Blinded by Your Light.
Putting myself first now.16 total reviews
Comment from reconciled
Hey Jaq...-smile- who loves me ...I cant for see...nor stand in assurance it will forever be....only whom I give a part of me...do I govern in love given freely........and I will love openly...unashamed by shallow possessed by so many....-smile-...love you michael
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Hey Jaq...-smile- who loves me ...I cant for see...nor stand in assurance it will forever be....only whom I give a part of me...do I govern in love given freely........and I will love openly...unashamed by shallow possessed by so many....-smile-...love you michael
Comment Written 19-May-2014
reply by the author on 19-May-2014
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Aww thanks Michael, love ya too my friend. I'm just clearing my emotions a wee bit. The one after this ends a bit more hopeful :). Love n hugs, Jaq xxx
Comment from mruss1
The old saying that love hurts comes to mind. We all make sacrifices but when it turns out for not our hearts shatter. For me moving on is really tough everything in my life is connected. Disregarding one thing effect others. I am like an elephant but was thinking what do they have to remember? Some saying I can't understand:) The world does go on and so does life. It's not over until the fat lady sings or sits on you and crushes the life from your body. We should change places for a couple of days. You don't see what you have until it's not there anymore...Mark
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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The old saying that love hurts comes to mind. We all make sacrifices but when it turns out for not our hearts shatter. For me moving on is really tough everything in my life is connected. Disregarding one thing effect others. I am like an elephant but was thinking what do they have to remember? Some saying I can't understand:) The world does go on and so does life. It's not over until the fat lady sings or sits on you and crushes the life from your body. We should change places for a couple of days. You don't see what you have until it's not there anymore...Mark
Comment Written 17-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Many thanks for your wonderful review and sixer Mark. It is true we don't know what we have until it's gone. Love does hurt but it shouldn't, or it wasn't truly love I think. Great review and thanks for reading. Hugs and love, Jaq xx
Comment from MM lives on :)
I'm so sorry I missed this poem girlie I'm out of six stars but truly wish I weren't.. This was such a deep and heartfelt poem and indeed one deserving moire than five.. Thanks for sharing and I will for get you the next time
reply by the author on 17-May-2014
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I'm so sorry I missed this poem girlie I'm out of six stars but truly wish I weren't.. This was such a deep and heartfelt poem and indeed one deserving moire than five.. Thanks for sharing and I will for get you the next time
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 17-May-2014
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Many thanks my friend. It's enough to have your feedback the numbers are just a wee bonus. Have one now that I am toying with posting. :) Hope all is well with you all <3 xx
Comment from closetpoetjester
I'm sure we've all blinded and been blinded at one time or another and nothing hurts more than the latter.
With that said, you've penned an eloquent yet self assertive write Jaqualish on how YOU come first now. I think they say we HAVE to learn to love ourselves first. I wonder if you've loved another so hard, you've NOT had time devoted to loving any of yourself. When we're blinded by others, once we realise that, we need to take stock, regroup and get back in there with a new improved take no BS attitude.
You're sounding the goods mate! Your couplets reflected the way it was, how it is and how its NOW going to be. Power to you mate on a newly fashioned you...one that sounds like she is going to take care of herself first. Bravo!
Cheers P
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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I'm sure we've all blinded and been blinded at one time or another and nothing hurts more than the latter.
With that said, you've penned an eloquent yet self assertive write Jaqualish on how YOU come first now. I think they say we HAVE to learn to love ourselves first. I wonder if you've loved another so hard, you've NOT had time devoted to loving any of yourself. When we're blinded by others, once we realise that, we need to take stock, regroup and get back in there with a new improved take no BS attitude.
You're sounding the goods mate! Your couplets reflected the way it was, how it is and how its NOW going to be. Power to you mate on a newly fashioned you...one that sounds like she is going to take care of herself first. Bravo!
Cheers P
x
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Cheers Pippalicious. I actually started this way before I broke my arm and just went back to finish it. I'm a different person now. Much stronger and so much wiser. I just needed something to help me get back on the poetry horse so to speak :). Love n hugs Pippalish. xxxxx
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Thank God it's not recent then mate. Well written anyway...
Hugs Pippalish
xoxo
Comment from Domino 2
I don't think I've 'searched for love' for decades now, Jaq. :-)
Excellent alliteration and rhymes in this thoroughly honest and feeling write.
Very smooth read without obvious meter.
So long as we learn from broken or unrequited relationships, and don't dwell on them, then we can move on. Easier said than done of course.
You're a very sweet person who DESERVES happiness, and I sure wish you bundles of it.
Best wishes, Ted xx
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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I don't think I've 'searched for love' for decades now, Jaq. :-)
Excellent alliteration and rhymes in this thoroughly honest and feeling write.
Very smooth read without obvious meter.
So long as we learn from broken or unrequited relationships, and don't dwell on them, then we can move on. Easier said than done of course.
You're a very sweet person who DESERVES happiness, and I sure wish you bundles of it.
Best wishes, Ted xx
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Aww thanks for your review Teddy. Always a pleasure to hear from you. I wish the best for you too xx
Comment from maggieadams
You go, girl. Your well rhymed and rhythmic poem voices a new resolve to love yourself and not settle for selfish love just to have someone. Take care of yourself and nurture you. You deserve it.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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You go, girl. Your well rhymed and rhythmic poem voices a new resolve to love yourself and not settle for selfish love just to have someone. Take care of yourself and nurture you. You deserve it.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Many thanks maggie. It has to be done :) your support is much appreciated xx Jaq
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets including the proximate rhyme of turn/run
good alliteration in torrential torment and in take time
and in tears tumble
excellent use of enjambment
thoughtful expression of emotion
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets including the proximate rhyme of turn/run
good alliteration in torrential torment and in take time
and in tears tumble
excellent use of enjambment
thoughtful expression of emotion
Brooke
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Many thanks for your very knowledgeable review Brooke. It is always a pleasure to read your thoughts. Jaq xx
Comment from Moh Ana
A lovely poem with wonderful rhyming! Taking time out to love oneself first could just lead us to true love, that "diamond bright" with "vibrant light" reflected from none other than thy "truly seeing" self! Thanks for the delightful read, and all the best for the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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A lovely poem with wonderful rhyming! Taking time out to love oneself first could just lead us to true love, that "diamond bright" with "vibrant light" reflected from none other than thy "truly seeing" self! Thanks for the delightful read, and all the best for the contest!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Many thanks Moh Ana for your wonderful review :) xx
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your chosen words allow the reader to feel and see the love of oneself and how it was lost and now renew to start again loving the person you truly are
good couplet rhyme theme through out your verses
good alliteration in
torrential, torment
frames, frown
blot, black
bare, being
soul, self
which, way
roads, run
time, that's
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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good luck in the contest
your chosen words allow the reader to feel and see the love of oneself and how it was lost and now renew to start again loving the person you truly are
good couplet rhyme theme through out your verses
good alliteration in
torrential, torment
frames, frown
blot, black
bare, being
soul, self
which, way
roads, run
time, that's
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Many thanks Smoothicool for your very in-depth and wonderful review. :) x
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most welcome..SC
Comment from Kingsland
The first person you must like in this world is yourself. You have written this poetic voice with good flowing thoughts and phrases. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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The first person you must like in this world is yourself. You have written this poetic voice with good flowing thoughts and phrases. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for your very kind review John. :) x
