A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Silent Sentinels"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
75 total reviews
Comment from Nichola
Wow! Impressive poem and history lesson. You have done a fine job. You have written quatrains in an AAAB rhyme scheme, with eight syllables in each line. Especially, I like your third and eighth stanzas, but I do think the entire poem is superb, with good imagery and a worthwhile message.
Nichola
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Wow! Impressive poem and history lesson. You have done a fine job. You have written quatrains in an AAAB rhyme scheme, with eight syllables in each line. Especially, I like your third and eighth stanzas, but I do think the entire poem is superb, with good imagery and a worthwhile message.
Nichola
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, Nichola. I'm very grateful for you checking out my work, and I truly appreciate the excellent review.
Comment from DALLAS01
As always your imagery is sharp and your entire write carefully focused. The alliteration and phrasing makes this a beautiful piece of writing, regardless of the content. I believe man will eventually not only destroy the earth but it's inhabitants as well. It's just a matter of time. If it is sooner than later need to get my hands on some barbiturates for me and my family. would not want to e a survivor of this magnitude.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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As always your imagery is sharp and your entire write carefully focused. The alliteration and phrasing makes this a beautiful piece of writing, regardless of the content. I believe man will eventually not only destroy the earth but it's inhabitants as well. It's just a matter of time. If it is sooner than later need to get my hands on some barbiturates for me and my family. would not want to e a survivor of this magnitude.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much for such a fabulous review, DALLAS01. So sorry for the delayed reply to this, I have been a bit under the weather lately. I really do appreciate it!
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Hope you are on the mend.
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Much, much better, thank you!
SMILING
Comment from boxergirl
Great job, Dean, writing about the silent sentinels. Scary to even think about what is lurking in labs all around the world. Interesting author notes to help emphasize the realistic threat to us today.
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Great job, Dean, writing about the silent sentinels. Scary to even think about what is lurking in labs all around the world. Interesting author notes to help emphasize the realistic threat to us today.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
Comment from chasennov
'Silent Sentinels.' Well, we will certainly never know unless it happens. Man has been inhumane to man ever since time began. It will never stop. In fact it may even get worse as time takes its toll. Well done.
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'Silent Sentinels.' Well, we will certainly never know unless it happens. Man has been inhumane to man ever since time began. It will never stop. In fact it may even get worse as time takes its toll. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
Comment from TheWriteTeach
They are out there, planning our demise. It is very real and very scary. This is an excellent piece, Dean. When I read this aloud the flow is excellent through all stanzas, the rhythm and rhyming scheme are a perfect fit, as a hand to glove. Nothing tripped me up. This is very good. I've said it before, you are very talented. Nicely done.
Suzanne
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They are out there, planning our demise. It is very real and very scary. This is an excellent piece, Dean. When I read this aloud the flow is excellent through all stanzas, the rhythm and rhyming scheme are a perfect fit, as a hand to glove. Nothing tripped me up. This is very good. I've said it before, you are very talented. Nicely done.
Suzanne
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
Frightening but the possibilities are there especially in toady's world. Even bacteria has earned its place in the world of terrorism. Yes you are so right could we be next. Why we ask, answers I don't if we will every find the truth or reasons. As scary as your poem is, I found it captivating and makes you think. Thank you for sharing Terrie
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Frightening but the possibilities are there especially in toady's world. Even bacteria has earned its place in the world of terrorism. Yes you are so right could we be next. Why we ask, answers I don't if we will every find the truth or reasons. As scary as your poem is, I found it captivating and makes you think. Thank you for sharing Terrie
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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And, allow me to extend my heartfelt feelings of gratitude to you for your outstanding review, Terrie. Much obliged!
Comment from 24chas
This piece was very well written with a unique rhyme scheme that was perfect for the piece. A haunting warning for the world to be sure. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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This piece was very well written with a unique rhyme scheme that was perfect for the piece. A haunting warning for the world to be sure. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks for reading my work, 24chas. I really appreciate the great review!
Comment from country ranch writer
so much goes on behind those closed doors in the labs. It is terror being born by those who want to seek revenge for the past deeds that have been rendered unto them
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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so much goes on behind those closed doors in the labs. It is terror being born by those who want to seek revenge for the past deeds that have been rendered unto them
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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It's certainly a terrifying topic to me, Country. I frequently write about the things the horrify me the most. WHOOPS! And now, you know my secret, LOL...
Thanks for the outstanding review!
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Just going to have to remind you what I do know some time in the future he he JUST SAYING.
Comment from scarhands
Six fresh stars for you Dean! Basking in all that they've undone is my favorite line. You really capture the idea of playing god with that line, bc it means that man will "do because he can, not because he should." Such foolishness and lack of foresight could surely lead to our undoing... Human creation represents the opposite of the universe's entropy but humans may contribute to the entropy by destroying themselves. Great work!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Six fresh stars for you Dean! Basking in all that they've undone is my favorite line. You really capture the idea of playing god with that line, bc it means that man will "do because he can, not because he should." Such foolishness and lack of foresight could surely lead to our undoing... Human creation represents the opposite of the universe's entropy but humans may contribute to the entropy by destroying themselves. Great work!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, scarhands, and you're absolutely right. We are frequently our own worst enemies.
Much obliged...
Comment from Megajelimind
Whoa. Very political as well as poetic. I enjoyed your work, as well as the attached history lesson. Your poem was dark and violent, and I agree with your ideas of war. My favorite line, I think, was "By playing god we will be burned". It was a beautiful piece of work, you're a very good writer.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Whoa. Very political as well as poetic. I enjoyed your work, as well as the attached history lesson. Your poem was dark and violent, and I agree with your ideas of war. My favorite line, I think, was "By playing god we will be burned". It was a beautiful piece of work, you're a very good writer.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful compliment, Megajelimind. I'm so happy you liked it!
