To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Stardust in Her Eyes"Free Verse Poetry
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Comment from Lovinia
What a delightful love poem Mikey. Such passion and excitement ... how lucky you are to be so loved. Yet not luck, I bet you are everything she thinks you are .... and at the same time that dear sweet little boy. lol
Magnificent presentation ... I love "this little bright eyed boisterous boy
that spins and runs on Saturn's swirling rings
chasing marbles 'round and 'round against the wind" - great phrasing and unique thought... just you for sure. :)))
A gorgeous romantic tribute to your true love in your own unique style, which always 'says' a trillion times beyond the words. So pleased you excelled in POM and cast with some of the best. Well done. Bravo! Huge congratulations. Hugs Lovi xoxoxox
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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What a delightful love poem Mikey. Such passion and excitement ... how lucky you are to be so loved. Yet not luck, I bet you are everything she thinks you are .... and at the same time that dear sweet little boy. lol
Magnificent presentation ... I love "this little bright eyed boisterous boy
that spins and runs on Saturn's swirling rings
chasing marbles 'round and 'round against the wind" - great phrasing and unique thought... just you for sure. :)))
A gorgeous romantic tribute to your true love in your own unique style, which always 'says' a trillion times beyond the words. So pleased you excelled in POM and cast with some of the best. Well done. Bravo! Huge congratulations. Hugs Lovi xoxoxox
Comment Written 28-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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I am so happy you enjoyed it. I was most shocked to be nominated. It truly never crossed my mind. Yes, some big names there. Wow, I got quite a few votes too. You are too sweet. I don't think I can smile any bigger than this without calling the paramedics. Thank you so much!! hugs back, mikey
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You have such talent dear Mikey. This had particular brilliance. Well deserved win .... the best of the best. More hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment from amanda98653
yesh! I knew you would get nominated someday. your free verse poems are SUPERB.
I LOVE this one
"She sees me as a lustrous light of celestial origin
a blazing-blast, blistering-fast, free-flight beam
to thrill the sky's wide-eyed gaze
this little bright eyed boisterous boy
that spins and runs on Saturn's swirling rings
chasing marbles 'round and 'round against the wind"
I can't believe I never reviewed this one. It's super duper exceptional. The alliterations in "b" are fascinating and go well with the flow.
"spins and runs on Saturn's swirling rings"- wow!
this is truly poetic, Mikey!
"watching ripples write adventures
on the water's flustered face"
awesomeness. exceptional!
hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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yesh! I knew you would get nominated someday. your free verse poems are SUPERB.
I LOVE this one
"She sees me as a lustrous light of celestial origin
a blazing-blast, blistering-fast, free-flight beam
to thrill the sky's wide-eyed gaze
this little bright eyed boisterous boy
that spins and runs on Saturn's swirling rings
chasing marbles 'round and 'round against the wind"
I can't believe I never reviewed this one. It's super duper exceptional. The alliterations in "b" are fascinating and go well with the flow.
"spins and runs on Saturn's swirling rings"- wow!
this is truly poetic, Mikey!
"watching ripples write adventures
on the water's flustered face"
awesomeness. exceptional!
hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 24-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2013
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Hi Amanda, I am so behind in everything that it is insane. So, I found one of yours so I can say hello and Happy New Year!! We did pretty good. We both got votes and didn't get laughed off the site. hahaha. I was happy to be nominated and shocked. You picked the line that I thought was pretty good too! You keep disappearing and I keep thinking I will have to paddle a canoe to China to see how you are. I hope you are well. It will be fun being millionaires next year and looking back and laughing about how we were poor in 2013. hahaha. mikey
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hahaha Hey Mikey! what's up yo. I was caught up with some family issues. AGAIN! oh well. Man, I was so shocked when The Whispering Tree got nominated! Yours was my favorite!! yipee! Man..I am missing out so many things..ugh!
It's an honor to know you, Mikey. Interesting that we both signed up in August. I was soo happy about it..addicted yo!
