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21 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
lovely presentation of your poem
good use of rhyming couplets including the good proximate rhyme of table/maple
good alliteration in phrases like gives a golden glow and jelly jars
you must like butter mommy - like butter, Mommy
beautifully descriptive and movingly nostalgic :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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lovely presentation of your poem
good use of rhyming couplets including the good proximate rhyme of table/maple
good alliteration in phrases like gives a golden glow and jelly jars
you must like butter mommy - like butter, Mommy
beautifully descriptive and movingly nostalgic :-) Brooke
Comment Written 03-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much...I sure miss those days, but now I have infant grandchildren and are looking forward to them bringing me handpicked flowers :)
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me too - my kids gave me those great experiences thirty years ago, and now I wait to live them again with my grandson :-)
Comment from Selina Stambi
once were tiny yellow flowers are now just years gone by ..
... the last line is a poignant reminder of the ephemeral nature of life.
You had me yearning for spring, Annie!
All the best in the contest. Nice to meet you. :)
Sonali
A delicate flower held under your chin give a golden .. A delicate flower .. gives / Delicate flowers .. give
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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once were tiny yellow flowers are now just years gone by ..
... the last line is a poignant reminder of the ephemeral nature of life.
You had me yearning for spring, Annie!
All the best in the contest. Nice to meet you. :)
Sonali
A delicate flower held under your chin give a golden .. A delicate flower .. gives / Delicate flowers .. give
Comment Written 22-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much :)
Comment from MagKing
That's really a fine poem you've got there.
Lovely indeed without doubt.
You did very well in this piece.
I liked it all the way
Congratulations!
MagKing
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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That's really a fine poem you've got there.
Lovely indeed without doubt.
You did very well in this piece.
I liked it all the way
Congratulations!
MagKing
Comment Written 19-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much...true story, glad you liked it :)
Comment from Lylise
This is a strong entry into the Spring Poem writing prompt. It is well written and this presentation is great. Contest requirements fullfilled in spades. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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This is a strong entry into the Spring Poem writing prompt. It is well written and this presentation is great. Contest requirements fullfilled in spades. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed this poem.
Comment from mfowler
The appeal of your poem is as much the sentiment it explores as it is the wonderfully evocative yellowness of your presentation. I just loved: Buttercups in jelly jars. It was a really easy scene to imagine and so set the tone for the spring mood.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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The appeal of your poem is as much the sentiment it explores as it is the wonderfully evocative yellowness of your presentation. I just loved: Buttercups in jelly jars. It was a really easy scene to imagine and so set the tone for the spring mood.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, so near and dear to my heart are those memories.
Comment from l.raven
I know just what you are saying...my granddaughter used to bring me dandelions...now she is growing up and I don't see her as much...I love your poem...very nicely written...
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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I know just what you are saying...my granddaughter used to bring me dandelions...now she is growing up and I don't see her as much...I love your poem...very nicely written...
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you...we sure miss those days that go by all too fast. And thank you for the wonderful review.
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You are so welcome...and yes they do go by fast...
Comment from MissMerri
This is a charming look at spring, invoking sweet memories tied to spring flowers. I loved how it made me think of my own children and those small clusters of dandelions and grass they would bring me. Thanks for the reminder, and good luck n the contest. This is delightful.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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This is a charming look at spring, invoking sweet memories tied to spring flowers. I loved how it made me think of my own children and those small clusters of dandelions and grass they would bring me. Thanks for the reminder, and good luck n the contest. This is delightful.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for your wonderful words and rating!!
Comment from Atreyee
What a sweet sentiment and expressed so beautifully!I just loved the imagery in here and how you said so much in so little-so true ,time seems to fly and soon those pudgy little hands are replaced with smooth,strong,young hands.But on the bright side,the very same hands hold our wrinkling hands in their's now:-)
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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What a sweet sentiment and expressed so beautifully!I just loved the imagery in here and how you said so much in so little-so true ,time seems to fly and soon those pudgy little hands are replaced with smooth,strong,young hands.But on the bright side,the very same hands hold our wrinkling hands in their's now:-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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You are so right, thank you so much!!
Comment from Cariboubill
This is a sweet poem. The little ones see beauty in every day things. It is very tender to get a gift from a child.
May I make a couple suggestions? I think the word, "give", in line five, should be, "gives" to make the verb agree with the subject: "flower". The last line would read better if you replaced the word,"for" with the word, "where".
Much enjoyed!
...Bill
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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This is a sweet poem. The little ones see beauty in every day things. It is very tender to get a gift from a child.
May I make a couple suggestions? I think the word, "give", in line five, should be, "gives" to make the verb agree with the subject: "flower". The last line would read better if you replaced the word,"for" with the word, "where".
Much enjoyed!
...Bill
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for your suggestions, I believe I will change that...I did have "gives" then I changed that earlier. I certainly appreciate your input!! Have a great week :)
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You're welcom. I always hate to suggest changes, but the review instructions say we should, if we see something that might work better.
...Bill
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Poet,
Loved the sunny disposition of this piece. This poem has a very "springy" feel to it with its bright colors, and flowered theme, however, the note about missing those loving bouquets, from those precious hands, is especially felt, (Our son used to raid the neighbors flower garden on his way home from school, lol.) I appreciated your message and the trip down memory lane. Good luck with your entry....Best wishes, Bill
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Hello Poet,
Loved the sunny disposition of this piece. This poem has a very "springy" feel to it with its bright colors, and flowered theme, however, the note about missing those loving bouquets, from those precious hands, is especially felt, (Our son used to raid the neighbors flower garden on his way home from school, lol.) I appreciated your message and the trip down memory lane. Good luck with your entry....Best wishes, Bill
Comment Written 18-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much Bill for a very warm and kind review. My children also raided the neighbors houses, lol