I enjoyed your internal and end rhymes. Yes, I sometimes feel the clock has the arms of an executioner whom I want to assassinate! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Thanks Joan. Well said.
Comment from 9999pool
Time was an invention of man. With it comes a long list of schedules and work list to be completed on time.
It monitors our effort and everything we do now.
Over time, we became enslaved by time and could never get out or get enough.
As we keep chasing time, smashing one clock will not do. We need to destroy all time keeping devices, lol.
Great Gertrude.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
P.S. Didn't quite get the meaning of this line: "Went to bathroom, took such powder".
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Time was an invention of man. With it comes a long list of schedules and work list to be completed on time.
It monitors our effort and everything we do now.
Over time, we became enslaved by time and could never get out or get enough.
As we keep chasing time, smashing one clock will not do. We need to destroy all time keeping devices, lol.
Great Gertrude.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
P.S. Didn't quite get the meaning of this line: "Went to bathroom, took such powder".
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 20-May-2014
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Thanks Ritchie. That line is slang for taking a sleeping pill or pain reliever like aspirins.
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I am still learning the American lingo and thanks for the tip. It had been quite some time since I learnt what a hoot means, lol.
Cheerio, Ritchie. :))
Comment from ElegantButler
Nice way to kill time. Now if only we could get the birds to start chirping at a reasonable hour. Why must the night time be so noisy? They're nice and attractive noises, but that's the problem. The ear strains to hear them and that keeps us up.
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Nice way to kill time. Now if only we could get the birds to start chirping at a reasonable hour. Why must the night time be so noisy? They're nice and attractive noises, but that's the problem. The ear strains to hear them and that keeps us up.
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Thank you Ekegant. Point well taken.
