Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 155 "Buds and Bloom"Small and Specialty Poems
9 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad the blooming, yellow roses caught your eye, and you shared their beauty in both the photograph and the poem. I admired your rhyme scheme with the last word of the line rhyming with first word of the next line--it seems like quite a challenge! Bravo- Joan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
I am glad the blooming, yellow roses caught your eye, and you shared their beauty in both the photograph and the poem. I admired your rhyme scheme with the last word of the line rhyming with first word of the next line--it seems like quite a challenge! Bravo- Joan
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you Joan. Yes, it was a good brain exercise.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Buds and Bloom" has a good unconventional structure good rhyme and meter and is written if figurative language and imagery.
Preston
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
Hi, Treischel,
"Buds and Bloom" has a good unconventional structure good rhyme and meter and is written if figurative language and imagery.
Preston
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks Preston.
Comment from RGstar
Nicely done, and the rhyming is spot on, considering the structure.
So vibrant in colour and thought.
A good presentation.
Bravo,
best wishes
RG
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
Nicely done, and the rhyming is spot on, considering the structure.
So vibrant in colour and thought.
A good presentation.
Bravo,
best wishes
RG
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you RG.
Comment from sunnilicious
Nice photograph. Good author notes. Lovely poem as it resembles love. Good visual imagery created. GOod rhymes. Good rhythm. Great work.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
Nice photograph. Good author notes. Lovely poem as it resembles love. Good visual imagery created. GOod rhymes. Good rhythm. Great work.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much Alicia.
Comment from Angel Debbie
I like the way this reads it is a fun read. I like the Authors notes to that helped. The Ends Edge is a neat way of writing. Thnk You for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
I like the way this reads it is a fun read. I like the Authors notes to that helped. The Ends Edge is a neat way of writing. Thnk You for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you Angel Debbie.
Comment from rod007
This poem reflects the brightness of the poets imagination in seeing the brilliance of the flower and how it creates a spiritual magic. Well done, Tom. Sorry I reviewed Brooke's work before I did yours, but a great compliment
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
This poem reflects the brightness of the poets imagination in seeing the brilliance of the flower and how it creates a spiritual magic. Well done, Tom. Sorry I reviewed Brooke's work before I did yours, but a great compliment
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks rod. Did you mean to rate this one a 4?
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This is a lovely sunshiny poem, Tom, and the photo is so uplifting after these long winter months. Together they brightened my day. :) Sandra.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
This is a lovely sunshiny poem, Tom, and the photo is so uplifting after these long winter months. Together they brightened my day. :) Sandra.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thank you Sandra.
Comment from healfromwithin
I liked your poem. I have a couple of notes:
Throw the yellow (throw?)
Mellow petal's glow (maybe eliminate Mellow and use a different descriptive word -- "petal's (amber, golden, brilliant) glow" (or reverse, for better pacing: "petal's mellow glow)
The rest of the poem was fine.
Como Park Conservatory? St. Paul? :)
Good luck on your writing.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
I liked your poem. I have a couple of notes:
Throw the yellow (throw?)
Mellow petal's glow (maybe eliminate Mellow and use a different descriptive word -- "petal's (amber, golden, brilliant) glow" (or reverse, for better pacing: "petal's mellow glow)
The rest of the poem was fine.
Como Park Conservatory? St. Paul? :)
Good luck on your writing.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Thanks healfromwithin. I'm probably a bit obtuse, but I meant they throw a glow thats mellow yellow. Yes, St. Paul.
Comment from NicciFaye
Treischel the opening stanza is just as beautiful as the picture. Buds and bloom is a wonderful writing. Inspiration is great when it produces beautiful things like this!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
Treischel the opening stanza is just as beautiful as the picture. Buds and bloom is a wonderful writing. Inspiration is great when it produces beautiful things like this!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2014
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Oh that is so sweet to hear. Thank you Nicci!