Lunar Legacy
Cursed celestial satellite-why do you torment me so?76 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
An exciting thriller as always Dean, good poetic construction and rhythm to your words. Very good rhyming structure that makes sense. Fantastic visual aids to make it all come fearfully alive. Don
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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An exciting thriller as always Dean, good poetic construction and rhythm to your words. Very good rhyming structure that makes sense. Fantastic visual aids to make it all come fearfully alive. Don
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014
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I appreciate that, Don, thank you my friend!
Comment from ennahanid
Oh! Good grief!! Here I am giving a 6 to something I don't quite understand- per usual and to top it off because you have a habit of scaring me to death I have to sleep with the light on - again.
This was super good and believe it or not I read it twice...and out loud. I heard my grandson holler to his Dad - Nana's got the crazies again today Dad - she's talking to herself again. A big joke me reading stuff out loud.
Thank you so much for this and the notes and I am going a'googling for Freud later. - Dinah
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Oh! Good grief!! Here I am giving a 6 to something I don't quite understand- per usual and to top it off because you have a habit of scaring me to death I have to sleep with the light on - again.
This was super good and believe it or not I read it twice...and out loud. I heard my grandson holler to his Dad - Nana's got the crazies again today Dad - she's talking to herself again. A big joke me reading stuff out loud.
Thank you so much for this and the notes and I am going a'googling for Freud later. - Dinah
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
That was awesome. I needed to read it twice in an attempt to understand its meaning, but I was relieved to see the notes at the end. That made me feel at least a little bit better about my level of intelligence.
While I didn't capture the entire meaning (expected), it flowed so smoothly and possessed an eerie aura that I found to be very enjoyable. And despite this being based on past events, I still found it to be original and creative -- the primary reason for the sixer. Nice!
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That was awesome. I needed to read it twice in an attempt to understand its meaning, but I was relieved to see the notes at the end. That made me feel at least a little bit better about my level of intelligence.
While I didn't capture the entire meaning (expected), it flowed so smoothly and possessed an eerie aura that I found to be very enjoyable. And despite this being based on past events, I still found it to be original and creative -- the primary reason for the sixer. Nice!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I really loved your poem ( as I did your last ) you are such a talented writer , I loved the story again it flowed right up its climax , the rhyming was brilliant, I really enjoyed it, well done thank you
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I really loved your poem ( as I did your last ) you are such a talented writer , I loved the story again it flowed right up its climax , the rhyming was brilliant, I really enjoyed it, well done thank you
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
I think this one is worth a six, it would, I think, make a good folk song as well. You paint a good mental picture of the werewolf seeking a cure, then discovering there is none.
Freud's pioneering work now does read a lot like a Sherlock Holmes thriller, just without the occasional 'elementary, my dear Watson'. Mind you, some of it is so speculative one does wonder about his own sexual orientation and development.
Patrick
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Hi Dean Kuch,
I think this one is worth a six, it would, I think, make a good folk song as well. You paint a good mental picture of the werewolf seeking a cure, then discovering there is none.
Freud's pioneering work now does read a lot like a Sherlock Holmes thriller, just without the occasional 'elementary, my dear Watson'. Mind you, some of it is so speculative one does wonder about his own sexual orientation and development.
Patrick
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Rainbowsofhappiness
Having received a degree in psychology I am very familiar with the teachings of Freud and his unorthodox manner of addressing metal ailments so I was able to comprehend this poem and the background story it was based from. This poem is eloquently detailed, full of rich alliteration, and uses precisely chosen word choices to elicit the biggest impact possible from the reader. This poem almost makes one question if there is a monster of some sort hidden deep within all of us. In a figurative matter of speaking, humanity is the source and creator of these figurative monsters that feed off of greed, fear, and self-doubt. This poem flows smoothly as a result of rhyming patterns interspersed throughout. The photograph accompanying this poem and the GIFesque rotating moon are phenomenal elements to further inbed the writer's words into the reader's mind leaving a greater impact and resonating with the reader long after this poem is viewed. The vivid images created through precisely selected word choice create a strong impression. I like how this poem seems more like a story than a poem with its individual stanzas serving as separate chapters. The final line of this poem "the wolf had finally won-just as I'd feared", shows the character's acceptance of his fate and he seems to finally embrace it. This poem is exquisitely designed to make us question our behavior toward humanity. Do we behave in a monstrous manner towards others? The impact of the final line allows this poem to become ingrained within our minds leaving us to question our actions. Extremely well written and constructed in format, with the lines of the poem building seamlessly upon one another to create a final resounding shot to the reader's mind. Well done!
