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Rhyming Quatrains, Contest Entry

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Comment from bichonfrisegirl
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Mikey,

I'm kind of reading this after the fact! Congrats on your win ... well deserved for this very frank write! You told it exactly like it is!

Well written and chalk full of humour. LOL ... "puppies work, soldiers too, precious babes, ooo". As much as I love puppies, I gotta admit that I'm sick of seeing poems about puppies win all the time when oft times there seems to be a much more deserving write that should have won. C'est la vie! Obviously tons of puppy lovers out there! :)

I really enjoyed this clever, truthful write!

Connie


 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
    Yeah. I love my little Cocker Spaniel too, but I've run out of haikus about her! So glad you enjoyed this. It was a lot of fun to write and we agree about puppy poems as much as I love puppies! Thank you so much. mikey
Comment from Patti R.
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I'm so happy that your poem won this ridiculous contest, Mikey! You are at your most handsome when your tongue is firmly tucked into your cheek :) This is a terrific poem, no rules, but plenty of poetic license!

Your author notes convey your integrity and honesty.

Patti

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Glad you enjoyed. I was reluctant to enter in. But, I thought I would throw my two cents in after all. It really isn't the big problem that everyone makes it out to be. Most of the winners I see are pretty damn good if you ask me. I've lost to many a great piece that I voted for myself! Thank you so much, mikey
Comment from adewpearl
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Mikey, congratulations on your contest win :-)
Good use of abab rhyming
good alliteration in pick the poem
you describe well one of the voting strategies I detest
I'm laughing aloud at the listing of topics assured to win contests :-)
Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Thank you so much! So pleased you enjoyed. I was rather shocked to see who my competition was. Now to beat Moonwillow in a Haiku competition and retire!! Hahaha. mikey
Comment from MagKing
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This is indeed exceptional!
I had not but no choice at all than to give you what you piece deserved... You did excellently well.
I see the rhymes, but the syllable scheme is what made it so exceptional....Good work!
In a language I know how to speak, I will say "E ti ta tan"
Meaning; you killed it.
Congratulations!

MagKing

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    I am so pleased you enjoyed it. I love it when you speak another language to me!! What language is that? I have to look it up so I can pronounce it correctly and drive everyone crazy saying it to them. mikey
reply by MagKing on 01-Mar-2014
    The language is called Yoruba spoken mostly in the western part of Nigeria in Africa, but also spoken in the country Benin, Togo and Ghana.

    MagKing
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Very cool. I shall drive everyone crazy now!! Thank you. mikey
reply by MagKing on 01-Mar-2014
    You're always welcome
    But if you gonna say that to someone you're older than or your age mate, you'd say:
    "O ti ta tan"

    But people that are older or superior to you, you'd say "E ti ta tan"

    Only the "E" and "O" at the beginning of the statement changes...

    Good luck!
    MagKing
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    Oh, okay. Lots of "E"s for me. Hahaha. Thank you. mikey
Comment from visionary1234
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oh you area a sweet man Mikey - no wonder your piece won! Love your gentle tongue-in-cheek poke at 'the system', and I totally enjoyed your wry, wise sense of humor on this one!
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
    I am so delighted that you enjoyed this. It really was great fun to write. So much complaining and only three entries! It should be obvious now that only the highest quality work wins!!! Hahaha. Thank you for the encouraging words and all the stars. mikey
reply by visionary1234 on 01-Mar-2014
    lucky for you I was too busy to enjoy a bitch session mikey! :):):)S
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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You've given the problem of voter participation some serious thought in your rhyming quatrains. You've stretched the rhyme in your ooh/do match-up. Do you mean "ooo"? The change in scheme in the final quatrain brought a smile (I like attitude.) :) Nancy

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014


reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
    Yes! I do mean "ooo". Is that how to spell it? I had it eew, but that wasn't the right word. It's supposed to be the cute baby sound that rhymes with "do". Hahaha. Glad you liked this. It was great fun. I feel like they let me off the leash to roam the neighborhood, mikey
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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there's only one way to vote and that's for
the one you consider the best, although that's
not always straight forward since there are
usually some great entries.


Having read this, Michael, I can see why it was the winner.
Congratulation..

Margaret

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2014

Comment from nelliesellie
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I read your author notes. I think more people should vote. Reviewing these contests help support your fellow writers and the site. My problem is I see way too many good entries. I have to force my self to vote for one out of five or six I really like. We will not get more voters by accusing the all ready voters of not doing a good job. Great work. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014

Comment from Lovinia
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Seems quite a roll out in the booths .... because voters developed a conscience or simply only three poems to read? LOL with cynicism.

Beautiful presentation ... if I were one of 'those' voters, I'd vote for yours just because it looks so pretty ... I wouldn't even need to read the poem.

Of course if I was in the contest, I could vote for the worst poem just incase I voted myself out of the win..... if I were one of 'those' voters.

I suppose I should vote for the one where the private e-mail asked me to vote for them and they would vote for me in the other contest.... if I were one of 'those' voters.

The rhyme scheme is out-lined in the rules, "up to you", I wonder if I should not vote because you changed the rhyme scheme in the last verse, and I felt upset. Free verse up-sets me, so I'll vote for the poem that rhymes and is in perfect meter ... even if they didn't read the rules before they entered.

Sorry, missed the contest .... I guess my caustic remarks lend credence to your poem. :)))

In the actuality. Yes, presentation is great, though I see no rules telling me to vote for the picture and word font.


Your rhyme is excellent and unforced. Your message is clear yet with a tongue-in-cheek approach which is funny. In fact it was "peachly good". LOL

Twenty lines, so complies with the rules. Great alliteration in "pick/poet", "lost love", great 'f' consonance in "final difference". I love "float their boats".


"puppies work, soldiers too, precious babes ooh
I need something strong that is sure to jell
I will call on the Lord, that's what I'll do
If you vote against me, you'll go to hell! " ..... priceless .... what about growing old, grey hair and wrinkles??

Great work - deserves the win. Though I haven't reviewed the other two entries. The best of luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxo

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014

Comment from w.j.debi
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This is a clever entry. I like how you even make fun of the rules of the particular contest you have entered. Excellent rhymes in your quatrains. (Followed the rules exactly) Excellent choice of artwork to compliment your theme.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2014