Late
Love, Time, and Death51 total reviews
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
We've never tried writing fiction but this was very interesting. I had a sister-in-law that had to be related to this girl, she was late for her wedding. She's late for everything, no matter what. God loves you and so do we.
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We've never tried writing fiction but this was very interesting. I had a sister-in-law that had to be related to this girl, she was late for her wedding. She's late for everything, no matter what. God loves you and so do we.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from Terra Dane
An excellent use of the prompt. What more can be said? Sometimes prompts create awkwardly forced stories, but this I believed.
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An excellent use of the prompt. What more can be said? Sometimes prompts create awkwardly forced stories, but this I believed.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from Charade
I like the realistic human feeling in the piece. Sorry, I don't know how else to say that. It was a quick read, right down to the point. I like that too! Great job, and good luck.
I don't see any room for improvement ;)
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I like the realistic human feeling in the piece. Sorry, I don't know how else to say that. It was a quick read, right down to the point. I like that too! Great job, and good luck.
I don't see any room for improvement ;)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from Norbanus
You sure filled the prompt of 'Love, Time, and Death'. It is a wonderfully imaginative story. I found no opportunities for improvement. Nicely done.
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You sure filled the prompt of 'Love, Time, and Death'. It is a wonderfully imaginative story. I found no opportunities for improvement. Nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from pbroussard209
What a great story, so very romantic and emotional. It reminds me of something that I heard about several years ago. The police kept getting reports of a naked lady walking down a mountain highway. When they arrived in the area they found an area where it looked like a car went off the road. When they got down there they found the car, the woman was dead but her young son was asleep, in the front seat. (I'm not sure if it was a urban legend or if it was true.) I just remember the story.
Anyway I loved your story it was great.
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What a great story, so very romantic and emotional. It reminds me of something that I heard about several years ago. The police kept getting reports of a naked lady walking down a mountain highway. When they arrived in the area they found an area where it looked like a car went off the road. When they got down there they found the car, the woman was dead but her young son was asleep, in the front seat. (I'm not sure if it was a urban legend or if it was true.) I just remember the story.
Anyway I loved your story it was great.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from barkingdog
I liked this and hope she gets to see him again at the same spot of the crash a year later. How could one be a skeptic after that rescue?
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I liked this and hope she gets to see him again at the same spot of the crash a year later. How could one be a skeptic after that rescue?
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, mystery writer, wherever it came from, I suggest you go there often, wrest more such fine, ethereal stories from the crypt beneath it's vaulted darkness, because this was very good.
The writing was spot-on and the dialogue believable. The story, as a whole, was chilling, well written and wrought with suspense, such as the scene in which Jim rescues his wife , Tammy, from the burning wreckage.
Very well done, good luck in the contest.
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Well, mystery writer, wherever it came from, I suggest you go there often, wrest more such fine, ethereal stories from the crypt beneath it's vaulted darkness, because this was very good.
The writing was spot-on and the dialogue believable. The story, as a whole, was chilling, well written and wrought with suspense, such as the scene in which Jim rescues his wife , Tammy, from the burning wreckage.
Very well done, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2013
Comment from Gungalo
This is a heart wrenching story for sure. To make it out alive and her husband did not is so very sad. Well she won't be late this time for sure.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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This is a heart wrenching story for sure. To make it out alive and her husband did not is so very sad. Well she won't be late this time for sure.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much.
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Smile.
Comment from annatberry
Great job on your story. I hope that it is not a true story. You kept my interest and you did a good job with the details. I usually don't like to read about death and car accidents, but your story kept me reading wanting to find out what happened at the end.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Great job on your story. I hope that it is not a true story. You kept my interest and you did a good job with the details. I usually don't like to read about death and car accidents, but your story kept me reading wanting to find out what happened at the end.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much. No, it is totally fictional
Comment from Craigitar
Well written, engaging story. Nice twists here and there with a lesson on promptness learned in the end. Good write and read. Luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Well written, engaging story. Nice twists here and there with a lesson on promptness learned in the end. Good write and read. Luck with the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank you vey much
