Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I like the format of your verses, Treischel, it is different and works really well. I love the subject, your grandson seems to have been having a great time. How is your wife doing now, is she home? xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2013

Thank you Sandra, yes, she is home and doing well so far.

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Boy, does this one bring me back. My grandmother's backyard was filled with old growth oak and maple and those leaf piles were huge and over five feet deep! Great fun that you capture in your poem.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013

Thanks ravenblack. I had those wonderful childhood flashbacks with this one too!

Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Treischel,
This is an excellent joyful poem. It has beautiful flow an rhythm. It has good rhyme and figurative language. The imagery illustrated by the picture is excellent.
Preston

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013

Thank you very much, Preston. Btw, I got your book in the mail yesterday, it is very well organized and written. I hope you do well.

reply by Preston McWhorter on 22-Oct-2013

I am glad you got it. If you could review it for Amazon.com etc. I would appreciate it. Whatever your honest opinion of the poetry is. Do not worry about hurting sales. All publicity is good publicity.
Preston

reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013

I will but will need a few days.

reply by Preston McWhorter on 25-Oct-2013

No hurry. Take your time.
Preston

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

A delightful child four poem which captures the spontaneity and fun in this childs harmless play.
I like the style, format and overall presentation and a great subject choice.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2013

Thank you Shirley. It was a fun write.

Comment from Angel Debbie

Exceptional

Great little write. I remember days with my children like this now I enjoy my grandchildren and their leave fun. Thank You for bringing memories of the past back for my enjoyment!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013

Thank you Andel Debbie. You're welcome. I really appreciate the award of so many stars.

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Very well done, a fun piece showing the spirit of a child in fall. We never had enough leaves to jump into when I was a kid on the desert. Really cute picture too. Rox

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013

Thanks Rox, you had those sand dunes to roll down.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

Jeremy is sooo cute, Tom!
A well-crafted Child Four dedicated to children, as well as autumn;
He appears to be having a wonderful time as fall provides more than beautiful visions.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013

Thank you Margaret. I actually took a video of him diving into those leaves. He had a ball.

reply by Capricorn30 on 22-Oct-2013

Oh, no doubt!
I could never partake in this event, I didn't have ample trees in my yard!

Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER

Excellent

Leaves,
When they are gathered into large piles,
The chance for play achieves
Big smiles.

Kids
Will dive inside the spongy middle. LOVE this line
Makes their smiling eyelids
Giggle.

Joy
Was soon WITH WILD ABANDON carried.
Lots of leaves HAS this boy
Buried.

Then
When disappearing before our eyes,
His head pops out again.
Surprise!!!

A well crafted, boisterous piece of autumn fun well presented upon a palette of humor.

Regards:

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2013

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2013

Thank you Stephen. I see the alliteration in your suggestion.