Sewn Into the Sky
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Comment from c_lucas
Loneliness is a learned trait. We are all masters of our own universe and when we are alone, we are still in good company. This is very well written. Good job.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Loneliness is a learned trait. We are all masters of our own universe and when we are alone, we are still in good company. This is very well written. Good job.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much. I've been pretty sick, hence the delay in getting back. Truly thank you so much. Thank you
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You're welcome, Trudy. Charlie
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Error: Sorry. You're welcome, Gregory. Charlie
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting to read.
The sky and universe hold so many secrets
That we cannot ever imagine.
Life could be everywhere and similar,we don't know.
The secrets of all life is everywhere in the sky.
Honey tree
?coliseum spelling
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Very interesting to read.
The sky and universe hold so many secrets
That we cannot ever imagine.
Life could be everywhere and similar,we don't know.
The secrets of all life is everywhere in the sky.
Honey tree
?coliseum spelling
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you so much. I've been pretty sick, hence the delay in getting back. Truly thank you so much. I think coliseum is correct. I thought the same thing though!! :)
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How true your words are "Sewn Into The Sky."
Annie
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Truly thank you. I'm so glad you got it. Really.
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I feel life is out there.
I enjoyed what you wrote.
Annie
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I really liked what you wrote.
Annie
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Thank you truly Annie
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I am glad you liked the review.
I enjoyed reading what you wrote.
Annie
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I am glad you liked the review.
annie
Comment from TOMORAL
I agree we are connected, this thing called the human race. This was a delightful read, deep and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing your enormous talent. I give this my last six.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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I agree we are connected, this thing called the human race. This was a delightful read, deep and thought provoking. Thanks for sharing your enormous talent. I give this my last six.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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I am so so GREATLY humbled by this review. I've been pretty sick, hence the delay. I'm so sorry. TRULY from my heart, thank you. You really seem to "get me". For that I am even more grateful. Thank you my friend.
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Greg
This is an amazing piece of writing. It strikes me more as prose poetry than free verse, and that's OK. Your skillful use of language created vivid imagery, a feeling of stark aloneness and a sense of the night's ubiquitous darkness.
These two lines are profound and stopped me cold in the read to ponder their meaning:
A man with but a shadow lives in solitude, solely by willful choice,
for he who is truly alone looks into my eyes, content with his doubt
And the resolution of the poem in the last stanza is superb.
Well done, my new poetic friend.
Ray
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Good Evening, Greg
This is an amazing piece of writing. It strikes me more as prose poetry than free verse, and that's OK. Your skillful use of language created vivid imagery, a feeling of stark aloneness and a sense of the night's ubiquitous darkness.
These two lines are profound and stopped me cold in the read to ponder their meaning:
A man with but a shadow lives in solitude, solely by willful choice,
for he who is truly alone looks into my eyes, content with his doubt
And the resolution of the poem in the last stanza is superb.
Well done, my new poetic friend.
Ray
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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I'm so sorry for the delay. I've been pretty sick. I am beyond GRATEFUL and HUMBLED. You are so kind. I think your a bit right about prose but it fit free verse according to definition. I like prose better though between us ;)
In the two lines in question
A man with but a shadow lives in solitude, solely by willful choice,
for he who is truly alone looks into my eyes, content with his doubt
I meant a man who is "alone" chooses to be alone for he never is really "alone". But one who doesn't believe in God, is content with his doubt, IS alone.
Its hard to explain in so few words. I don't mean being alone is a choice, I meant alone with doubt. Hmm, does that make sense? Sorry, if it doesn't. I can try harder.
I truly want you to know how immensely grateful I am for this review. It gives me hope and confidence that I have talent. Thank you from me heart my friend.
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Greg,
I'm terribly sorry to hear you've been ill, and I hope you're much better now. Your very warm and kind reply is greatly appreciated. But believe me, you are indeed a most talented poet and writer!
-ray
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Thank you so much. Really. That means a lot. It really does.
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
This was haunting. Your notes helped guide me to your meaning, but, the poem stands quite well by itself. I like that you used the enveloping night in illustration.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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This was haunting. Your notes helped guide me to your meaning, but, the poem stands quite well by itself. I like that you used the enveloping night in illustration.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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I'm so sorry for the delay. I've been pretty sick. Truly thank you. Thank you so much. I like that you liked that illustration. My goal!
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I hope you are feeling better!
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Thank you. I'm getting there. :)
Comment from pickthorn
A mournful lament of one that has known much loneliness in
his life. A tragic image you project with lines like:
"A dog howls within earshot ~ a deafening pitch,
like the pull of a bow across crusted violin strings
It continues to whine into my life unaware of me"
Great message, well told. Good luck, my friend
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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A mournful lament of one that has known much loneliness in
his life. A tragic image you project with lines like:
"A dog howls within earshot ~ a deafening pitch,
like the pull of a bow across crusted violin strings
It continues to whine into my life unaware of me"
Great message, well told. Good luck, my friend
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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I'm so sorry for the delay. I've been pretty sick. Truly thank you. Thank you so much. Thank you for wishing me good luck too.
Comment from Teresa Paul
I had to review the sweet poet that reviewed my work. I am so impressed with the beauty and the lovely flow of your work. You were so right to pursue this passion and I look forward to reviewing more of your talented work. Thank you for sharing these piece. So very well done. Yours, Teresa.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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I had to review the sweet poet that reviewed my work. I am so impressed with the beauty and the lovely flow of your work. You were so right to pursue this passion and I look forward to reviewing more of your talented work. Thank you for sharing these piece. So very well done. Yours, Teresa.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you Teresa. Truly. I'm sorry, I've been sick, hence the delay. You're such a sweet soul. Thank you for reviewing my work and for the compliments. Truly thank you. I'm looking forward to more of yours too!
Comment from misscookie
You capture my7 attention from the first line to the last
I felt spell bounce from the start.
And each word had me on the edge of my seat.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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You capture my7 attention from the first line to the last
I felt spell bounce from the start.
And each word had me on the edge of my seat.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you! I'm so sorry for the delay. I've been pretty sick. Truly thank you. Thank you so much. Your review on the edge of your seat? That's a HUGE compliment!
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good internal rhyme in night tonight
excellent alliteration in hiss of humming and vacant voice
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal to senses not limited to the visual
a very evocative, expressive tone
Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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excellent use of enjambment to keep your thoughts flowing from line to line
good internal rhyme in night tonight
excellent alliteration in hiss of humming and vacant voice
vivid detail of setting with strong sensory appeal to senses not limited to the visual
a very evocative, expressive tone
Brooke
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you Brooke. You're hard to get a six from! ;) I'm gonna try one of these days! I LOVE your reviews. So obviously intelligent and from a true poet. I love that you catch the small things most don't. Thank you from my heart. I'm sorry for the delay, I've been a little sick.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good eye catching photo. Good descriptive words that draws a clear image in my mind. Good alliteration. Clear error free message that holds my attention from start to finish. Good work.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Good eye catching photo. Good descriptive words that draws a clear image in my mind. Good alliteration. Clear error free message that holds my attention from start to finish. Good work.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2013
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Thank you! Thank you! I'm so sorry for the delay. I've been pretty sick. Truly thank you. Thank you so much.
