Unfair Warning
From The Rogue37 total reviews
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This one is a real "hoot." I got a great laugh here well before I was through with it. This Is quite the old dog you describe here! The challenge to the ladies ought to make for a very interesting reply or two. This is funny stuff. Well done in good fun
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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This one is a real "hoot." I got a great laugh here well before I was through with it. This Is quite the old dog you describe here! The challenge to the ladies ought to make for a very interesting reply or two. This is funny stuff. Well done in good fun
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Kingsrook. I really appreciate it, and I'm looking forward to the replies.
Comment from janalma
You are something else! I get such a kick out of your language and the way you put it all together. I'm giggling even as I type this. Such a high-falutin' fellow with such down-to-earth tastes. And so careful of his health. Lol. Penicillin, really. I'm sure you'll get some withering responses from some of the really good poets here. But I'm sure they won't wither you. Ahhaha.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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You are something else! I get such a kick out of your language and the way you put it all together. I'm giggling even as I type this. Such a high-falutin' fellow with such down-to-earth tastes. And so careful of his health. Lol. Penicillin, really. I'm sure you'll get some withering responses from some of the really good poets here. But I'm sure they won't wither you. Ahhaha.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Aw, Janalma, thank you so much for the sixer, and for the kind words. I'll be ready and waiting for any who'd like to post a riposte. Feel free to do the same! ;)
David
Comment from SteveY
Wow, quite the writing that you've got here my friend. Very unusual use of words "clucks of peckish hens, caustic sirens, rapscallion," just to name a few!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Wow, quite the writing that you've got here my friend. Very unusual use of words "clucks of peckish hens, caustic sirens, rapscallion," just to name a few!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Steve! I appreciate the review.
Comment from Just2Write
okay, I'll bite. My reply to this rogue is ready. Just waiting on a few bucks to post it.
I really like the meter in your poem, and have used the same in mine. Your rogue alter ego is quite the character, and needs to have someone take him to task. I hope I'm up for it.
Rose.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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okay, I'll bite. My reply to this rogue is ready. Just waiting on a few bucks to post it.
I really like the meter in your poem, and have used the same in mine. Your rogue alter ego is quite the character, and needs to have someone take him to task. I hope I'm up for it.
Rose.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Rose, I'm so glad you've decided to join the fray. Just be sure you're ready for the blowback. ;) Feel free to recruit others to your cause. Thank you, my friend.
Comment from Domino 2
With all these ladies on tap, I'm amazed this scoundrel has time to write about them. :-)
wonderful meter, words and imaginative phrases - both in fun and seriousness, makes this a special read.
Mind you, the guy in the picture reminds me more of Liberace than Don Juan. :-)
I wish I had your writing talent. Here's a sixer.
Cheers, Ted
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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With all these ladies on tap, I'm amazed this scoundrel has time to write about them. :-)
wonderful meter, words and imaginative phrases - both in fun and seriousness, makes this a special read.
Mind you, the guy in the picture reminds me more of Liberace than Don Juan. :-)
I wish I had your writing talent. Here's a sixer.
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Ted, I'm so grateful for the sixer, my friend, and for the kind words. However, you don't take second chair to anybody here, least of all me. I love your work. As for the pic, the Rogue is a metrosexual, a la Byron, so please forgive his flamboyance. ;)
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Thanks for your kind reply, David. I know I'm better than some, but I'm humble and honest enough to admit inferiority on occasions.
I never heard of a 'metrosexual' - is he someone who hangs around in a dirty mackintosh at underground train stations? :-)
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Yes, and mostly the Piccadilly line...but I wouldn't know anything about that now, would I? ;)
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LMAO!
I though I'd seen you somewhere before when we exchanged dirty magazines - or someone who resembled you. :-)
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My doppelganger, obviously. There's much to much smut for me to tend to it all by myself.
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LOL.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting piece. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece. You communicate the theme in a delightful manner.
Barbara
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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This is a very interesting piece. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter. The rhyming scheme enhances the piece. You communicate the theme in a delightful manner.
Barbara
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Barbara! :)
Comment from catch22
Very funny little bit of poetic satire! The rhythm and rhyming were top notch and I hope this alter ego doesn't fight you for the tv remote (LOL). I will have to think of a poetic retort, but I like the idea that you're encouraging other writers to take part in the fun. Take care!
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Very funny little bit of poetic satire! The rhythm and rhyming were top notch and I hope this alter ego doesn't fight you for the tv remote (LOL). I will have to think of a poetic retort, but I like the idea that you're encouraging other writers to take part in the fun. Take care!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi Gail. I absolutely love when other writers join in. A few years ago it was a battle royal between myself and several others, led by Sallyo. It was great fun, like a big poetic pillow fight. Feel free to join the fray. It does wonders for the Muse and the mind. Thank you for the great review.
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Very welcome and I will(eventually)...
