A Copper Coin
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "With jaded eyes and silver tongue."The beginnings of the Thief Hunter.
3 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
"...she'd timed her arrival perfectly...not TO early ...TOO
You lost me for a while, but I picked up the thread again. As close as I can make out, Skye joins a gang in order to dethrone Dragna. I'll see if I can 'get' the next chapter.
Very imaginative.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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"...she'd timed her arrival perfectly...not TO early ...TOO
You lost me for a while, but I picked up the thread again. As close as I can make out, Skye joins a gang in order to dethrone Dragna. I'll see if I can 'get' the next chapter.
Very imaginative.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2014
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Sorry for the mistake, I will add the extra 'o' as soon as I am finished with replying to reviews. The Dragna killed Skye's younger sister and several other children/young adults (though Skye's sister wasn't in a gang and was killed for a public bath house token).
At the end of the chapter, Skye is meeting with the 'Queen' of the Ragtag gang of thieves. Incidentally this is the same person that she delivered a message to in chapter 1.
Comment from DonandVicki
Well constructed continuation to your story. You have a good sense of story and character development which holds on to the readers attention. Don
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Well constructed continuation to your story. You have a good sense of story and character development which holds on to the readers attention. Don
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much. Are there any pointers that you could give me so I can improve my writing even more?
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Comment from rwilliam
Hot plates hissed haughtily and cider barrels gurgled with glee, --EXCELLENT opening line! Love the descriptive writing!!
It was an HONOR to read your work. What a fabulous writer you are! Very creative and you paint an amazing picture with your words!I'm so glad I 'found' you and look forward to reading more.
It's wonderful to read something deserving a 6 star. Been awhile. :-)
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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Hot plates hissed haughtily and cider barrels gurgled with glee, --EXCELLENT opening line! Love the descriptive writing!!
It was an HONOR to read your work. What a fabulous writer you are! Very creative and you paint an amazing picture with your words!I'm so glad I 'found' you and look forward to reading more.
It's wonderful to read something deserving a 6 star. Been awhile. :-)
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2014
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Thank you :) Firefox had a hissy fit however and posted the chapter when I only had half of it done, you should be able to read it all now. I'm honoured that you gave me 6 stars! My first ever 6 stars, I am so excited!! (Sorry, I'm almost 20 and for someone to give me praise like this is mind blowing!)
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Are you kidding me? almost..20?! Man, you have a promising career ahead of you! I am SERIOUS!! This will NOT be your last 6 star either! You have a gift!!! I know how you feel though. When someone really likes your work it makes you so darn happy you could pee your pants...LOL :-D
But for the record I meant every word. You are a GREAT writer!! I look forward to reading more of your work and becoming a better writer for it!
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Nope, not kidding. I'm turning 20 in May :) Though writing is hard to get into as a career in Australia, but I'll keep trying!
Thank you very much, I think I still have room to improve upon my writing so any pointers would be greatly appreciated. I can't say thank you enough for my first 6 stars and I look forward to writing more work for you to read lol.