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Having received a degree in psychology I am very familiar with the teachings of Freud and his unorthodox manner of addressing metal ailments so I was able to comprehend this poem and the background story it was based from. This poem is eloquently detailed, full of rich alliteration, and uses precisely chosen word choices to elicit the biggest impact possible from the reader. This poem almost makes one question if there is a monster of some sort hidden deep within all of us. In a figurative matter of speaking, humanity is the source and creator of these figurative monsters that feed off of greed, fear, and self-doubt. This poem flows smoothly as a result of rhyming patterns interspersed throughout. The photograph accompanying this poem and the GIFesque rotating moon are phenomenal elements to further inbed the writer's words into the reader's mind leaving a greater impact and resonating with the reader long after this poem is viewed. The vivid images created through precisely selected word choice create a strong impression. I like how this poem seems more like a story than a poem with its individual stanzas serving as separate chapters. The final line of this poem "the wolf had finally won-just as I'd feared", shows the character's acceptance of his fate and he seems to finally embrace it. This poem is exquisitely designed to make us question our behavior toward humanity. Do we behave in a monstrous manner towards others? The impact of the final line allows this poem to become ingrained within our minds leaving us to question our actions. Extremely well written and constructed in format, with the lines of the poem building seamlessly upon one another to create a final resounding shot to the reader's mind. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from barkingdog
I feel the poor man's anguish as he begs the gypsy's help. He is doomed to be what he is.
Great alliterations and 'a' assonance in this line: Melancholy melodies played, filled the air around the camp...
Fantastic follow-up notes.
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I feel the poor man's anguish as he begs the gypsy's help. He is doomed to be what he is.
Great alliterations and 'a' assonance in this line: Melancholy melodies played, filled the air around the camp...
Fantastic follow-up notes.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Domino 2
This write has your natural gift of the dark, Dean, and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
My one nit-pick is the lack of meter in large parts, though there is excellent flow in others.
Here's one quick example of how easily a line can be metered:
'Old-GYP-sy-QUEEN-leaned-IN-[real]-CLOSE, then spoke these words to me--
I sure don't want to sound a smart-arse, as meter isn't important to many readers, and maybe it was secondary to you in this excellent write, but I always think it adds SO MUCH more flow to rhymed poetry.
I honestly won't be in the least offended if you ignore me.
Have a great day, by good and talented friend. Ted
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This write has your natural gift of the dark, Dean, and I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
My one nit-pick is the lack of meter in large parts, though there is excellent flow in others.
Here's one quick example of how easily a line can be metered:
'Old-GYP-sy-QUEEN-leaned-IN-[real]-CLOSE, then spoke these words to me--
I sure don't want to sound a smart-arse, as meter isn't important to many readers, and maybe it was secondary to you in this excellent write, but I always think it adds SO MUCH more flow to rhymed poetry.
I honestly won't be in the least offended if you ignore me.
Have a great day, by good and talented friend. Ted
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from kiwijenny
You get six stars for this my friend ....because of your research...because of imagery and because I am wolfishly hungry.
Sorry I digress...was Freud a genius or off base ..I don't know much about him
God bless
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You get six stars for this my friend ....because of your research...because of imagery and because I am wolfishly hungry.
Sorry I digress...was Freud a genius or off base ..I don't know much about him
God bless
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from Angel Blessings
I always look forward to reading your work! You never disappoint me. Very spooky as is your great talent! Flowed well, great imagery, and excellent presentation!Angel Blessings
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I always look forward to reading your work! You never disappoint me. Very spooky as is your great talent! Flowed well, great imagery, and excellent presentation!Angel Blessings
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
