thoughts and feelings in poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Little noise makers"poems reflecting my thoughts and feelings
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Comment from CammyCards
The last part of the poem does contain many jangling and jarring words, and we can really hear the kids' efforts to please. The beginning is quite soft; this emphasizes the cacophony of the second part.Thank you for using my picture to illustrate your work.
CammyCards
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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The last part of the poem does contain many jangling and jarring words, and we can really hear the kids' efforts to please. The beginning is quite soft; this emphasizes the cacophony of the second part.Thank you for using my picture to illustrate your work.
CammyCards
Comment Written 17-Oct-2013
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thank you for your review and kind words
Comment from Tessa Kay
I can imagine three year olds being very noisy. Your noises, though are quite plesant (ring-a-ling, singing etc.)
A cacophony is something that hurts the ears, harsh, jarring.
The rhyming is not quite consistent either, but the picture you describe is lovely.
:) Tessa
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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I can imagine three year olds being very noisy. Your noises, though are quite plesant (ring-a-ling, singing etc.)
A cacophony is something that hurts the ears, harsh, jarring.
The rhyming is not quite consistent either, but the picture you describe is lovely.
:) Tessa
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Comment Written 16-Oct-2013
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thank you for your review and kind words
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Perfect entry for the Cacophony competition. You have filled all the requirements and used plenty of harsh, jarring words - a good idea in ten lines. Good luck. Regards Dorothy
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Perfect entry for the Cacophony competition. You have filled all the requirements and used plenty of harsh, jarring words - a good idea in ten lines. Good luck. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
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thank you
Comment from allborn66
I really like this poem. I'm not certain it is a good entry for the contest though. I did not get a harsh, discordant or jarring feel from the word choice.
Barbara
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I really like this poem. I'm not certain it is a good entry for the contest though. I did not get a harsh, discordant or jarring feel from the word choice.
Barbara
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
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thank you
Comment from michaelcahill
so happy that you wrote a real poem with meaning and some enjoyment for the reader. this is a very nice piece. very uplifting images that we can picture immediately. so well done. mike
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so happy that you wrote a real poem with meaning and some enjoyment for the reader. this is a very nice piece. very uplifting images that we can picture immediately. so well done. mike
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
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thank you for your review and kind words. blessings, sandy
Comment from Gungalo
Drums banging- BOOM,BOOM,DA BOOM,
Bells ringing-ding,ding ring-a-ling,
The jangling of those tambourines.
Add in all the shake,shake,shake,
for the children with the shakers,
Welcome to my class of little noise makers.
You have the best noise makers in the whole wide world. Heeheh and you can tell them I said so.
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Drums banging- BOOM,BOOM,DA BOOM,
Bells ringing-ding,ding ring-a-ling,
The jangling of those tambourines.
Add in all the shake,shake,shake,
for the children with the shakers,
Welcome to my class of little noise makers.
You have the best noise makers in the whole wide world. Heeheh and you can tell them I said so.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
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thank you for your review and kind words,
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Smile.
Comment from ravenblack
Good use of cacophony. Sounds like a really fun class. Just one minor ding-a-ling - my three year old class- do you mean the class is 3 years old or that it is a class of 3 year olds?
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Good use of cacophony. Sounds like a really fun class. Just one minor ding-a-ling - my three year old class- do you mean the class is 3 years old or that it is a class of 3 year olds?
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you for your review and kind words, my class of 15 three year olds.Thanks for pointing that out to me. blessings, sandy
Comment from sunnilicious
Nice artwork. Interesting poetic form. And this poem came out great. Such movement with rhythm and rhymes. Creative. Great narrative. Enjoyable to read. Fantastic work. Good luck in the contest.
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Nice artwork. Interesting poetic form. And this poem came out great. Such movement with rhythm and rhymes. Creative. Great narrative. Enjoyable to read. Fantastic work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
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thank you
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
There is no doubt that three year olds can create a cacophony of sound. Add 'rhythm band' and you really have little noise makers. Good luck, I enjoyed this one. Carolyn
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There is no doubt that three year olds can create a cacophony of sound. Add 'rhythm band' and you really have little noise makers. Good luck, I enjoyed this one. Carolyn
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
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thank you
Comment from Cookie333
I can just see the little ones all decked out and enjoying the sounds they create. Definite noise feeling with this one,
thank you
and good luck,
karen
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I can just see the little ones all decked out and enjoying the sounds they create. Definite noise feeling with this one,
thank you
and good luck,
karen
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
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thank you