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At your leisure, Gail. There will be more of them to react to...I just finished one that is sure to create a stir with the ladies (for good or ill). :)
David
Comment from paulah60
David, you've brilliantly encapsulated the archetype of the libertine. This wonderful offering speaks to several aspects of the female psyche: the idealistic part, who would say, "I'M going to be the one who tames him." (think again honey!). The ingenuous one, who would probably be speechless as he charms the pants off her (literally and figuratively). And the savvy one, who would say, "Been bitten before, blow it out your arse buddy!"
Your superlative language choice over-codes this character, which caricaturizes him, and exposes the cardboard cut-out nature of an extreme mode of existence. Whether or not this was your intention, it was the way I read it! But humour is the perfect way to do it, have fun in the process, and not ruffle too many feathers (what could be offensive suddenly becomes "cute"!). And your humour is oh so sophisticated!
Every stanza is a gem. My favourite though:
'I medicate my rigid force
With penicillin as my shield,
The sentinel for intercourse,
A scabbard for the sword I wield'
Love it!
Cheers
Paula
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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David, you've brilliantly encapsulated the archetype of the libertine. This wonderful offering speaks to several aspects of the female psyche: the idealistic part, who would say, "I'M going to be the one who tames him." (think again honey!). The ingenuous one, who would probably be speechless as he charms the pants off her (literally and figuratively). And the savvy one, who would say, "Been bitten before, blow it out your arse buddy!"
Your superlative language choice over-codes this character, which caricaturizes him, and exposes the cardboard cut-out nature of an extreme mode of existence. Whether or not this was your intention, it was the way I read it! But humour is the perfect way to do it, have fun in the process, and not ruffle too many feathers (what could be offensive suddenly becomes "cute"!). And your humour is oh so sophisticated!
Every stanza is a gem. My favourite though:
'I medicate my rigid force
With penicillin as my shield,
The sentinel for intercourse,
A scabbard for the sword I wield'
Love it!
Cheers
Paula
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Paula, I wish I could nominate you for reviewer of the month again, because you absolutely nailed the conceit here, from the lofty language to the disarming style. It seems quite a few didn't really catch the method to my madness, but I'm grateful and delighted that you hit the mark...much as the rogue always does. ;) Thank you so very much for the six, and the rogue would most definitely give you the nine in payment for it. ;)
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I so appreciate that you even considered the nomination, David. Without wanting to seem obsequious (LOL and ecch!), I find your work a pleasure to read, and so easy to review. Your metrical approach (which is my preference in both reading and writing) makes it so much more accessible to the reader. And even though there's much implicitness in your pieces, you don't use obtuse, flowery language that can make understanding a real struggle. I look forward to more, but I'm gonna run out of sixes!!
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You deserve it. You not only understand rhyme and meter, but you always correctly analyze my meaning, and that is validating and appreciated. Thanks SO much, and I'm happy to accept a six, real or virtual, whenever you feel I deserve it. I just finished a new Rogue poem today that came out of nowhere, 10 quatrains of internal and external rhyme, and it's quite naughty. I can't wait to post it. Wait...I mean, HE can't wait to post it. ;)
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Oh don't let him take over!!!
I'm impressed that you churn them out so quickly. I don't have trouble conceptualising, but must edit ad nauseam (maybe because I'm still a neophyte where poetry is concerned). I have yet to advance beyond abcb, and abab LOL!
And yes, they do, and don't, come out of nowhere. Clearly, you have an intimate relationship with your muse. That takes time and hard work to get there, and a commitment to developing your psychic muscles. Look forward to meeting the Rogue again!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi David - This is a really very good read. Some really excellent descriptive lines about a rogue - him on the bed - I love it all but particularly stanza four. 'A whirling dervish armed with verse - very good metaphor. Eight stanzas in abab - all well written. Who is this rapscallion I wonder who lauds the single life he blesses. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Hi David - This is a really very good read. Some really excellent descriptive lines about a rogue - him on the bed - I love it all but particularly stanza four. 'A whirling dervish armed with verse - very good metaphor. Eight stanzas in abab - all well written. Who is this rapscallion I wonder who lauds the single life he blesses. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Dorothy. He is my alter-ego, or rather, my excuse to say what I'm sometimes thinking, perhaps. Who knows, really? ;) I appreciate it!
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
nice touches of alliteration
I'm laughing myself silly over the penicillin passage
this guy is one piece of work LOL
excellent use of iambic meter and enjambment
strong verb choices add to the "life" of the story line
This is one of those guys every woman longs to meet in a bar just so she can throw a drink in his face :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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solid use of abab rhyming
nice touches of alliteration
I'm laughing myself silly over the penicillin passage
this guy is one piece of work LOL
excellent use of iambic meter and enjambment
strong verb choices add to the "life" of the story line
This is one of those guys every woman longs to meet in a bar just so she can throw a drink in his face :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2014
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Thank you very much, Brooke, for your adroit analysis of the rogue, and the disclosure that women DO, indeed, want to buy him a drink...even if it ends up on his face. ;)
