Domestic cacophony
cacophony poem10 total reviews
Comment from allborn66
This is a great poem. You set the proper tone for the contest. The word choice is good. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter.
Barbara
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is a great poem. You set the proper tone for the contest. The word choice is good. The tone is appropriate to the subject matter.
Barbara
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Delighted with this review.zanya
Comment from michaelcahill
a fine entry here. meets the contest requirements. this is well written and smooth flowing and not just a list of discordant words. well done, mike
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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a fine entry here. meets the contest requirements. this is well written and smooth flowing and not just a list of discordant words. well done, mike
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Delighted with this review.zanya
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Each household embodies a different cacophony of sound. You have depicted yours audibly well. I smiled when you had some peace at midnight when you heard the church chimes. Good luck, Carolyn
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Each household embodies a different cacophony of sound. You have depicted yours audibly well. I smiled when you had some peace at midnight when you heard the church chimes. Good luck, Carolyn
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Glad you enjoyed it - thanks very much zanya
Comment from Meta4ors
Brought all the sounds to life in this poem and I really enjoyed it. I might not capitalize each line just to change tempo to account for sound changes for the reader but really very good. This should do well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Brought all the sounds to life in this poem and I really enjoyed it. I might not capitalize each line just to change tempo to account for sound changes for the reader but really very good. This should do well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.zanya
Comment from vapros
Cacophony, indeed! This composition should qualify for the contest mentioned. The various loud noises around the house are cause for aspirin. Glad to hear that peace has been restored - before tomorrow, and again tomorrow. Good work.
v
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Cacophony, indeed! This composition should qualify for the contest mentioned. The various loud noises around the house are cause for aspirin. Glad to hear that peace has been restored - before tomorrow, and again tomorrow. Good work.
v
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I am delighted with this review.zanya
Comment from annatberry
I really liked your poem. It should creativity in talent. It also showed humor and some truth. Your picture was perfect and it matched your poem so well. Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I really liked your poem. It should creativity in talent. It also showed humor and some truth. Your picture was perfect and it matched your poem so well. Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thanks for reviewing and the positive comments.zanya
Comment from Nosha17
You have succeeded in creating a poem within the confines of the poetic type and it reads very well. You have made good use of language and imagery and the rhymes are good. Enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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You have succeeded in creating a poem within the confines of the poetic type and it reads very well. You have made good use of language and imagery and the rhymes are good. Enjoyable read.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is a superb review. zanya
Comment from ronnie k
A good theme that is dressed in a smooth moving rhyme pattern, made so enjoyable for the family theme that is all smiles of joy and appreciation.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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A good theme that is dressed in a smooth moving rhyme pattern, made so enjoyable for the family theme that is all smiles of joy and appreciation.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is a great review.zanya
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Shouting to get the mower is the weakest line in an otherwise terrific poem. No suggestions, but it does trip the rhythm somewhat.
good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Shouting to get the mower is the weakest line in an otherwise terrific poem. No suggestions, but it does trip the rhythm somewhat.
good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thanks for the useful suggestions- really appreciated . zanya
Comment from lorijean
A day in the life of......A great little poem telling of a busy and noisy day, well written and a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing....
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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A day in the life of......A great little poem telling of a busy and noisy day, well written and a pleasure to read, thank you for sharing....
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Delighted with this review.zanya