Late
Love, Time, and Death51 total reviews
Comment from EMB
Actually, she should have not married him. There were obvious warning signs (though I can't really see what the real problem was). Still, something wasn't right in their relationship, long before the accident.
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Actually, she should have not married him. There were obvious warning signs (though I can't really see what the real problem was). Still, something wasn't right in their relationship, long before the accident.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2013
Comment from pattipac
Your story about a punctual husband, and his always-late wife builds to a anticipated climax where the wife rushes to meet her deceased husband at the exact time and spot of his demise; one year earlier.
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Your story about a punctual husband, and his always-late wife builds to a anticipated climax where the wife rushes to meet her deceased husband at the exact time and spot of his demise; one year earlier.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from Gert sherwood
My goodness lancellot
what a exciting supernatural story.
Well told and a lesson try not to be late
I like your closure Jim will always be on time.
Gert
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My goodness lancellot
what a exciting supernatural story.
Well told and a lesson try not to be late
I like your closure Jim will always be on time.
Gert
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from Ric Myworld
I'm new to this site. This is your first piece that I've read. So, I can't help you with where it came from, but all I can say is: Be glad that you found it! Outstanding Job! Vivid, creative, thought provoking, and emotionally draining, even, for those of use who aren't usually sentimentalists.
Thanks for the outstanding read!
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I'm new to this site. This is your first piece that I've read. So, I can't help you with where it came from, but all I can say is: Be glad that you found it! Outstanding Job! Vivid, creative, thought provoking, and emotionally draining, even, for those of use who aren't usually sentimentalists.
Thanks for the outstanding read!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from bluedragon776
This is quite powerful, I think. Intense and done in just a few words. So Jim died and then pulled her out of the car as a ghost? Ok, I can buy that.
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This is quite powerful, I think. Intense and done in just a few words. So Jim died and then pulled her out of the car as a ghost? Ok, I can buy that.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from justmarly
Oh dear this is sad. To lose your lover. He was there helping you out. I try not be late. I'm normally early anywhere I go. This is so sad and after losing my boyfriend it hits home. Thank you for sharing. JM
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Oh dear this is sad. To lose your lover. He was there helping you out. I try not be late. I'm normally early anywhere I go. This is so sad and after losing my boyfriend it hits home. Thank you for sharing. JM
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from TOMORAL
Touching, heart wrenching, moving tale. As one is always on time, even early, I understand Jim's need to be on time, until at last, he was too late. On time for his love, though. Right on time. Excellent.
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Touching, heart wrenching, moving tale. As one is always on time, even early, I understand Jim's need to be on time, until at last, he was too late. On time for his love, though. Right on time. Excellent.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from mizzkris20
Your story sent chills through my body and right back again. Your story held my attention from the BEGINNING to End. You should do well in the contest. Good luck
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Your story sent chills through my body and right back again. Your story held my attention from the BEGINNING to End. You should do well in the contest. Good luck
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from Dustybones
Old Jim is going to show up in the next chapter. Good start to a story. Try and keep it going at least one more chapter to close out the night!
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Old Jim is going to show up in the next chapter. Good start to a story. Try and keep it going at least one more chapter to close out the night!
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
Comment from Sanku
the writing was spot on and the story sent a chill/thrill down my spine .it is very very believable and from how you have built up his character it is just like hii .to be there at the right time and right place. i felt sad that he was no more, that he had to die for her to change, good story ,well told brief and with a fine flow.
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the writing was spot on and the story sent a chill/thrill down my spine .it is very very believable and from how you have built up his character it is just like hii .to be there at the right time and right place. i felt sad that he was no more, that he had to die for her to change, good story ,well told brief and with a fine flow.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2013