Did you go anywhere for X'mas? I was pretty damn lonely. ugh!
I am thinking about spending more time on fanstory in January..I mean..it's my birthday month, so miracles bound to happen! heehee. fingers crossed! yipee!
haha. Haappy Holidays, Mikey! Have a great year:)
hugs!
Amanda
Comment from Petriesan
this work draw me in. . .the language is vivid and clear - I especially like this: his silly small boy that skims rocks
from shore to distant shore unseen
watching ripples write adventures
on the water's flustered face
and stardust in her eyes is incredible
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this work draw me in. . .the language is vivid and clear - I especially like this: his silly small boy that skims rocks
from shore to distant shore unseen
watching ripples write adventures
on the water's flustered face
and stardust in her eyes is incredible
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
Comment from fastdigits
You breach the boundaries of artistic
endeavor with your poem of love that
whispers words filled with adoration
and the warm glow of ever lasting devotion
to that one and only who also looks
at you with stardust in her eyes.
Well done
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You breach the boundaries of artistic
endeavor with your poem of love that
whispers words filled with adoration
and the warm glow of ever lasting devotion
to that one and only who also looks
at you with stardust in her eyes.
Well done
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
You wrote a really beautiful poem here and I can understand why you won the Poem of the Month contest. (I'm sure you came 1st - if not you should have been - I voted for you). Beautifully descriptive and imaginative - the things a 'silly' boy will do for love. A lovely read. Merry Christmas and all the best for the New Year to you and yours. Regards Dorothy
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You wrote a really beautiful poem here and I can understand why you won the Poem of the Month contest. (I'm sure you came 1st - if not you should have been - I voted for you). Beautifully descriptive and imaginative - the things a 'silly' boy will do for love. A lovely read. Merry Christmas and all the best for the New Year to you and yours. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 23-Dec-2013
Comment from Titanx9
Oh, my goodness, what a great world it would be if all little boys could look back on their childhood with such fondness and love. Mothers or guardians that inspire such a poem should be venerated and congratulated for a job well done! This poem, especially the last couple of lines, brought tears to my eyes. Well done and beautifully written!!
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Oh, my goodness, what a great world it would be if all little boys could look back on their childhood with such fondness and love. Mothers or guardians that inspire such a poem should be venerated and congratulated for a job well done! This poem, especially the last couple of lines, brought tears to my eyes. Well done and beautifully written!!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
Comment from B. Diehl
I'm giving you six stars for this one. I love it. The way you changed the font color to highlight certain lines/words helped me understand the most important points you were trying to portray. Excellent work.
-B<3
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I'm giving you six stars for this one. I love it. The way you changed the font color to highlight certain lines/words helped me understand the most important points you were trying to portray. Excellent work.
-B<3
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
Comment from Bobby Jo
In other words, we never see ourselves the way our loved ones see us. The words are powerful and I felt the star-dust in his eyes, as he disgrades himself, yet would die for her.
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In other words, we never see ourselves the way our loved ones see us. The words are powerful and I felt the star-dust in his eyes, as he disgrades himself, yet would die for her.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
Comment from eafournier
"Stardust in her Eyes" is a very touching poem about perception and reality. Its great to be put on a pedestal, but its a little scary up there. You are lucky to have such a woman and she is lucky to have you. Nicely written!
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"Stardust in her Eyes" is a very touching poem about perception and reality. Its great to be put on a pedestal, but its a little scary up there. You are lucky to have such a woman and she is lucky to have you. Nicely written!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2013
Comment from boxergirl
Nice job, Michael. Your poem is bubbling forth
with love as you describe how she looks at you and you, the "lucky little boy" would do anything for her. So romantically penned. Thanks for sharing! BG 8-)
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Nice job, Michael. Your poem is bubbling forth
with love as you describe how she looks at you and you, the "lucky little boy" would do anything for her. So romantically penned. Thanks for sharing! BG 8-)
Comment Written 21-Dec-2013
