Little Poems
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Comment from Selina Stambi
Even your poetry about sad things sounds pretty, Tom.
Simple, lovey rhyme scheme.
The trees are broke
And "Holy Smoke! .. love these lines ..:)
My mom's cousin's home on the shores of Tom's River was washed away.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
Even your poetry about sad things sounds pretty, Tom.
Simple, lovey rhyme scheme.
The trees are broke
And "Holy Smoke! .. love these lines ..:)
My mom's cousin's home on the shores of Tom's River was washed away.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks Sonali. Sorry to hear that.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Storm season is such a fearful and devastating time of year.
Your Tercet poem captures the ferocity and speed of storm cells and the dreadful damage left behind.
A visually "spot on" image and effective overall presentation.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
Storm season is such a fearful and devastating time of year.
Your Tercet poem captures the ferocity and speed of storm cells and the dreadful damage left behind.
A visually "spot on" image and effective overall presentation.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you Shirley.
Comment from rod007
Powerful image of natural disasters that leave so many homeless. The big question as you said below, will they stay and rebuild:
"Just hope and pray
That those who stay
Can rebuild, not be undone."
Well done.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
Powerful image of natural disasters that leave so many homeless. The big question as you said below, will they stay and rebuild:
"Just hope and pray
That those who stay
Can rebuild, not be undone."
Well done.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thank you rod
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Tom - as always a skilled post. Thursday we had a major snow storm at 5pm, by 10pm we were having a major summer storm complete with massive rain, lightening and thunder - the winds alone I was sure would pull up the trees. Then came the floods, no place for all the water to go since the ground is still winter frozen...on top of the snow melting it's a big mess.
Powerful reminder from the planet - I wonder if we are listening.
Great writing - rambled a bit:) oops
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
Dear Tom - as always a skilled post. Thursday we had a major snow storm at 5pm, by 10pm we were having a major summer storm complete with massive rain, lightening and thunder - the winds alone I was sure would pull up the trees. Then came the floods, no place for all the water to go since the ground is still winter frozen...on top of the snow melting it's a big mess.
Powerful reminder from the planet - I wonder if we are listening.
Great writing - rambled a bit:) oops
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Thanks Maureen. Sounds dreadful and a bit frightening
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It has been a trying time for many around the world these past few months. Here in the UK, many have lost their homes to floods and hurricane like winds. Never been seen in this country before on such a large scale. The worlds climate is definitely changing for the worse. A well worded poem, Tom, which many will relate to. xsx sandra
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
It has been a trying time for many around the world these past few months. Here in the UK, many have lost their homes to floods and hurricane like winds. Never been seen in this country before on such a large scale. The worlds climate is definitely changing for the worse. A well worded poem, Tom, which many will relate to. xsx sandra
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thank you Sandra. Your mention of storms over there was one of many I had in mind. Thanks for your thoughts.
Comment from Joan E.
But wait--there is one more! Thank you for noting the versatility of the Tercet and for sharing a photograph of Hurricane Sandy's wrath along with your muse's interpretation of storms. I admired your rhymes and rhythm. My thoughts are with the survivors. Try to stay warm- Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
But wait--there is one more! Thank you for noting the versatility of the Tercet and for sharing a photograph of Hurricane Sandy's wrath along with your muse's interpretation of storms. I admired your rhymes and rhythm. My thoughts are with the survivors. Try to stay warm- Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thank you Joan. Two days digging out of this one. The roads are still a mess.
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Only two days--I'm glad it wasn't worse! -J
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Mother Nature has been kicking up her heels for a few years now. I'm living through another episode today in Northern Michigan.
Well done poem, Tom. One small thing; a typo; "holly" should be "holy"
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
Mother Nature has been kicking up her heels for a few years now. I'm living through another episode today in Northern Michigan.
Well done poem, Tom. One small thing; a typo; "holly" should be "holy"
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you Mareietta, Holly is a plant with leaves and red berries. Holy is a spiritual exclamation.
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Sorry, Tom. I thought you meant to say, "Holy Smoke".
(*_*)
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Oops! I did! I'm the one with the two l's! Ok, fixed it.
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Too funny!
Comment from Taiyo Nakai
I like your poem! I like poetry better than novels, and I specifically like rhyming poetry. This poem on the debris left behind a storm is a nice Tercet from my point of view. It has a nice flow, rhythm . . . all the good elements!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
I like your poem! I like poetry better than novels, and I specifically like rhyming poetry. This poem on the debris left behind a storm is a nice Tercet from my point of view. It has a nice flow, rhythm . . . all the good elements!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you Taiyo. Glad you stopped by to review and comment.
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Your welcome!
Comment from mfowler
These tercet structures reads well. Your choice of topic fits effectively with the short intense burst of ideas the format produces. Also, with the overlapping rhyme scheme in each line, each verse feels connected to a whole. Your first verse introduces the aftermath of the storm; your second expresses your anguish at the extent of the damage; and your third offers questions about hope. Gotta say, I loved that: trees are broke and " Holy Smoke" combination right in the middle. Clever rhyme, but also very human in the way of reaction.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
These tercet structures reads well. Your choice of topic fits effectively with the short intense burst of ideas the format produces. Also, with the overlapping rhyme scheme in each line, each verse feels connected to a whole. Your first verse introduces the aftermath of the storm; your second expresses your anguish at the extent of the damage; and your third offers questions about hope. Gotta say, I loved that: trees are broke and " Holy Smoke" combination right in the middle. Clever rhyme, but also very human in the way of reaction.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you mfowler. I am impressed with the detail of you review.
Comment from Erik McGinley
Nicely written.
Though you specify the inspiration of the poem, I actually read this one as analogy of struggle and strife in daily life. The arguments the disappointments, all those disasters that people suffer.
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
Nicely written.
Though you specify the inspiration of the poem, I actually read this one as analogy of struggle and strife in daily life. The arguments the disappointments, all those disasters that people suffer.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2014
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Thank you Erik. You captured the true essence.