Little Poems
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Comment from Joan E.
I am glad you are still enjoying the childlike pleasures and sharing your photos of these simple joys. I enjoyed your rhymes and the exhilaration of going higher! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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I am glad you are still enjoying the childlike pleasures and sharing your photos of these simple joys. I enjoyed your rhymes and the exhilaration of going higher! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thank you Joan. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I quite enjoy the Rondel poetry style and you have shown its versatility to perfection.
How often do we marvel at just such a sight but never truly commit the joy
And fun to be had in a park play area to our memory.
You have awakened memories of my children, and now my grandchildren,
Squealing with glee.
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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I quite enjoy the Rondel poetry style and you have shown its versatility to perfection.
How often do we marvel at just such a sight but never truly commit the joy
And fun to be had in a park play area to our memory.
You have awakened memories of my children, and now my grandchildren,
Squealing with glee.
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thank you Shirley. Those are great memories to have.
Comment from joneau2
A delightful poem about children at play dome technically proficiently, but with meaning. By the way, how did you fare with your entry in the contest?
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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A delightful poem about children at play dome technically proficiently, but with meaning. By the way, how did you fare with your entry in the contest?
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 13-May-2014
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Thanks joneau2, as usual, not even a mention.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Children at the Playground" is a rondel meeting all of the requirements of that genre. It has good rhythm and excellent unusual rhyme pattern which is followed consistently. The meter is good.
Preston
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Children at the Playground" is a rondel meeting all of the requirements of that genre. It has good rhythm and excellent unusual rhyme pattern which is followed consistently. The meter is good.
Preston
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from RGstar
Another good delivery, Treischel. You make good use of the knowledge of systems. The repetition fits in nicely and do not disturb or throw thoughts.
Good write,
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Another good delivery, Treischel. You make good use of the knowledge of systems. The repetition fits in nicely and do not disturb or throw thoughts.
Good write,
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Thank you RG. Appreciate the feedback.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
I remember pushing my younger sister ever higher until she cried. Of course she got even later on after she picked herself up from the sand and bawled 'MAAW!!' As to the piece, a far different scenario is displayed. Love the Rondeau, perhaps a rondel as good as yours is next.
Regards:
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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I remember pushing my younger sister ever higher until she cried. Of course she got even later on after she picked herself up from the sand and bawled 'MAAW!!' As to the piece, a far different scenario is displayed. Love the Rondeau, perhaps a rondel as good as yours is next.
Regards:
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 12-May-2014
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Thank you Steven. That would be great.
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Dear Tom: Just posted 'The Springfield Foal' Part 1.
Cheers: Steve
